by Sheila Deeth
Member since:
February 1, 2007

As night like wool - Wednesday Writing Essentials

December 10, 2009 12:26 AM UTC
views: 0 | 2 people recommend this | comments: 23

As woolen clouds touched earth and grew to fog, the sheared sheep shying, as sunlight dropped and puppy-dog wrapped its naked fur in dark, they started out. Stark shepherds crossed the wool-clad field, wool-capped and gowned, where downy grass-heads dripped their milk-white strands, slipped down the hill. Soft lambskin covered the small boy’s hands, bleating; he carried his task. The town lay sleeping.

 

Lights danced and sang in candy clouds above, star speckles glinting in fleece. And the baby boy? The shepherds gave him a lamb.

 

Child’s hands grow cold. It really doesn’t matter anymore. He waits for the son.

 

For Wednesday Writing Essentials, December 9th:

  • The story/poem/essay must occur at night
  • All characters must be male--no females allowed this time, except for the author
  • Use Petrarchan Conceit or simply Conceit as a Literary Device as many times as you wish, but at least once.
  • Use the phrase:  It doesn't matter anymore.
  • tag with wwe




Comments: 23

lynn a. Dec 10, 2009, 12:39am UTC
Sheila, this is wonderful. I'm at a loss for words to describe the pleasant and comforting feelings this causes.
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Dec 10, 2009, 1:41am UTC
Sheila, what a write! Worthy of several reads. Next time I'm going to include a special section of prompts that are ridiculously cumbersome just to see you turn a sow's ear into a silk purse.
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Dec 10, 2009, 1:42am UTC
This is featured in Gather Writing Essentials.
Sheila Deeth Dec 10, 2009, 8:13pm UTC
Thanks Susan :)
JOHN BECK Dec 10, 2009, 8:29am UTC
Fantastic! The poem is as warm as the fleece, the alliteration well done and never forced, and tasteful pun. I love it!
Ann Marcaida Dec 10, 2009, 9:03am UTC
Wonderfully seasonal. Congratulations on your feature!

Thanks for sharing with The Surreal Circus.
Ann Marcaida Dec 10, 2009, 9:04am UTC
The final line is great. Earthly comforts no longer matter.
Donald M. Dec 10, 2009, 9:59am UTC
I agree with Ann, the final line is great. I have always admired your talent. Wish I could phrase my thoughts this well.
Kushal Poddar Dec 10, 2009, 10:32am UTC
Poetical. Amazing.

immortality
Kay M Dec 10, 2009, 12:33pm UTC
Wonderful imagery. A lovely write.
Angela A. Dec 10, 2009, 6:16pm UTC
This astounds me on how you can use so little words to convey such meaning!
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
Sandi S. Dec 10, 2009, 8:21pm UTC
Lovely, Sheila. Powerful use of words!
Marge H. Dec 11, 2009, 11:21am UTC
Powerful and beautiful imagery.
Ms Lee P. Dec 11, 2009, 3:11pm UTC
Very nice. You did good.
Ruthi C. Dec 11, 2009, 9:31pm UTC
Sheila, I truly had to read this over and over again to take in the beauty of each carefully chosen word. This is pure poetry m'dear!
Mariana T. Dec 12, 2009, 1:56am UTC
Sheila - beautifully done - wow...impressive and warm! Salud
d d. Dec 16, 2009, 7:11am UTC
Sheila, wonderful visual descriptive words that convey a vivid scene.
elizabeth evans Dec 16, 2009, 7:40am UTC
Lyrical refrains clothed in wool
Bring smiles to my face.
C A. Dec 16, 2009, 8:03am UTC
Beautiful, Sheila.
William Dotani Dec 16, 2009, 9:42am UTC
You give wool a coat of many colors.
Alison H. Dec 16, 2009, 11:34am UTC
A prose poem of rich beauty and wonder. Thank you.
amy s. Dec 17, 2009, 3:29pm UTC
just stopped by to say "hi" and tell you "You wrote an awesome story"

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