by Jeremy Senters{P0eT!c_Re@zon!ng)
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August 26, 2007

This forever numb twilight

October 27, 2009 10:36 AM EDT
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I'm seem alive through the eyes of my father

I am real but never quite there

 

All emotion radiates away from me

I do not register to his heart...

why do I care?

I am alive through the eyes of my mother

Through the bond of motherhood she finds her love for me

 

She loves me as a mother loves her son

I am far away to her past a distance she cannot cross

Why do I care?

 

I am not alive when I look into the mirror

I see the world that doesn't see me

 

I gaze over the mass with an uncaring eye

faking what I need to quietly get by

why do I try?

 

I am ghost.

I am zombie.

I am wind.

I am ash.

I am                          .

 



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Comments: 8

vivi emerson Oct 27, 2009, 11:45am EDT
I got a sense of coming of age pain. My favorite line was:
faking what I need to quietly get by

I think we all have done that both consciously and unconsciously.

Thanks for sharing.
Mrslisae Photography E. Oct 27, 2009, 11:58am EDT
Emotions expressed very beautifully...
telling of the heart and mind~
Richard Thuss Oct 27, 2009, 12:27pm EDT
Very well composed. Brings back some haunting memories, but sometimes that is what good writing does. thanks
Ed Da Head Toker Oct 27, 2009, 5:17pm EDT
This was a very well written piece. A thought provoking post. This is your best yet.
Jeremy Senters{P0eT!c_Re@zon!ng) Oct 28, 2009, 7:02am EDT
Thanks for the comment and i'm glad u think so. A lot of my heart went into it which is something i am rarely able to do. i appreciate the comment
Ed Da Head Toker Oct 28, 2009, 9:33pm EDT
It showed that you put a lot of thought into this piece.
Jeremy Senters{P0eT!c_Re@zon!ng) Oct 28, 2009, 7:03am EDT
Thank for all your comments! I'm glad you enjoyed it !

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