by David W.
Member since:
February 16, 2006

VISIONS IN A STORM

June 13, 2011 11:00 AM UTC (Updated: June 13, 2011 12:02 PM UTC)
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VISIONS IN A STORM

 

ON JULY 6, 2003 MY 30 YEAR OLD SON JEREMY PASSED AWAY. THIS IS MY ANNUAL REPOSTING



 

© 2003 By David Wainland

  

 

 

 

I awake to a thick blanket of humidity,

a new storm rumbles in the distance.

 

Lightning sheets, like the northern aurora,

hang in silvery veils in the midnight sky.

 

Wind trickles in and shifts the grass,

then howls and bends the trees.

 

Bits of life float by steamy windows,

caught up in an Everglade tempest.

 

In the shimmering electric glare,

I see the energy my son has left behind.

 

It glows like a pale ghost,

burning through my closed lids.

 

He strides around the house and yard,

animated in death as he was in life.

 

Shifting from the boy he was,

to the man he became.

 

He gave us a run for the money though,

I never knew he could run so far.

 

The gale drives closer,

many lightning bolts become one.

 

Thunder rattles the walls and floors,

and his image grows dimmer with each strike

 

I miss him and I wonder,

where he has gone does he miss me?

 

My wife stirs and asks,

Is there something wrong?

 

My hand reaches out and touches hers,

No dear, I’m just listening to the rain.

Comments: 59

Gul Dixon Jun 13, 2011, 11:04am UTC
That is lovely David!
Denise L. Jun 13, 2011, 11:27am UTC
Beautiful, David. I know how it feels, unfortunately. It's been almost 5 years since I lost Ryan and reading that is bringing up really painful emotions right now. (((HUG)))
ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Jun 13, 2011, 11:31am UTC
..."I miss him and I wonder, where he has gone does he miss me?"

Love this tribute David.
ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Jul 6, 2012, 12:09pm UTC
Coming back by for another look at Jeremy's beautiful smile.
Renita P. Jun 13, 2011, 11:32am UTC
wonderfully written. I'm so sorry for the loss of your son - and so young.
Shirley B. Jun 13, 2011, 11:38am UTC
What a wonderful tribute and I'm so sorry for your loss too.
Sonia M. Jun 13, 2011, 11:50am UTC
Poignant and beautifully written, David. No words can assuage your sadness, but I offer a heartfelt I'm so sorry....
Debbie W. Jun 13, 2011, 11:55am UTC
Lovely and loving, touching, sad, heart-breaking...a terrible loss.
Priya P. Jun 13, 2011, 12:14pm UTC
It's so beautiful, touches us all who reads your love for the son you miss so very much.
Bernard C. Jun 13, 2011, 12:20pm UTC
Very nicely put tribute - so sad, sorry for your loss

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Patricia J. Jun 13, 2011, 12:24pm UTC
This is such a compelling poem, David. The storm continues and all I can say is so sorry for your loss.
Audrey A. Jun 13, 2011, 12:56pm UTC
A beautiful and comforting tribute. I am truly sorry for your loss.
Kathryn Flynn Jun 13, 2011, 1:07pm UTC
A wonderful tribute to Jeremy; So full of life your photo of him is, such a delightful boy, so young at 30.........
Shira C. Jun 13, 2011, 1:16pm UTC
Words fail me... but obviously, they did not fail you. You have illuminated your son and yourself with this lovely tribute! Featured at The Surreal Circus!
Kim B. Jun 13, 2011, 1:27pm UTC
So very lovely. I lost my daughter in 2000. The line, " I miss him and I wonder,where he has gone does he miss me?", is always on my mind. thanks for sharing that.
Diane Huizenga Jun 13, 2011, 2:13pm UTC
wow this brought tears to my eyes, I can't imagine losing my child, my deep felt condolences.
Angela A. Jun 13, 2011, 5:16pm UTC
Sometimes, the blow of the wind, the rain on the pains, are a loved ones way of saying hello.
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Peter Joseph Swanson Jun 13, 2011, 5:18pm UTC
Sad

A beautiful poem
Brenda Youngerman Jun 13, 2011, 7:17pm UTC
no words....
Heidi S. Jun 13, 2011, 7:20pm UTC
Such heartfelt words, the energy of the world still includes him and brings him to you in special ways - just as my brother comes to me. We can't forget them because they are all around us. Lovely, David. So sorry for your loss...
Chick J. Jun 13, 2011, 7:20pm UTC
It is raining on my cheeks, right now.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jun 13, 2011, 8:14pm UTC
Sigh...........................xxxxxx's
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jul 6, 2012, 7:55pm UTC
I'm here - again. And always.
Angie O. Jun 13, 2011, 9:00pm UTC
Hauntingly beautiful; so sorry for your loss.
elizabeth evans Jun 13, 2011, 10:12pm UTC
Beautiful.


