by JustMe ~I'm happy to be~
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August 16, 2008

~On the Edge of Eden~

March 31, 2012 09:07 AM UTC (Updated: March 31, 2012 09:09 AM UTC)
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I hunt on the edge of Eden

where the sharp sky and rough rock

meet green meadows and wildflowers

alive and breathing in natural harmony


My gleaming rib a bow

the sinew of my ancestors

the string upon which

I place my steel arrow

I am woman and guardian

of this blood stained valley


It is not four legged creatures

or the winged beauties above me

who I arm myself against


No


My prey are the humans

who pillage and leave their trail

of blood soaking into

the mountains and grass

desecrating the very land

they claim as their own


I am the earth shadow against the sun

standing tall and resolute

I wait, watch, protect

 

 

Comments: 45

Chris Brockman Mar 31, 2012, 9:42am UTC
This is so good is so many ways. I love the "edge of Eden," for that needs to be our goal, recognition of the difference and responsibility of our special human nature and at the same time realization and acceptance that we, too, are a part of nature. Then, I also see a bit of homage to Selene in there. And, the timeliness of this is perfect, with so much attention on The Hunger Games. Not only that, but pointing out women's critical role in defending nature, as well as repudiation of the poison apple of original sin aimed at Mother Eve is sweet.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Mar 31, 2012, 2:24pm UTC
Thank you, Chris. Whenever I discuss the "rib", Selene is there with me. :)
Chris Brockman Mar 31, 2012, 2:52pm UTC
You know Selene, always ribbing us.
Kathryn Flynn Mar 31, 2012, 9:44am UTC
Beautiful and it bites, in the very best of ways.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Mar 31, 2012, 2:24pm UTC
So glad you like it.
Kevin E. Mar 31, 2012, 11:15am UTC
What an intriguing poem. Wouldn't be a great world if we all sought to help protect our world.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Mar 31, 2012, 2:24pm UTC
Yes it would, Kevin. Thank you.
David W. Mar 31, 2012, 11:15am UTC
A beautiful dedication to the Mother and done as no other can.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Mar 31, 2012, 2:24pm UTC
Thank you, dear friend.
Richard Lynn Livesay Mar 31, 2012, 11:31am UTC
classic tribute to the women warriors of this land...it brought memories of "Clan of the Cave Bear" to me...strong poem

thanks for sharing with Surreal Circus
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Mar 31, 2012, 2:25pm UTC
I like what it reminded you of - excellent! :)

Thank you, Richard.
Richard Lynn Livesay Mar 31, 2012, 3:25pm UTC
Now Featured on Surreal Circus
JOHN BECK Mar 31, 2012, 12:11pm UTC
Woman with a capital "W" is not done reforming humanity. Excellent poetry.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Mar 31, 2012, 2:25pm UTC
Thanks, John. xx
Len Maxwell Mar 31, 2012, 12:25pm UTC
I hate to copycat Chris but this is, indeed, so good in so many ways.

Thanks for posting to Nature's Wall on The Triple Name Club where it's now featured.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Mar 31, 2012, 2:25pm UTC
I am happy you like it so much, Len. And thank you for the feature!
Len Maxwell Mar 31, 2012, 3:01pm UTC
Took me some time to remember this is Saturday and, even though your post has nothing to do with the SatWE challenge, I'm going to feature it on Gather Writing Essential.
Ann Marcaida Mar 31, 2012, 12:33pm UTC
Whoa! Dexter reincarnated as Kali! This poem is a pillar of feminine power.

Now featured at Examining Our Religion.
Ann Marcaida Mar 31, 2012, 1:48pm UTC
As an ecologist, this really resonates with me. I've always wanted to guard Eden.

Thanks for sharing with Gather's Luminous Writers and Artists. Now featured.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Mar 31, 2012, 2:25pm UTC
Wow - double feature. I'm truly honored. Thank you, Ann. p.s. We all are guardians of Eden. :)
KittyKutabare aka Candy Pole Mar 31, 2012, 3:21pm UTC
beneath the floating rib~ the arrow of Eve hits the stain of Cain~
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Mar 31, 2012, 6:52pm UTC
You should know, RT. xx
A. F. Stewart Mar 31, 2012, 3:34pm UTC
A powerful poem.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Mar 31, 2012, 6:52pm UTC
Thank you, A.F.
Peter Joseph Swanson Mar 31, 2012, 6:37pm UTC
A great poem!
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Mar 31, 2012, 6:52pm UTC
Thanks, Peter! :)
Richard Thuss Mar 31, 2012, 7:39pm UTC
Yes, Yes, YES. I love it when you write this way.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Mar 31, 2012, 9:29pm UTC
Thank you, friend.
Kushal Poddar Mar 31, 2012, 10:17pm UTC
Make a bow from my rib
and arrow off my back bone

lazy-secretsof-happiness-hibiscus-opens.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 1, 2012, 12:36am UTC
I like that so much, Kushal.
HEIDI F. Mar 31, 2012, 10:30pm UTC
That's really great and I really like the picture.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 1, 2012, 12:36am UTC
Thanks, Heidi.
Marianne K. Apr 1, 2012, 12:31am UTC
'I am woman, hear me roar'..............sorry, Michelle....... but your poem roars with power and resolution to leave this world a better place. We have the means to return to the centre of Eden, the grace to be reconciled to our original heritage, if not collectively, then one by one.

I love your poetic musings here, Michelle!!

xoxox
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 1, 2012, 12:36am UTC
Thank you for sharing your lovely interpretation, my friend.

xoxox
Marianne K. Apr 1, 2012, 12:51am UTC
:))))))
Granny Janny Apr 1, 2012, 2:49pm UTC
Featured for the Feminine Fighting Spirit on Poet's Weekly Muse.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 1, 2012, 5:29pm UTC
Thank you SOO much!!!!!
ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Apr 5, 2012, 5:39pm UTC
You are so talented.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 5, 2012, 11:23pm UTC
Thank you, Carol, very much.
Connie C. Apr 5, 2012, 5:48pm UTC
I am just stopping by to let you know that this post is spotlighted in the What Is Happening Today On Gather ~ Thursday April 05, 2012 post.

Congratulations!

I do hope you will have time to check out the other spotlighted posts as well.

Have a wonderful Spring day!
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 5, 2012, 11:24pm UTC
Thank you so much, Connie.
sheila ~the hapless housewife~ j. Apr 5, 2012, 7:26pm UTC
Very powerful! I can feel the resolve flowing from your poem.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 5, 2012, 11:24pm UTC
Thank you, Sheila, for stopping by!
Doug Westberg Apr 5, 2012, 11:14pm UTC
You are the real deal. This is very professional, accomplished, pitch-perfect, and rewarding. I like it very much.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 5, 2012, 11:24pm UTC
Doug, your words are very much appreciated.

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