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you pulled me through~ this is a beautifully concise translation of prose from the spinner's core through the reader's mind's eye~

a gently twisted fiber Bard; one which binds true

This resonates so true.

works for me!

This is marvelously expressed! People come to poetry with different likes, dislikes and expectations, but for me, the most satisfying poetry is the kind you describe.

Who are some favorite poets of yours? I have lately discovered Olav Hauge's poetry (Norwegian poet). Some of his short, pithy poems about other poets have sent me in search of their works.

I read very little poetry but my favorite is Rumi . What I do read is mcinly Chinese poetry froom the 7th century and a lot of zen poetry

This is a beautiful write, John. Thank you.

Yes, I agree, John. The Rumi poetry, translated by Coleman Barks, is truly unique. I heard a piece of music called, 'Last Night, The Moon Came Dropping Its Clothes In The Street,' a phrase which is so pictorial, you could not change it. The phrase comes from The New Rule.
I also like the work by Jewel Kilcher, although it's shorter and less rich.

As to your own poem, I think it attempts to say something deeper but doesn't quite do it. I believe it would benefit from some editing, experimenting with different layouts. The couplet or tercet arrangement is a little too fractured for the cohesive theme of how poetry works. Then I question the term 'true poetry'; it's too ambiguous and assumes we know what you mean. We use similes to say something is 'like' something else. However, today, the word 'like' is so overused, it's almost an 'erm' in general speech. I simply hate the habit, especially when it's repeated after every fourth word, as some people do. Instead, I would avoid similes and adopt metaphors. Say what you mean. If you think poetry is a Russian doll, I think I can understand that, rather than you expalin it in detail. Use the 'unwitting' meaning as much as the 'witting'. After all, that's how you see it.

Peace.

"True poetry" has a spacific meaning having nothing to do with true or false

I said exactly what I wanted it to say. If you didn't get then, it wasn't for you

Jerome~ usually when poets and writers WANT critique of their work THEY will ask for it~ you are entitled to your opinion~ however your comment is more of an overall generalized critique of form and usage instead specific generated~
poetry is highly personal and open to translation~ we all personalize it and take from it certain facets that speak to us on a very intimate level~

CONGRATS on you being on the STAFF PICKS page John~ this poem is exquisite and deserves the praise it gets~

Thank you for comments but I don't know what Staff Picl means

it means you are featured on a primary page for more exposure~ I sent you gathermail regarding it~ =)

I just stalked Purrrr here (how can one NOT notice her in their feed) and came and saw and and in awe of awe of a marvelous poem !!!

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Beautifully thought-out realization, John.

This is wonderful