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Barbara H. Jun 13, 2011, 10:55pm UTC
it's windy with the possibility of rain
it's living with the possibility of loss
and in the event of either one
the world changes in a way
that keeps the memory alive each day

I wish I could bring him back for you
Priscilla P. Jun 13, 2011, 11:02pm UTC
such a beautiful, touching tribute, David
Tina Coruth Jun 14, 2011, 7:19am UTC
A beautiful and loving tribute.
jeanne clarke Jun 14, 2011, 9:17am UTC
wonderful tribute to your boy. I can only try to imagine the pain - yet you also see the joy he left behind.
Adelaide M. Jun 14, 2011, 10:35am UTC
Thanks for posting to Point Taken.

Have a great day!

Beautiful!
William Dotani Jun 18, 2011, 4:52pm UTC
This is very touching. The ending brought a tear.
Beth J. Jun 18, 2011, 6:22pm UTC
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Junior (THIRDSTONE) L. Jun 20, 2011, 3:46am UTC
This is a very powerful piece, I can't begin to know what you must of gone through.
Nurse Nancy S. Jun 23, 2011, 2:25am UTC
David! I am so sorry for your loss. Although I have never had a child pass, I have had many close to me, both young and old, leave me. I can feel your pain.
This brought tears to my eyes...so touching.
And yes, I am sure he misses you!!!!
Katrina Hall Jul 10, 2011, 1:10pm UTC
Beautifully written, and I am so sorry for the death of your boy. I agree with Angela, though, that his greeting could be in a crows hello, or the sizzle of lightning, or the whisper of rain. I waver between reincarnation and heaven, not sure which ( or both) exist, but I think I do believe in the energy of love. Blessings to you -
C.F. Stewart Jul 24, 2011, 2:43pm UTC
An endearing write, David. It's one thing to sustain the courage to keep living in the now and quite another to do so with pen in hand expressing the depth of your loss. Touching to the very marrow. Eloquent.
I'm so very sorry, David. With tears in my eyes, I know some hurts will never heal.

Hugs,
Mare~
LK W. Jul 29, 2011, 1:06pm UTC
So beautiful ~ and I know your son is always with you . . . Nothing is stronger than "love".
Robert - just a simple man - B. Jul 31, 2011, 11:07am UTC
Sigh, so sad yet lovely. The ending is so very heartfelt. In his time here, your son was granted a wonderful and caring father. I believe he was blessed.

Good day sir!
Bubbeh Maisse (aka, G T) Aug 2, 2011, 8:00pm UTC
This reaches out to touch us all, and we reach back, hoping to touch your heart as you have ours.
Marilyn (PaintsOnSlate) S. Aug 6, 2011, 5:49am UTC
That is beautiful David. He knows you love him.
M. Bradley McCauley Aug 15, 2011, 9:31am UTC
Feeling what you feel, the emptiness is real, it's been five years since my son passed, his memory will last beyond time, mine, his wife's, his children, his siblings, his friends will continue to remember because he was one of the good guys. Hold on to all the sweet memories, until you two meet again. Blessings.
john k. Aug 25, 2011, 7:35pm UTC
Very powerful.
David W. Aug 25, 2011, 9:28pm UTC
Thank you John. I was driven by the worst of emotions, grief.
KittyKutabare aka Candy Pole Sep 6, 2011, 2:23pm UTC
♥
Nichelle Mitchem Sep 12, 2011, 5:39pm UTC
Simply beautiful. Very sorry for your loss.
Georgia Zissou Oct 6, 2011, 12:58pm UTC
He strides around the house and yard,

animated in death as he was in life.

He gave us a run for the money

I never knew he could run so far.

This is set of lines is haunting, and interesting to me. Thank you for the beautiful inspiration this morning. Georgia
Quinn (aka Entwife) Blackburn Oct 14, 2011, 2:06pm UTC
marvelous wordcrafting, well done!
Alison H. Jan 10, 2012, 6:24pm UTC
The scene and emotions are beautifully expressed. Our loved ones do check up on us. Dad came back and played with lights and the telephone after he passed. And another time, too.
David W. Jan 10, 2012, 7:42pm UTC
Thank you, Alison.
☃ Shannon K. Wendt Jan 10, 2012, 7:03pm UTC
Absolutely beautiful tribute.

(((HUGS)))
David W. Jan 10, 2012, 7:43pm UTC
Back at you, Shannon.
Orbus Argentum Apr 25, 2012, 2:49pm UTC
This is such a strong work, that the emotions it brings forth cannot be denied.
Kelly Kay Jun 22, 2012, 5:22pm UTC
A wonderfully written, heart-felt tribute to your son. He is all around & you will meet again. ♥
Ms Lee P. Jul 6, 2012, 12:31pm UTC
Losing a child has got to be the most painful experience ever. You have paid him a nice tribute.
Shelbia C. Aug 1, 2012, 1:19pm UTC
beautiful tribute.
amy s. Oct 11, 2012, 2:35pm UTC
what a lovely expression of a thunder and lightning storm
amy s. Oct 11, 2012, 2:36pm UTC
i just wanted to say "hi" and have a great haunted weekend
Renita P. Mar 3, 2013, 9:46pm UTC
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