I have been granted the honor of having one of my poems printed in a local Poetry Anthology. Please give me your honest opinion of what you think about this one as it is my very first attempt at free style. (Up until now my poems have been metered and rhymed.)
PATTERNS
Prisms of tiny rainbows
Dance about my room as the
Moonlight reflects off the raindrops
On my window creating
Colors and graceful patterns
That tenderly caress the shadows
Not only in my room,
But also in my mind.
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By: Vicki Lynn 2012
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Comments: 10
But, it's perfectly fine just the way you did it. And congratulatios.
Thank you so much for sharing with Sadies Points
Congrats on getting published! That's absolutely wonderful :) !!!
I think it's a lovely poem.
But if I'm putting on my critiquing hat (and feel free to disregard my opinion) I'd adjust line three a bit; I found the repeition of the word "thru" somewhat distracting. Perhaps something like, "Light shines inside the raindrops" instead.