by Atticus *.
Member since:
September 16, 2006

Arc of the River

April 14, 2011 06:22 PM UTC
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Arcing silver fish

across the water sparks jump

down river May flies


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Whetstone: Haiku are like, the altoids of poetry.........



Comments: 39

elizabeth evans Apr 14, 2011, 6:25pm UTC
Fantastic imagery, Atticus.
Atticus *. Apr 14, 2011, 11:06pm UTC
Thank you very much elizabeth. :-)
Karl Leuba Apr 15, 2011, 11:31am UTC
Agreed, and I took the liberty of sharing your word song on Facebook. You've presented a fine image of rebirth.

Songbird's melody
whistles through the budding trees --
winter flees from spring.
Veronica Hosking Apr 14, 2011, 6:27pm UTC
When did you find time to write one? There are so many haiku to read for today's prompt. I love the picture you've painted.
Atticus *. Apr 14, 2011, 11:09pm UTC
It wasn't easy today! Long work day, class, a host of very lovely haiku to read.... but then again, I found such inspiration in everyone's poetry today.
kara t Apr 14, 2011, 6:29pm UTC
nice:)
Atticus *. Apr 14, 2011, 11:09pm UTC
Thanks kara :-)
Granny Janny Apr 14, 2011, 6:40pm UTC
Tasty altoid...what do may flies look like? I can see the rest.
Atticus *. Apr 14, 2011, 11:12pm UTC
I think they are fairly big as flies go, and they tast a lot like bug. May fly can also refer to a typ of fishing lure ~ and of course: As May flies, so goes the spring. :-)
Janet "Jax" B. Apr 15, 2011, 2:25am UTC
mayfly insects are nasty....in the summer they will completely cover the bridges over the Mississippi river. I have actually watched a snowplow just push the mayflies off the bridge and into the river. Ewww. Oh, I will admit that we've gone in parking lots covered in them and spun around like we were on snow.
Granny Janny Apr 15, 2011, 9:24pm UTC
Ah...the poem takes on a sinister side!
Bernard C. Apr 14, 2011, 7:38pm UTC
No to fly-fishing then - nicely put - thanks for sharing :-)


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Atticus *. Apr 14, 2011, 11:13pm UTC
Thanks Bernard. I hear they are biting up river. :-)
Ann Marcaida Apr 15, 2011, 11:07am UTC
I love the way you play with some of the words as both nouns and verbs ("sparks" and "flies"). It keeps me thinking and re-reading the poem.

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Eileen Benavente-Blas Apr 14, 2011, 7:41pm UTC
Exquisite! When I read it, I went "ahh..."
Atticus *. Apr 14, 2011, 11:14pm UTC
Thanks Eileen. :-)
Alison H. Apr 14, 2011, 7:59pm UTC
Nice imagery
JOHN BECK Apr 14, 2011, 9:44pm UTC
Alison, expert in haiku, are you not going to post one for Mindful Poetry?
Atticus *. Apr 14, 2011, 11:14pm UTC
Yes, where is your haiku young lady!
Alison H. Apr 14, 2011, 11:21pm UTC
Thanks for asking, you two. I will post my haiku but not on MF because then the haiku publishers won't look at it. It will be in my group, "Poetry in Private."
Atticus *. Apr 14, 2011, 11:23pm UTC
Aw, can't you spare just one?
stephen berwaldt Apr 14, 2011, 9:32pm UTC
avidly I lure...fish bites
we fight...I falter...fish flees
hook...heart...hopes...empty

I love this haiku you have graces us with...Are May flies the same as black flies? They had those a lot up in Canada...they bite like beasts...

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JOHN BECK Apr 14, 2011, 9:45pm UTC
May flies are much bigger than black flies and they don't bite.
Atticus *. Apr 14, 2011, 11:16pm UTC
Nice haiku response! Thank you so much for the feature stephen!....May flies? What John said.
Kathryn Flynn Apr 14, 2011, 11:48pm UTC
Stephen, were you in the Gaspe?
stephen berwaldt Apr 14, 2011, 11:51pm UTC
I've driven through the peninsula, but I was in Ontario and north...Algonquin Park, Sudbury, Timmins, The black flies and mosquitos were as thick as thieves...
Kathryn Flynn Apr 16, 2011, 6:07pm UTC
that whole area...
JOHN BECK Apr 14, 2011, 9:45pm UTC
Like sparks popping up from the water. I like it.
Atticus *. Apr 14, 2011, 11:17pm UTC
Yes, that is what I was thinking. Thanks John.
Kimberly Blackadar Apr 14, 2011, 10:22pm UTC
Yes, great imagery, Atticus.
Atticus *. Apr 14, 2011, 11:18pm UTC
Thank you Kimberly. :-)
Kathryn Flynn Apr 14, 2011, 11:47pm UTC
I bet you whittled as a kid. It seems you thrive on the essence of whittling as a craft. This is a sterling example of whittling. Gorgeous. Your haikus and short forms are superb.
Elsie Duggan Apr 15, 2011, 12:51am UTC
I love it Atticus*, remember going fly fishing with a boyfriend I had before I met my Bill, and boy some of those flies were beautiful. And then again , there are May flies, I don't think they are so pretty, but pesky
Janet "Jax" B. Apr 15, 2011, 2:30am UTC
May flies way too fast
schools out and the kids fly past
Think freedom at last
Janet "Jax" B. Apr 15, 2011, 2:30am UTC
our kids finish school mid to end May.
A. F. Stewart Apr 15, 2011, 2:31pm UTC
A splendid bit of poetry.
Angela A. Apr 15, 2011, 8:38pm UTC
Where that rivers leads, we follow

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Mustafa Demiri Apr 16, 2011, 8:47pm UTC
I love the flow of this one... the silver fish arc over the water that sparkles beneath him... and a bounty of mayflies just down the stream. Brilliant
Kushal Poddar Apr 16, 2011, 10:55pm UTC
Despite the classical 5-7-5 bound you in using adjectives you painted almost in natural color as this form craves. Bravo!

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