Alleluia - Acrostic - Mindful Poetry

Oooh my goodness Elsie, you sure do know your way
with many words and I loved them !! Love you, Barbie

More words than braids on your pigtails I believe.

thank you Barbara, and William you are so right.

You amaze me, love your poem thanks for sharing.

Thank you very much Larry

You keep painting a heavenly scene.

I just spoke to the Pope and he wants you to touch up the Cistine Chapel's ceiling.

I'll get my brush and call him back, thank you William, perhaps I want to see things this way right now, and all the time really,

Don't you just love William's comments? He speaks with such authority his comments are absolutely believeable so Elsie don't be surprised if you get a call from Rome!!!!!!

lol, well I love Williams comments, and does speak with authority, but don't think I am going to sit by the phone, thanks Barbara, lol

I'm sure the Pope will text-message you.

I was just give out yesterday and fell asleep at 10 p.m. with all the lights left on. I woke up at 5 a.m. I have another busy day ahead. I have to take our car in for service at 8:30 a.m.

Oh! Holy Night! I hear the angels singing!

Thank you Barbara, as I wrote this,so did I, lol

Of course the Pope was speaking in Latin, so I had to get a translation. He said the ceiling would have a paint by number paint set for you to use.

I don't really need the paint by number thing, I majored in art, and took adult classes in oil painting, so think I could hold my own, but don't know if I could paint lying on my back, perhaps he could put up a hammock for me, lol, love you William

This group at Gather is just so darned multi talented!!!!!

very nice!

Thank you Ashley,

you are a wordsmith Elsie.

Thank you very much Ed

this is a great piece - thanx 4 sharin

Thank you Infinity

Meaningful as well as meeting the form. Very nice, Elsie.

Thank you John, I am trying this new stuff, fun doing it

Wow...that's all I can say.

Thank you Amanda.

Elsie - I am really impressed. You have written an inspiring sermon with an angel choir accompaniment and still kept to the rules. Do you keep all those word choices in your memory, or do you wear out a dictionary? I have to resort to dictionary and thesaurus just to write prose without rules.

I don't own a dictionary Ruth, I always loved English and spelling, and wrote since I was a kid, and also spent years as a legal secretary, all that helps, and I am trying new things with all the rules, thank you for commenting.

You never cease to amaze me with your talent with words
and rhyme. Very nice poem, Elsie

Thanks so much Donna

An appropriate read for a Sunday. :)

Very beautiful, Elsie.

Thanks so much Marge

Most Uplifting...I love this.

Thank you Granny, appreciate your commenting.

This is so cool! Really lovely and inspiring.

Thanks so much Sheila

Hi Elsie, you know dear, since you alerted me to this one, I'm going to be picky. :-)

I'll start out with the beginning. I like how one chorus sounds differently to everyone, to me, that means that One can meet the needs of Many. I'm not so sure about the chorus bellowing, though. I think a horn or bell can bellow, but when it's a person or group of people, then bellow becomes unpleasant.

I like the angels singing praises, but in my theology, God needs no justification, so that word, for me, doesn't work.

Your belief in ultimate Peace stands out and I welcome that assertion. Hurray for Peace! But you might want a comma after Quietly.

These two lines are weak for me. I almost understand them and I think that much of the poem is concrete rather than experimental so it might make a stronger poem to make these lines more clear.

Xavier bends from written arrows slung

Yielding hope to all as Blessings fall and

Let me know if I was discouraging, Elsie. I certainly don't aim to be, but sometimes I might not say something in a tactful way. I don't want you to say, "Ouch!"

Of course, I hardly said anything about all the good of this poem. The subject is perfect as parts of the Hebrew Testament is written in acrostic!

You have a good narrative going and that makes the poem easy to follow despite the need to follow the "rules."

I appreciate your taking the time to read it, and I am not at all discouraged, I know there are many rules I don't follow, and I keep learning, the whole poem to me as I was writing it, was not so biblical as much as it was a wish for it to be in this time, meaning so many people hear things differently and the two lines you note, are that Xavier, the warrior, falls from written arrows slung, (without fighting) and that hope for peace will come that way, I know it had biblical overtone when you use the term angelic voices, and I don't know, lol, I have heard some people sing
that I could describe as bellowing, maybe me, lol. Thank you Susan