Dream Rambling Poem

Trading places willing to take

Thatcher mind muscle

This one acquired, not innate

Marching miles, heavy duty duffel bag

Millstones on my back

Fatigue wearing, tomorrow BDU

Carrying their load, mine too

Silence

Camouflaged

A night swoop

Aim directed at burden's coop

Rugby team

Not out for the fifty-fifty chance

Going against the tennis champ

Ludicrous celebrities

Soaring high on yellow stages, devoid

Of scruples, devil replaced

Refreshed encountering a few

Volume raised up

All ye, All ye, oxen free

Found you in the the flamingo tree

Projecting faults onto me

One dress owned, while vamps

Make me want to puke on it

Not going to keep them buoyant

While sinking me deeper in quicksand

There it is, found a branch

Safe and sound

On solid ground

At least

Until the following round.

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Kenneth B. Feb 8, 2012, 8:57am UTC

Fascinating.

Vj McMullan Feb 8, 2012, 10:59am UTC

Thank you

Kenneth B. Feb 8, 2012, 12:04pm UTC

You are welcome.

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Ellen T P. Feb 8, 2012, 9:22am UTC

Liked it, interesting Thatcher Mind Muscle? Where did that come from?

Vj McMullan Feb 8, 2012, 11:00am UTC

I don't know where she got it. Thank you

Ellen T P. Feb 8, 2012, 7:17pm UTC

Thatcher is a family name that is why I was wondering...?

Vj McMullan Feb 8, 2012, 7:46pm UTC

Alright

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JOHN BECK Feb 8, 2012, 10:07am UTC

Looking at the lives of celebrities, I would not want to trade places with any one of them.

Vj McMullan Feb 8, 2012, 11:02am UTC

You are a celebrity. Really though, neither would I.

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Adelaide M. Feb 8, 2012, 5:35pm UTC

Thanks for posting to Point Taken. Have a great night!

Vj McMullan Feb 8, 2012, 7:44pm UTC

Same your way!

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CL Mareydt Feb 8, 2012, 6:53pm UTC

Vj McMullan Feb 8, 2012, 7:44pm UTC

Thank you

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Jean R B. Feb 9, 2012, 6:46am UTC

Here from ATWS February

Vj McMullan Feb 10, 2012, 1:37am UTC

Thank you

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Mylinda Elliott Feb 9, 2012, 6:29pm UTC

Interesting
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Vj McMullan Feb 9, 2012, 6:41pm UTC

Thank you Mylinda

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Jeanette Cheezum Feb 9, 2012, 7:29pm UTC

You go get'em Tiger. :) I like it

Vj McMullan Feb 10, 2012, 1:05am UTC

I polished it up a bit just prior to your comment; I felt it lacked something and didn't know what until I re-read it. Thank you!

Jeanette Cheezum Feb 10, 2012, 1:23am UTC

I find if I leave my writing for a day or so and then come back and read it aloud. I see areas I need to tweak. :)

Vj McMullan Feb 10, 2012, 1:38am UTC

Thank you Jeanette

Jeanette Cheezum Feb 10, 2012, 2:19am UTC

I too, have FMS.

Vj McMullan Feb 10, 2012, 7:38am UTC

I wrote a haiku about it. That does not do it justice though. I plan to write an in-depth article later. Right now I am in the process of moving into a place where I am not stuck upstairs. Sorry to here you have it; it's an effed up problem.

Jeanette Cheezum Feb 10, 2012, 7:52am UTC

Yes, but thank God, they finally diagnosed us. It took many years. When I first came on Gather (years ago) I wrote an article about FMS and got a good response. I think when you write yours it will help a lot of people.

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