by JustMe ~I'm happy to be~
Member since:
August 16, 2008

~Revealed~

April 12, 2012 10:57 AM UTC
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The whitewashed walls

needed reinventing

new bones waiting

for a splash of color

to be revealed

under the chipped plaster

craving the tender touch

of an artist with vision

who could hold

an endless palette

see the woman

in a field of lotus flowers

the dragonfly taking flight

from the palm of her

outstretched hand

 

 

 

Comments: 29

Ann Marcaida Apr 12, 2012, 11:37am UTC
Considering the ordeals you've shared with us, I'm not surprised that whitewashing is a theme here. The chance to reinvent oneself could be a gift, though. A lotus to you, buddha-to-be! (This is a traditional Buddhist greeting).

Thanks for sharing with Gather's Luminous Writers and Artists. Now featured.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 12, 2012, 11:44am UTC
Thank you so much, Ann and thank you for the feature. :)
JOHN BECK Apr 12, 2012, 11:43am UTC
Ten interpretive lines followed by five descriptive lines beginning with an imperative verb. Interesting, and it works well.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 12, 2012, 11:45am UTC
Thank you for noticing the fine details, John. xx
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 12, 2012, 11:45am UTC
Although I "see" it differently, I love your interpretation and hope many have their own, as well.
JOHN BECK Apr 12, 2012, 10:02pm UTC
Thank you for posting to the Triple Name Club. Now featured.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 12, 2012, 10:04pm UTC
Thank you, my friend, for the feature.
David W. Apr 12, 2012, 12:32pm UTC
yes, time to white wash the heart and begin again. For me, I getting tired of beginning again.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 12, 2012, 12:36pm UTC
Me too, David. But the only constant is change (cliche, but true).
Kevin E. Apr 12, 2012, 12:53pm UTC
As I read your poem I felt like I was looking at a beautiful painting! Your imagery is phenomenal!
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 12, 2012, 12:55pm UTC
Thank you so much, Kevin.
Sandy Moore Apr 12, 2012, 12:57pm UTC
Beautifully said.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 12, 2012, 12:59pm UTC
Thank you, Sandy!
Atticus *. Apr 12, 2012, 1:06pm UTC
Very lovely Little Red. This is mature poetry, the economy of adjectives and direct phrasing all combine to give a precise poignant image.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 12, 2012, 1:07pm UTC
Thank you so much, brother. xx
A. F. Stewart Apr 12, 2012, 1:52pm UTC
A lovely poem.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 12, 2012, 1:55pm UTC
Thanks, A.F.
Kathryn Flynn Apr 12, 2012, 3:09pm UTC
beautiful...
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 12, 2012, 3:25pm UTC
Thank you, friend.
Richard Thuss Apr 12, 2012, 5:53pm UTC
Well, all the adjectives have been used above, Michelle, so I will just say that I liked it a lot.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 12, 2012, 5:55pm UTC
:) You're the best....thanks, Richard!
A born-again moment, with an eastern touch. Lovely!
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 13, 2012, 8:28am UTC
Thank you, friend.
elizabeth evans Apr 12, 2012, 8:27pm UTC
At times, we all feel this way....shake the Etch-a-Sketch or erase the board.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 13, 2012, 8:28am UTC
So true, bob.
Granny Janny Apr 12, 2012, 10:39pm UTC
All is see is the cinematic beauty of each line. Now featured on Poet's Weekly Muse
Stunning.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 13, 2012, 8:28am UTC
Thank you so much, Jan, for the feature. I'm glad you liked it.
Doug Westberg Apr 13, 2012, 12:12am UTC
Beautiful! Thanks for sharing with The Surreal Circus.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 13, 2012, 8:29am UTC
Thank you, Doug.

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