by A. F. Stewart
Member since:
November 11, 2007

PromptlySusan Prompt #15: Place and Time

August 24, 2011 12:05 PM UTC (Updated: August 24, 2011 12:31 PM UTC)
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Place and Time

 

So quiet now, the afterimage faded;

just another shortcut between streets,

sunlight fetching the shadows away.

 

The regret and trouble swept away

into memories and time long faded.

Nothing to hinder passage amid streets.

 

Life moves forward, to litter these streets,

people move past an incident stolen away.

Never knowing the moment that faded.

 

Look past the faded stone, beyond the streets, to a distant far away...

 

 

 

 The Prompt: 

  1. Poetry: tritina
  2. Prose:  absurdist fiction
  3. All Words: hinder, cut, fetching, ... (use the elipses)
  4. Phrase: Without friends no one would choose to live --Aristotle
  5. Theme: mistakes
  6. Graphic: 

 

 

 

 

 

 



 

 

Comments: 20

JOHN BECK Aug 24, 2011, 12:18pm UTC
Excellent tritina, A. F., and the use of the prompt words is not at all forced.
A. F. Stewart Aug 24, 2011, 12:41pm UTC
Thanks. I try to be careful about flow when I write these.
Audrey Howitt Aug 24, 2011, 12:49pm UTC
Lovely flow and beautifully written!
A. F. Stewart Aug 24, 2011, 2:01pm UTC
Thank you.
Bernard C. Aug 24, 2011, 5:40pm UTC
Interesting form the tritina - nicely done - thanks for sharing :-)

Thanks for submitting to
The Surreal Circus.
A. F. Stewart Aug 25, 2011, 10:00am UTC
Thanks for stopping by to read.
David W. Aug 24, 2011, 6:57pm UTC
Extremely well done for a juggler. :-)
A. F. Stewart Aug 25, 2011, 10:03am UTC
So true.
Angela A. Aug 24, 2011, 7:27pm UTC
How very profound
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A. F. Stewart Aug 25, 2011, 10:10am UTC
Thank you.
Ann Marcaida Aug 25, 2011, 1:38pm UTC
Okay, this sounds a bit odd, but the poem itself seems to fade, refusing to register itself in my memory.

Thanks for sharing with Gather's Best Writers and Artists.
A. F. Stewart Aug 25, 2011, 2:49pm UTC
Sorry it didn't make more of an impression, but thanks for reading.
Kerry Dexter Aug 27, 2011, 7:04am UTC
evokes both atmosphere and idea. well done, A.F.
A. F. Stewart Aug 27, 2011, 9:59am UTC
Thank you.
Shelbia C. Aug 27, 2011, 11:11pm UTC
Quite well done.

Thanks for posting to Writing Reservoir
A. F. Stewart Aug 28, 2011, 8:56am UTC
Thanks, glad you enjoyed reading it.
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Aug 30, 2011, 8:35pm UTC
This has a meloncholy mood that permeates right through to the end.

Appearing at PromptlySusan and Mindful Poetry.
A. F. Stewart Aug 31, 2011, 10:02am UTC
Thank you.
Angie O. Aug 31, 2011, 6:51am UTC
The motion of life, I enjoyed this!
A. F. Stewart Aug 31, 2011, 9:57am UTC
I'm glad, thanks.

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