My Fallen Angel

I love the hunger in my Angel’s gaze

instilled in sultry silence her expression

a willful, loving, lasting bared obsession

I love the hunger in my Angel’s gaze

I crave the silken softness of her touch

caressing whispers carried on a breeze

touched light or firm, my all she owns with ease

I crave the silken softness of her touch

I crave the hills and hollows of her frame

the pleasance of her verdant vistas dream

the way her morning dew sublimes to steam

I crave the hills and hollows of her frame

Exciting are her lips that smile for me

so sweetly and yet wickedly they call

they ask so little, knowing they own all

exciting are her lips that smile for me

The graceful curve of neck she offers me

soft fragrant hair upon her shoulders falls

one kiss – one sigh – her scent my soul enthralls

the graceful curve of neck she offers me

So deftly she emerges from her clothes

the greatest pleasure ever to these eyes

a goddess to this mortal drawing nigh

so deftly she emerges from her clothes

Such loveliness, with pleasure I behold

her begging breasts bewitch the babe in me

each curve and crevice meld alluringly

Such loveliness, with pleasure I behold

With wicked glee, her halo tossed away

of pleasures shared, no gentlemen dare sings

sans angel wings ‘tis ravishing she brings

with wicked glee, her halo tossed away

I love the way my love delights in me

can’t help but love the hunger in her gaze

that she loves me continues to amaze

I love the way my Love delights in me

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John Doyle Feb 11, 2012, 12:19pm UTC

If this is a fallen angel, then the fall is into glory

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elizabeth evans Feb 11, 2012, 1:07pm UTC

I like the rhythm and cadence of this piece. Is this an excepted variation of the form? Whether it be or not, it sings.

stephen berwaldt Feb 11, 2012, 1:16pm UTC

It IS the form, according to the description Susan gave. Four line verses. First and last line the same. Second and third line rhyme. In the last verse, the second line of the verse IS the same as the first line of the poem.
As I understood it, anyway.
Thanks for reading and commenting...

stephen berwaldt Feb 11, 2012, 1:22pm UTC

Ooops...you're right... Oh, well

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Magi the magical poet is flowing with the wind Feb 11, 2012, 1:27pm UTC

Hmmm ... this fallen angel must be Mr Beelzebub's niece, Ms Devilina Demon. She does get around that girl.

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CL Mareydt Feb 11, 2012, 1:52pm UTC

:)

THANK YOU FOR SHARING AT SURREAL CIRCUS!

Be Inspired

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Barbara H. Feb 11, 2012, 2:55pm UTC

The form is so perfectly executed and worded there was no need for the picture (although it matches beautifully) The poem painted its own vision. Your talent is becoming increasingly fine tuned.

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Phillip DeNise Feb 11, 2012, 3:27pm UTC

doesn't VERDANT mean green & bushy?

Barbary C. Feb 11, 2012, 3:39pm UTC

Green and lush. I have always favored the word, lush, and once told a close friend that my poetry was spare, while her's was lush....She thought I was calling her a drunk! Had to sort that out! :)

Barbary C. Feb 11, 2012, 3:40pm UTC

So.....Stephen's poetry is lush.

stephen berwaldt Feb 11, 2012, 3:40pm UTC

Verdant intimates lushness... It is a metaphor, Phil... And... I prefer to think of trimmed instead of bushy... :) "hills and hollows"
"verdant vistas" appreciating her "landscape".... not literal, my friend.

Phillip DeNise Feb 11, 2012, 4:03pm UTC

I'm glad my less than intuitive remark brought out this LUSH remark of Barb's.
I totally love the hills & hollows metaphor; just don't want GREEN intruding on that!

elizabeth evans Feb 11, 2012, 4:30pm UTC

Philip, it's the politically correct environmental response Stephen was going for.

Ann Marcaida Feb 11, 2012, 4:34pm UTC

I love writing in which the lover is confounded with Mother Earth. Thanks for sharing with Gather's Luminous Writers and Artists.

stephen berwaldt Feb 11, 2012, 6:02pm UTC

I'll accede this...if we are going to take a literal interpretive stand, then I wholeheartedly agree...Green is NOT a good thing... :)
Thanks Elizabeth and Ann...

stephen berwaldt Feb 11, 2012, 8:54pm UTC

and you, too, Philip... BTW...going GREEN is a political darling now-a-days... :)

Phillip DeNise Feb 12, 2012, 9:13am UTC

if this Angel did not fall, instead "defying gravity" as if Idina Menzel's unique contribution to 'womanhood' were more than just a song, I'd then be amenable to rethinking my position on GREEN!!!

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Barbary C. Feb 11, 2012, 3:53pm UTC

So romantic to think fallen angel. But we haven't fallen. A bunch of guilty-feeling old men in the long-ago propagated that story.

But Fallen Angel makes an intriging title, nonetheless. Smile.

Great poem, Stephen.

stephen berwaldt Feb 11, 2012, 6:03pm UTC

No guilt here...or the guiltier the better... one or the other... :)

Barbary C. Feb 12, 2012, 6:14am UTC

You're such a nice man, Stephen.

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Ann Marcaida Feb 11, 2012, 4:34pm UTC

Now featured at The Surreal Circus.

stephen berwaldt Feb 11, 2012, 6:03pm UTC

Thanks, Ann

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Jaxx F. Feb 11, 2012, 5:39pm UTC

I love it.

stephen berwaldt Feb 11, 2012, 6:03pm UTC

Glad you do...

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JOHN BECK Feb 11, 2012, 6:17pm UTC

Love both directions--the way it should be. Nice.

stephen berwaldt Feb 11, 2012, 8:57pm UTC

Much appreciated, John...I wrote it as a Catena Rondo, but I screwed up by forgetting to make the second line of each verse become the first and last lines of the next. I have reworked it...I may post it again with the "Catena Rondo" label...

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Diane Huizenga Feb 12, 2012, 10:50am UTC

that she loves me continues to amaze....... I am amazed my husband still loves me after all these years too. Lovely.

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Francesca Etheart Feb 12, 2012, 2:19pm UTC

That was a very nice poem thanx for sharing.

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