~Gone~

I posted the note, Crin, because there are people here who care about me, as I do them. Many times they have asked if this is non-fiction or not, because they worried. Out of respect for my friendship with others I posted it. The reason is simple.

Thank you for reading and for your feedback.

Crin, really I got your point the first time, but thank you for the expansion of your thought. However, although I haven't overlooked the compliment "laced" in there, please do not tell me how to teach or how to post. I do what I do with tremendous thought and with reasons I don't feel I have to really justify.

Well, maybe I was wrong, but it felt like you were telling me how to teach - I hope that you are teaching your students, that fiction or not, there are always emotions behind good work.

Laced with compliments was a nice thing, not a mean thing.

I appreciate you feel comfortable to tell me what you think, but I felt like you were being pushy. I accept constructive criticism on my writing, but not side notes or what I feel important to share or do. That's my freedom of expression and I guard those boundaries perhaps a bit to ferociously.

too ferociously, that is.

Although "fiction" in that it perhaps doesn't exactly refer to an individual, like much fiction it is a reflection of life and all too true. You and I have seen it too often. You approach it with sensitivity and depth.

Unfortunately Gather will only allow me to "recommend" it once.

Talk to Barbary...she often recommends twice...I'm not sure how it's done...Crin Forbes did it twice on this post???

I don't know about the recommendation "twice" concept. I'm here to share with whoever stops by. Points and such are secondary to me.

John, yes, it is fiction because this is not about my sister and neither of my sisters are Nadine. Unfortunately there is much truth here, however.

Thank you, my friend.

(It's a Gather glitch, Stephen. The person only recommends once, but it shows up twice for some reason.)

I know, but Crin's double "recommend" had already shown up when I made my comment, thus the content of my comment.

Stephen asked how it was done, John, so it seems he didn't know.

I understand. It apparently just happens on occasion. I made light of it by suggesting that if I could, I would double recommend. I guess it was a lame and confusing comment on my part.

ANY comment by you is always welcome in my world, John. It was kind and generous, as you are.

As fruitless as it seems to the sane, the choices of others are theirs and theirs alone... Would that we could make them see the error of their ways... only then can we hope to even influence the lives of others...
It's the same with our kids...we try to keep them from making the same mistakes we made...but often they are convinced they know best... There is no smugness...only sadness when the epiphany hits one day and they realize we could have saved then hurt or pain if only they had listened...

Thank you submitting to Gathers Luminous Writers and Artists. Now featured.

Thank you Stephen for your comment(s) and for the feature!

The insanity of living a life of quiet desperation comes through powerfully in this poem.

Such a perfect way of putting it. Thank you, dear Magi.

:)

Fiction it might be, but it describes a sad reality it eloquent terms.

Thank you, A.F.

I'm glad to know that it's fiction because it's so often the case and you put it perfectly.

Thanks, Pam. :)

I see one poets' passion bringing out the passion in another. Its what poets do. The FEELING provided by this work, Michelle, is intense and alive.

Thank you, Barbara. Hope you are well, friend.

Love your work. These verses speak to me of a loss only one who has experienced them can accept without rejoinder.

I have lost a brother, my son, and now, my young sister. You write to me.

David, I am moved beyond words. xx...

There's a madness to this piece that's intriguing to say the least....SUPER SCINTILATING....!

Thank you!!

I see that Crin has since removed his comment. I thought about whether I should or not, but now I do think I should at least let you know that when I had recommended that Crin read a piece I found entertaining, he returned the favor by also recommending to me two writers on this site. One of those writers whose poetry he recommended to me as attractive was yours.

I mentioned that I was already aware of both writers, had read some of what they wrote in the past, and that I would revisit them. I also agreed that they are good writers. So I don't believe that you took Crin's message as he meant to convey it. He appreciates your writing, and I don't believe he was trying to tell you how or what you should teach either. I thought you might like to know that he had gone to the trouble to recommend that I read your poetry.

Anyway, since I'm here, this is another example of your good writing. Although no reflection of its quality, much of what you write is slightly too melodramatic for my taste, but for the audience that is attracted to that type of feeling, it's very good, I think.

I appreciate your stopping by, Sue. A "class" gesture. Thank you.

The powerful first verse sets the tone.

"when I see, hear, smell you

I wish I could still cry for you"

Those words, especially the unexpected word, smell, drive your poem.

And then the reader wonders what does, "I wish I could still cry for you..." mean.

I like that all questions not answered, where we apply our own life experience to interpete the situation.

Thank you, dear Barbary. xx