PromptlySusan Prompt #21-Luc Bat- Doubting Thomas

Enough now, dear Thomas

I want you to promise-nothing!

Worth less than a shilling

I'll give you no hearing - absurd!

To think I'd take your word!

You see at least I'm cured-you cad!

You ask me why I'm mad? Eileen!

Just last night you were seen -

Come on I'm not sixteen! with HER.

Arm around her waist. Cur!

A sucker no longer...She fell?

Head over heels, she fell?

I shouldn't laugh...please tell me more!

Don't worry on that score!

This tale doesn't bore - but dear,

A witches trick I fear -

she faked the fall, it's clear sweet boy!

you're sweet nature her toy -

she's jealous of our joy - my love

oh say you're not above

forgiving me, my dove - Thomas!

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A. F. Stewart Oct 10, 2011, 3:22pm UTC

Wonderfully written and enjoyable to read.

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JOHN BECK Oct 10, 2011, 7:39pm UTC

It flows smoothly despite the complexity.

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Angela M. Oct 11, 2011, 2:25am UTC

You write very nice! Thank you for sharing with us!

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Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Oct 13, 2011, 12:27am UTC

Hinda, you definitely need to meet Mustafa. He also takes on these clipped forms and is not dissuaded, but creates an irresistible tale, which is what you've done here. If my link for him is wrong, I'll send you the right one later.

Appearing at PromptlySusan.

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Hinda Rochel Anolick Oct 14, 2011, 3:32am UTC

Hi Susan, the link didn't work...but maybe that's my computer....Did you mean Mustafa Demiri? I'll friend him..if you mean someone else lmk.

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PromptlySusan Prompt #21-Luc Bat- Doubting Thomas

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