by Priya P.
Member since:
December 28, 2010

Walls between us - MWE (barriers)

March 28, 2012 02:09 AM UTC
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A silence falls heavy
In a room where two sit
Opposite thoughts,
worlds apart
Too afraid to speak,
fear of what will start
He wants to reach out his hand
But the walls are too high
She can sense him reaching out
she whispers, I'm sorry, but good bye
A few feet away,
He asks her - am I too late
She replies - there are too many barriers,
too many lies you can't keep straight
Years of trying to communicate
But all we do is alienate
And now, finally, it is time we separate
A silence falls heavy
In a room where two sit

© 2012

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This week’s writing challenge: write on the theme of walls and barrier.  The things people put between each other.




Comments: 42

Alice G. Mar 28, 2012, 2:18am UTC
Pri, good job meeting the challenge. This is a good poem but also really sad!
Priya P. Mar 28, 2012, 3:24am UTC
It is sad and it did happen exactly that way June 16, 2010. When I finally realized I could do it no more
Alice G. Mar 28, 2012, 10:25am UTC
At least you gave it your best. I have been there and I shut everything down for over 12 years with no hope, no desire to love again-then love found us when we weren't looking.
Priya P. Mar 28, 2012, 11:51am UTC
You know Alice, the first time there was a problem in the marriage, I caught him...., I should have left then, but I had baby so I stayed as many did. I should have left then. After 5 years, baby number 2, and still the same thing. This time, I just said bye... As is, I had already shut down back in 2004-5. It was over, I was just in denial and he was even more in denial
Alice G. Mar 28, 2012, 3:17pm UTC
I hope you got some help processing this so that you don't blame yourself. I tried so hard to fix someone who wasn't fixable. S.A.L.A.'s although womanizers really don't love women, it is about power and paying back whoever set this addiction in motion usually in childhood. And they are not willing to give up the instant gratification they get which is magnified by the clandestine or forbidden nature of it all. I worked with a Christian recovery group for a couple of years after going through the program myself. I highly recommend that so that the baggage is dealt with before entering into another permanent relationship. (Actually all divorced people would benefit so that you don't "find"someone else with the same problem as the former spouse and so that one does not repeat what allowed or caused the marriage failure).
Priya P. Mar 31, 2012, 8:31am UTC
I actually seeked a christian marriage counselor after I filed, I ended up going alone, but he helped me long after - even after the divorce was final. People are sometimes afraid to seek Outside help on this personal a nature, but it really helps in the whole understanding why and healing process
Vinutha Vikram Mar 28, 2012, 3:43am UTC
Very nice. This that won't work, will never work. It has to end eventually. The early the better. All the best!
Priya P. Mar 28, 2012, 3:46am UTC
Very true my friend, I however, waited way too long. But .... Better late then never. Now life has just begun for me all over again. It's exhilarating
Been there - not a nice place and best left, never to return.
Priya P. Mar 28, 2012, 11:55am UTC
I agree totally my friend
:)
JOHN BECK Mar 28, 2012, 7:06am UTC
Lies do indeed erect walls. Well done, Priya.
Priya P. Mar 28, 2012, 11:58am UTC
I wasnt too thrilled with the Poem this time, but I wanted to respond to the prompt. but writing it, helped me to revisit old memories and I really did put myself into the writing. as you said previously, that is what I also like the most about my writing. I feel like 90% of what I write is my personal autobiography. Later, years from now, it will be special to look back, and reflect again.
Alice G. Mar 31, 2012, 3:23pm UTC
Pri, there is no reason for you to not be happy with this poem. It was well crafted and conveyed exactly what you set out to do. Your words were well chosen and you were being real. What is not to like about that?
Cynthia C. Mar 28, 2012, 8:01am UTC
Thank you so much for sharing with Sadies Points
Priya P. Mar 28, 2012, 12:27pm UTC
as always, very welcome
Ellen T P. Mar 28, 2012, 9:19am UTC
Wonderful...
Priya P. Mar 28, 2012, 12:28pm UTC
thank you ellen
wendy st. john-devereaux Mar 28, 2012, 9:26am UTC
wow---excellently done!

blessings
Priya P. Mar 28, 2012, 12:35pm UTC
:) thank you dear Wendy, you are sweet
Crin Forbes Mar 28, 2012, 10:37am UTC
This is one time I wish I read fiction...

But then again, fiction probably would have not been that hurtful!
Priya P. Mar 28, 2012, 12:35pm UTC
I promise you it wouldnt. so nice of you to say... Thank you Crin :)
Phillip DeNise Mar 28, 2012, 11:01am UTC
one of the photos I sent could go well with this???
Priya P. Mar 28, 2012, 12:48pm UTC
Im desperate to do one for the pic titled Naturally. that is my very favorite. Tell me which you felt. the others reaching are reaching out in hope, but this is not one of hope. I'm curious which pic you thought. look forward to my poem featuring naturally. I love that pic for some reason.
Phillip DeNise Mar 28, 2012, 12:55pm UTC
those hands stretching forth from a flat screen???
ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Mar 28, 2012, 11:12am UTC
Sorry to read this is true Priya. Unfortunately I can relate to your words. We are so blessed to have you here on Gather. You are such an inspiration.

Now featured at Gather's Luminous Writers and Artists.
Priya P. Mar 28, 2012, 12:49pm UTC
I can't tell you how much that means to me. I would never imagine a social/writing website like this would come to mean so much to me and be an everyday part of my life, but it has. You too are part of that. I'm truly touch. Thank you so much :)
ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Mar 29, 2012, 12:11pm UTC
You are very welcome my friend, and so deserving.
Darin Waugh Mar 28, 2012, 12:50pm UTC
Nice!
Priya P. Mar 31, 2012, 8:33am UTC
Thanks Darin
Pam Brittain Mar 28, 2012, 3:06pm UTC
What a powerful, moving piece!
Priya P. Mar 31, 2012, 8:34am UTC
Thank you Pam
Granny Janny Mar 28, 2012, 8:24pm UTC
You strike a chord that everyone hears. Now featured on Poet's Weekly Muse.
Priya P. Mar 31, 2012, 8:35am UTC
Thank you so much for the feature. Very kind of you to feature
Doug Westberg Mar 29, 2012, 12:24pm UTC
Refrain is a nice touch. Thanks for sharing with Depression and Creativity!
Priya P. Mar 31, 2012, 8:35am UTC
Thanks Doug ;)
Irina Dimitric Mar 30, 2012, 6:38am UTC
Very powerful poem, beautifully written. Many can relate to those sentiments.
Priya P. Mar 31, 2012, 8:38am UTC
Yes, sadly I imagine many will relate to this. Thank you so much
Greg Schiller Apr 8, 2012, 9:14am UTC
Sorry to come by so late, Priya.

There were two responses on the theme of the barriers that divide a couple. Joanne B wrote about the 5-inch Wall and you about one too high. One has to wonder whether large walls are built out of little ones.
Priya P. Apr 9, 2012, 10:37pm UTC
We seldom notice the walls until they become mile high, that's the sadest part.
Lawrence U. Apr 9, 2012, 10:39pm UTC
Ah, the power of the invisible barrier!

Well crafted, Priya!!
Priya P. Apr 9, 2012, 11:07pm UTC
Thank you very much.

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