Butterflies for Renda's New Group and...

Butterflies greet mornings with silent songs

Pride and hope follow their flights' trails

Butterfly wings carry childrens' laughter

Nets shake when one catches a glimpse

Diversions forever in constant motion

Butterflies swallow colors of the world

They climb ladders to sapphire skies

Above midnight trees, they flit and flock

When I close my eyes, they dance across my lids

Butterfly dreams cease in winter frost

In bright yellow spring, they wake

with groggy, honey- hungry bears

On sunny summer days, they frolic

in bountiful flower gardens

In flaming fall they return to leaves

Comments: 41

Sharon P. Aug 28, 2010, 12:04pm UTC

That is a sweet, gentle poem.

Jennifer Lee Aug 28, 2010, 12:05pm UTC

Thank you, Sharon!

Sharon P. Aug 28, 2010, 2:56pm UTC

Your welcome.

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Ann Marcaida Aug 28, 2010, 12:28pm UTC

Excellent freewrite-- did you edit at all? Thanks for sharing with The Surreal Circus.

(I'm guessing you didn't edit, because there are a couple of typos that spellcheck would fix).

Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Aug 29, 2010, 12:25am UTC

Yes, I too was intrigued with the idea of poetry as freewrite. I thought, how can that be? A true freewrite? And yet, I see it in Jennifer's poem. Not the typos, those can happen regardless of freewrite or not. But in Jennifer's free-flowing of ideas. They don't always make sense. Some of the connections are illogical, but yet, I would and have made the same goofy trains of thought/logic.

Quite amazing.

Jennifer Lee Aug 29, 2010, 11:48am UTC

I only edited for spelling as I typed, Ann. I guess I didn't do a very thorough job. lol Thanks for being here.

Jennifer Lee Aug 29, 2010, 11:50am UTC

HI Susan! I edited and moved the stanzas around a bit to increase the flow of ideas. Thanks for sharing your thoughts. I think you were right to an extent.

Ann Marcaida Aug 29, 2010, 11:51am UTC

I agree, Susan. Jennifer's poems read as free-writes, and at some point most of them were. (I don't know if this is still true, though).

Jennifer Lee Aug 29, 2010, 12:00pm UTC

Well, this one was before I chopped up and moved stanzas around. However, if you look at Lightening Strikes or Dolphins Live In the Moment, you should notice some improvements or growth in my writing. I usually re-write the original poem 3-5 times over a few days. Hope that answers your questions. Yet I don't mind free writes, especially since Susan has a group for me to share them.

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Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Aug 28, 2010, 12:49pm UTC

Greet morning with silent songs, shows their subtle character...wow!

Jennifer Lee Aug 29, 2010, 11:50am UTC

Thank you, Bhwana! I hope to read your latest today.

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Renda B. Aug 28, 2010, 6:23pm UTC

Many, many thanks for this beautiful entry to the Butterfly Challenge in Models Among Us. This is the first challenge of the group and I appreciate your entry, Jen. Butterflies are "diversions forever in constant motion". Nicely done!

Jennifer Lee Aug 29, 2010, 11:51am UTC

Thank you, Renda! I've edited some at Susan's suggestion.

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Angela A. Aug 28, 2010, 6:25pm UTC

Butterflies are very beautiful creatures. They brighten up anyone's day.
As does your lovely poem.

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Jennifer Lee Aug 29, 2010, 11:51am UTC

You're too kind, Angela! Thank you, sweetie!

Angela A. Aug 29, 2010, 5:14pm UTC

You're welcome.

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Bill's Spirit Aug 29, 2010, 9:52am UTC

What a Beautiful composition, Jen.

We have a butterfly bush in the small landscaped bed outside our apartment. Yesterday I was treated to some whimsical joy as I watched a monarch swoop and glide, swoop and glide, swoop and glide. The orange and black of the wing designs stood out so well against the pale blue of the clear sky.

Thought I'd share that little story since your poem brought the memory so clearly back to me.

Blessings

Jennifer Lee Aug 29, 2010, 11:53am UTC

So glad you did, Bill! I'm so pleased to her you're at home and not camping out of necessity. Thank you for telling me that delightful moment you had.

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Svetlana Goryacheva Aug 30, 2010, 1:54pm UTC

Filled with such a tender beauty... brilliantly done, my dear soul sis! :-)

Love and hugs always - S.

Jennifer Lee Aug 31, 2010, 5:46am UTC

Thanks, Sveta! You're overflowing heart senses the beauty in all things. Love you.

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Ruthi C. Sep 2, 2010, 9:43pm UTC

Soft and smooth, Jennifer.

Jennifer Lee Sep 2, 2010, 10:18pm UTC

Thank you, Ruthi!

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lynn a. Sep 2, 2010, 9:52pm UTC

This put a smile on my face as I read through your poem. Very nice. Returning to the leaves doesns't seem so bad, but more a matter of moving on to the next stage. I like it.

Jennifer Lee Sep 2, 2010, 10:18pm UTC

Hi Lynn! That last line is about their short life span. Did you know that they only live about 40 days? Thank you for reading and commenting!

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Barbara Radisavljevic Sep 3, 2010, 12:34am UTC

My favorite lines are
"Butterflies greet mornings with silent songs" and
"Butterflies swallow colors of the world."
Such striking word pictures these are.