by JOHN BECK
Member since:
August 27, 2008

The Rose ~ a septolet for Mindful Poetry MP2012, April 3

April 03, 2012 07:09 AM UTC
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So delicate

Each petal perfect

Shading

Pink to white



She picked

The rose

Ouch!

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Follow these rules:

  1. This form uses fourteen words.
  2. And seven total lines.
  3. Divided into two stanzas.
  4. Today's prompt: use an interjection. (Think Wow! Jeepers! Nuts! etc.)
  5. Publish so that the date stamped is April 3rd
  6. tag with MP2012
  7. Publish to Mindful Poetry


Comments: 65

Kerry Dexter Apr 3, 2012, 7:29am UTC
well done, John creating a picture with a nice dash of humor -- memorable.
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 7:38am UTC
Thanks, Kerry.
Angie O. Apr 3, 2012, 8:08am UTC
I like the contrast between the beginning and the end. Built up to a crescendo with a few words. Good job John.
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 8:13am UTC
Thank you, Angie.
Richard Thuss Apr 3, 2012, 8:12am UTC
Good one, John
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 8:13am UTC
Thanks, Richard. It's an interesting "form".
Richard Thuss Apr 3, 2012, 8:34am UTC
I posted one and realized I forgot the interjection, so I had to delete it and change it. I do have to wonder how Susan's mind works. lol
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 3, 2012, 10:11am UTC
Shhh, Richard, talking about those nefarious details shouldn't be seen by the judge's eyes! ;-) ;-)
Richard Thuss Apr 3, 2012, 1:31pm UTC
Judge, jury and prosecutor, my oh my, how can I ever win?
Katryn D. Apr 3, 2012, 8:26am UTC
ironically this could really fit for NaPoWriMo's challenge for the day as well
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 8:29am UTC
Thanks, but I don't think "Ouch" belongs in a wedding poem. :)
Katryn D. Apr 3, 2012, 8:34am UTC
LOL - that's cause you're a guy
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 8:40am UTC
:)
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 3, 2012, 10:12am UTC
@Katryn--LOL!!
A. F. Stewart Apr 3, 2012, 8:42am UTC
A perfect picture of a rose, excellent.
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 8:49am UTC
Thank you, Anita.
Kathryn Flynn Apr 3, 2012, 9:12am UTC
I like it! Starts off sweet and ends with a prick!
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 9:41am UTC
Thanks, Kathryn.
Alice G. Apr 6, 2012, 3:29am UTC
@Kathryn, the story of so many lives!
Kathryn Flynn Apr 3, 2012, 10:06am UTC
Featured in Don't Judge a Rose by its scent without being careful in the Triple Name Club.
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 10:11pm UTC
Thank you for the feature, Kathryn.
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 3, 2012, 10:13am UTC
Angie said it well, the juxtaposition of a perfect rose and Ouch! is exactly right.


Thanks for participating in today's contest at Mindful Poetry!
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 10:11pm UTC
Thank you, Susan.
Joann B. Apr 3, 2012, 11:08am UTC
I can smell that!
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 10:11pm UTC
Thank you, Joann.
Debbie W. Apr 3, 2012, 11:18am UTC
Oooh, really good!
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 10:12pm UTC
Thanks, Debbie.
Veronica Hosking Apr 3, 2012, 11:41am UTC
Well done I was inspired by the play with " Would a rose by any other name smell as sweet" today.
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 10:13pm UTC
Thanks, Veronica.
Ann Marcaida Apr 3, 2012, 12:42pm UTC
Your last stanza got me. The first stanza led me to believe that narrator was a man.

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JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 10:13pm UTC
Thank you, Ann.
Sonia M. Apr 3, 2012, 2:25pm UTC
I was not familiar with this form. I like the construction...it seems too strict and yet...
Clever use of the prompt.
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 10:14pm UTC
Actually, it leaves a lot of wiggle room, Sonia. Thanks.
Sonia M. Apr 3, 2012, 11:00pm UTC
I sort of started playing with it...but don't feel confident at all...
Richard Lynn Livesay Apr 3, 2012, 2:57pm UTC
a sticky situation...rose thorns can be very painful...but the beauty of the rose is a good antidote...well done, John
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 10:14pm UTC
Thank you, Richard.
Pam Brittain Apr 3, 2012, 4:40pm UTC
Better that than a bee stink. Very good, John.
Pam Brittain Apr 3, 2012, 4:41pm UTC
Oops, bee sting.
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 10:14pm UTC
Thanks, Pam.
Peter Joseph Swanson Apr 3, 2012, 5:08pm UTC
Love it!
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 10:15pm UTC
Thank you, Peter.
Granny Janny Apr 3, 2012, 7:44pm UTC
You nail the rose and make it quick
But still the lovely scent will stick
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 10:15pm UTC
Clever pun, Jan. Thanks.
Janet "Jax" B. Apr 3, 2012, 8:02pm UTC
Nice one John.
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 10:16pm UTC
Thank you, Jax.
Tovli S. Apr 3, 2012, 9:34pm UTC
loved it! tovli
JOHN BECK Apr 3, 2012, 10:16pm UTC
Thanks, Tovli.
Charli Mills Apr 3, 2012, 10:17pm UTC
I love how tender the first stanza is and how the second gets straight to the point! Nice control and lovely (fun) septolet.
Angela A. Apr 3, 2012, 10:51pm UTC
Those darn thorns get you every time!
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JOHN BECK Apr 4, 2012, 9:03am UTC
Thanks, Angela.
Atticus *. Apr 3, 2012, 11:08pm UTC
Nicely done John, you really captured the "suddenly" of the thorn.
JOHN BECK Apr 4, 2012, 9:03am UTC
Thanks, Atticus.
Sheila Deeth Apr 4, 2012, 5:19pm UTC
Ouch!
JOHN BECK Apr 4, 2012, 6:23pm UTC
Yes, I've had my share of rose thorn "punctures". Thanks, Sheila.
Alice G. Apr 6, 2012, 3:36am UTC
Did you file your Critical Incident Reports and forward them to the Risk Assessment Committee? Hope I never see one of those ever again!

Loved the twist but tis so true!
JOHN BECK Apr 6, 2012, 8:14am UTC
Thanks, Alice.
William Dotani Apr 8, 2012, 4:47am UTC
LOL. Love the ending.
JOHN BECK Apr 8, 2012, 8:07am UTC
Thank you, Bill.
Shelbia C. Jun 18, 2012, 5:11am UTC
Well done!
JOHN BECK Jun 18, 2012, 8:13am UTC
Thank you, Shelbia.
t b. Jun 24, 2012, 2:09pm UTC
The trick is to grasp the rose between the thorns!
A life lesson to learn.
JOHN BECK Jun 24, 2012, 9:47pm UTC
Thank you, t b.
t b. Jun 25, 2012, 2:37pm UTC
My name is Terry John. Feel free to use it.
JOHN BECK Jun 25, 2012, 6:29pm UTC
Thanks, Terry.
Sandi S. Nov 9, 2012, 7:14pm UTC
Lovely... and fun! Love the ouch. ;-)

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