by Stirling D.
Member since:
September 12, 2006

Suicide Watch (Conversant for Mindful Poetry)

April 12, 2012 03:11 PM UTC
views: 0 | 12 people recommend this | comments: 27

She cries
In bed alone
Feeling misunderstood
While contemplating suicide

Will she really do it this time?

The ringing phone awakens her
It’s her best friend from school
A smile appears
Life’s good.

 

Comments: 27

Dennis Gilman Apr 12, 2012, 3:28pm UTC
This is good. I won't try one today, but I love this style.
Stirling D. Apr 12, 2012, 4:07pm UTC
Thank you, Dennis. It's my first time with this form. I like it too.
A. F. Stewart Apr 12, 2012, 4:00pm UTC
A strong poem.
Stirling D. Apr 12, 2012, 4:07pm UTC
Thanks, A.F. :)
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 12, 2012, 4:02pm UTC
I hope Robert can find the energy (since so much of it is being spent healing) to read these conversants. I think he'd be esp. gratified to see that it inspired one such as this, Stirling.

Appearing with pleasure at Mindful Poetry.
Stirling D. Apr 12, 2012, 4:08pm UTC
I hope so too! It's a very good form and all speedy healing to him that birthed it.
Veronica Hosking Apr 12, 2012, 5:12pm UTC
The life of a teenager up and down in the blink of an eye. Well written
Stirling D. Apr 12, 2012, 5:42pm UTC
You've got it, Veronica. Thanks!
JOHN BECK Apr 12, 2012, 6:19pm UTC
Would that it could be that simple. Yet I know it can be in some cases. Well done, Stirling.
Stirling D. Apr 12, 2012, 8:15pm UTC
During those emotional years, sometimes a moment can change everything ...
JOHN BECK Apr 12, 2012, 8:36pm UTC
Yes!
Richard Lynn Livesay Apr 12, 2012, 6:30pm UTC
wow, strong message, Stirling and excellent conversant
Stirling D. Apr 12, 2012, 8:15pm UTC
Thanks so much, Richard!
Otelia S. Apr 12, 2012, 7:21pm UTC
I love a happy ending!. Thanks for sharing. This is really good Stirling.
Stirling D. Apr 12, 2012, 8:15pm UTC
I do, too! Thanks, Otelia.
Irina Dimitric Apr 12, 2012, 7:53pm UTC
Powerful ....I can relate to this.
Stirling D. Apr 12, 2012, 8:16pm UTC
Thank you very much, Irina.
Alison H. Apr 12, 2012, 8:58pm UTC
Beautifully done; you packed a lot into this short form.
Stirling D. Apr 13, 2012, 8:09am UTC
Thanks, Alison. I've had such good comments on this, I may use this form again.
Angie O. Apr 12, 2012, 11:30pm UTC
Powerful, intense, good job.
Stirling D. Apr 13, 2012, 8:09am UTC
Thanks, Angie. I was inspired.
Granny Janny Apr 12, 2012, 11:33pm UTC
The last line brings a sigh of relief. I know this kind of worrying.
Stirling D. Apr 13, 2012, 8:09am UTC
Yes? Me, too.
Janet "Jax" B. Apr 13, 2012, 1:01am UTC
Sounds like so many teens I know....everything is one extreme or the other.
Stirling D. Apr 13, 2012, 8:10am UTC
The turbulent years. Thanks God I'm over them.
Atticus *. Apr 13, 2012, 9:26am UTC
Deliverance can come in the smallest of acts. Brilliantly portrayed in this poem.
Stirling D. Apr 13, 2012, 9:56am UTC
Thank you, Atticus!

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