Four Bullets

Four bullets . One for Jake. He clicked the chamber of the six shooter .One for Rose. She betrayed him . Sold him out.

They could have escaped with the loot; South bound train was comin’ through soon or the stagecoach to Durango.

She told him it was business. Tell that to his heart.

Now he waited, hidden, for the gang to cross Dead Man’s Pass to the hideout. They thought he was gone.

Horse's hooves. Three riders. The third must be her reason.

The pistol report rang out in the canyon. Four pools of blood in the sand .

word count :100

Comments: 24

Kay M. Nov 4, 2009, 3:42pm EST

Very good! And you are quick.

sheila h. Nov 4, 2009, 4:23pm EST

Lol..Quick on the draw?
Thank you,Kay!

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Human, Katherine, seeker of intergalactic life, inhabitant of Earth Nov 4, 2009, 4:36pm EST

Did the prompt proud Ms Sheila : - )

sheila h. Nov 4, 2009, 5:23pm EST

Well,Thank ya ,ma'um..
:)
hey! miss you ,KC..what about my proposal?

Human, Katherine, seeker of intergalactic life, inhabitant of Earth Nov 4, 2009, 7:10pm EST

Which Proposal is that?

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William Dotani Nov 4, 2009, 4:47pm EST

Great story. I love the sublime nature you create by your balanced pacing in your unfolding of events.

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sheila h. Nov 4, 2009, 5:28pm EST

The gritty final sun baked scene of Selznick's Duel in the Sun" popped into my feeble brain
....where Jennifer Jones and Gregory Peck battle in an over the top scramble based upon their love and hate for each other ..
this short based on betrayal ,of course..
Thanks, Pard.

William Dotani Nov 15, 2009, 10:32am EST

Thank you. I'm always interested in the source of creative ideas.

Btw: I took one of your comments and put it in chapter 2 of my Sunshine story. I hope you don't mind and flag me after I post it.

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