Without the Moon - A Rondel Prime for Mindful...

Without The Moon - A Rondel Prime for Mindful Poetry

I couldn’t resist writing another Rondel Prime, this time about my favourite celestial companion, the Moon.

The Earth would be a lonely place

If suddenly she lost the Moon

The dark night’s happy face

Watching lovers croon

Would still lovers’ shy embrace

Turn into a dizzy swoon?

The Earth would be a lonely place

If suddenly she lost the Moon

Love perhaps would end too soon

Without Moon’s caring watchful base

A woeful end awaits the human race

Without her shiny loving boon

The Earth would be a lonely place

If suddenly she lost the Moon

©Irina Dimitric 2012

Comments: 45

Len Maxwell Jan 27, 2012, 11:40pm UTC

I have no idea what the form is, but it's a lovely poem.

Thanks for sharing with The Triple Name Club.

Irina Dimitric Jan 28, 2012, 8:32pm UTC

Thank you, Len.

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Vj McMullan Jan 27, 2012, 11:43pm UTC

Nicely written. Glad we have the sun.

Irina Dimitric Jan 28, 2012, 8:34pm UTC

Thank you, Vj. Without the sun we wouldn't see the moon.

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Bernard C. Jan 28, 2012, 5:13am UTC

The Earth would take on another form if not for the moon washing everything clear as it does - Nice write and angle too :-) Who would have thought that something so very far off could have such an impact on our daily lives :-)

Thanks for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.

Irina Dimitric Jan 28, 2012, 8:41pm UTC

Thank you, Bernard, for your thoughtful comment.

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Magi the magical poet is flowing with the wind Jan 28, 2012, 8:10am UTC

If we didn't have the moon, we'd have to invent it.

Lovely poem.

Irina Dimitric Jan 28, 2012, 8:45pm UTC

I agree, Magi. And thanks for your kind compliment.

Magi the magical poet is flowing with the wind Jan 28, 2012, 9:34pm UTC

My pleasure, dear friend.

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Pam Brittain Jan 28, 2012, 2:31pm UTC

Wonderful write.

Irina Dimitric Jan 28, 2012, 8:45pm UTC

Thank you so much, Pam.

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A. F. Stewart Jan 28, 2012, 4:01pm UTC

Sweet, sublime and gracefully written.

Irina Dimitric Jan 28, 2012, 8:46pm UTC

Thank you so much for your kind comment, A.F.

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JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 28, 2012, 8:54pm UTC

And what would the moon be without the sun?

Irina Dimitric Jan 28, 2012, 11:41pm UTC

We wouldn't be able to see it...but then we wouldn't be here either...we'd be propelled into deep space and gobbled up by a balck hole!

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Stacey Mamasaid Jan 29, 2012, 3:16pm UTC

Absolutely fantastic, from a fellow lover of the moon and lover of moonlight love :) Thank you for sharing at Rhyme Sublime.

Irina Dimitric Jan 31, 2012, 1:10am UTC

Thank you, Stacey. I'm so glad you like it.

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JOHN BECK Jan 29, 2012, 3:23pm UTC

Not only would it be a lonely place, it might not exist! Well done, Irina.

Irina Dimitric Jan 31, 2012, 1:12am UTC

That's right, John. Thank you so much for your kind comment.

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Granny Janny Jan 29, 2012, 4:48pm UTC

Thanks for posting this to Poet's Weekly Muse! It's a lovely tribute to the moon.

Irina Dimitric Jan 30, 2012, 5:10am UTC

Thank you, Jan. I'm glad you like it.

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Nana to Seven Cutiepies Jan 30, 2012, 6:34pm UTC

Beautiful poem Irina,

Featured and Thank you so much for sharing with Animal & Nature photos, videos and posts.

Irina Dimitric Jan 31, 2012, 1:15am UTC

Thank you so much, Nana. I'm glad you like it.

Thank you for the feature.

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Caroline Adele O'Brien Jan 31, 2012, 1:35pm UTC

The world would, indeed be dreary without the moon. I love this poem, Irina. I especially like the second stanza. Reminds me of something Shakespeare would write. :).

Irina Dimitric Feb 1, 2012, 12:33am UTC

I'm so glad you like it, Caroline. Thank you for stopping by.

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Mustafa Demiri Feb 1, 2012, 10:13am UTC

The tides would cease to roll and swell,
Our molten core would seize up soon,
Most living things would go as well,
In the absence of the moon.

I just could not resist placing a little verse here, to pay a compliment your beautiful poem.

Irina Dimitric Feb 1, 2012, 8:19pm UTC

Thank you, Mustafa, for your kind comment. I'm so happy you were inspired to write a beautiful verse.

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ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Feb 1, 2012, 3:35pm UTC

I too am thankful for the moon.

Irina Dimitric Feb 1, 2012, 8:24pm UTC

Thank you, Carol, for stopping by.

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Atticus *. Feb 2, 2012, 9:08am UTC

Moon-child that I am - I'm a sucker for a good poem about the moon. :-)

Irina Dimitric Feb 13, 2012, 1:19am UTC

I'm particularly glad that you as a moon-child were pleased with my poem :-)

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amy s. Feb 10, 2012, 3:33pm UTC

wow what a thought if we lost the moon what would happen?

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Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Feb 13, 2012, 10:23am UTC

This one brought out all sorts of zany thoughts from your readers. A light-hearted, yet thoughtful contemplation.

Thank you, Irina.

Now appearing at Mindful Poetry.

Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Feb 13, 2012, 10:28am UTC

Also a word or two about the non-poetic aspects.

You have such a lovely picture, it'd be nice to see it pulled up into your poem rather than only in the bottom strip of attached photos.

If you're not sure how to do that, I can help you.

And it's nice to see tags on poems submitted to Mindful Poetry. One reason is that it identifies the form for your readers--although I see that you already did that in your pre-comments.

But also, when I am looking for a specific poem at Mindful Poetry, which I do frequently, I go to our group's homepage and type in the form's name in the Search Group space. All of the poems in the group's archives that are of my target form appear. Then I can run through that list to find the one I'm thinking of.

Just a couple thoughts, Irina. :-)

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Irina Dimitric Feb 14, 2012, 5:33am UTC

Thank you, Susan, for your suggestions and your kind offer to help me. When I posted this poem, I didn't know how to insert a photo in the text, but I've learned since then; I've also started writing in tags. A question: Do you want the name of the form to appear as a tag as well as in the title? I assume you do, so I'll be doing that from now on. Should I go to "edit" and do that to my previous posts?

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