by Marilyn is looking for whatever there is. N.
Member since:
August 11, 2006

Promptly Susan - #20 - Ghazal - Ground

September 29, 2011 04:38 PM UTC
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Ground

 

 

 

 

Sink or swim, win or lose; just stay on the ground.
Was that you, wasn't it me, falling to the ground?

Feelings come, feelings go, if you have the gumption.
Nothing lasts forever, keep yourself on the ground.

Rain soaked tree limbs, look almost like brown gravy.
Leaves though, haven't a goal, sit sadly on the ground.
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Strands of gems, luminescent, encircling your waist.
Hearts beating, note by note, keep us on the ground.

Running with the wind in your hair, singing songs of life.
I'd sing songs of broken hearts, within their sad ground.

The forest is so dark tonight, please meet me by the water?
I'll lie by the tallest oak, to hold you tightly on the ground.

Life is real, life is good, hush, stay silent, don't make a sound.
I lied, lives are hard, not much is good, bury me in the ground.
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Let your hopes, not your hurts, shape your future. --Robert H. Schuller
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mn -2011


 

Comments: 23

JOHN BECK Sep 29, 2011, 5:12pm UTC
You popped my bubble in the end, Marilyn. Well done.
Thanks, I think?, John. I've only written one of these before and wasn't quite sure that I was doing it right.
Bernard C. Sep 29, 2011, 5:43pm UTC
That's quite something you did there with the prompt - very well done :-)

Thanks for submitting to
The Surreal Circus.
Thanks, Bernard :)
stephen berwaldt Sep 29, 2011, 11:08pm UTC
I think it is terrific...

Thank you posting to the Triple Name Club.
Thanks, Stephen :)
Larry H. Sep 29, 2011, 11:17pm UTC
thanks for sharing
Thanks for reading :)
Kathryn Flynn Sep 30, 2011, 1:06am UTC
Goood!
Thanks, Kathy - high praise from you.
William Dotani Sep 30, 2011, 3:59am UTC
This tells me to keep living, but expect continuing sadness.
A part of life, just as happiness, good and bad days are.
Pamela Marks Sep 30, 2011, 9:13am UTC
Marksville is here from September Comment List
Thanks, Pam :) Done with September, (I think we mean the same group), waiting for October.
Pamela Marks Sep 30, 2011, 9:49am UTC
just getting to all of mine now LOL
Pamela Marks Sep 30, 2011, 9:49am UTC
your welcome
A. F. Stewart Sep 30, 2011, 10:19am UTC
A wonderfully introspective poem, with a nice touch of melancholy.
Still waiting for that romance... LOL
CL Mareydt Oct 1, 2011, 9:25am UTC
:)
:-D
Doug Westberg Oct 1, 2011, 11:37am UTC
Very enjoyable! Well done!
Thanks, Doug, appreciate it :)
Winona (the crazy rat lady) Oct 14, 2011, 10:42am UTC
I like this. The last two lines specially relevant to me.

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