by amy r.

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Wrote this Poem When I Was 13 - Lethal Pleasures...

October 24, 2009 10:08 AM EDT

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Yup, I was an odd thirteen year old lol!

Lilies scattered on the ground. I stand alone upon a dirt mound. Tears shoot down my pallid face. All is lost, what a disgrace! Roses have turned from red to brown. I let go of my wedding gown. I let it fall into the open ground. My deepest love is lost. I should have realized what lethal pleasures would cost. My existence will soon be taken. I am forever lost. Do you hear my cries? Never give up the precious for an indecent sigh.

Ok, poem two, here goes...

I wrote this one on the same day.

Empty

The sky is barren, my dreams are schattered.

I have just lost my only possession that solely mattered.

My mind is blank, my eyes are wild!

All of my fears have been reconciled,

my needs are reduced to that of a child,

curled up in a ball,

laying half dead, on the ground.

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Comments: 37

david f. Oct 24, 2009, 10:20am EDT

aaahhh - nothing like teenage angst.

a very talented 13 year old. ; )

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 12:45pm EDT

Tons of it. I was angst in a nutshell. Thank you.

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Marsha S. Oct 24, 2009, 10:21am EDT

pretty powerful stuff to be written at 13

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 12:45pm EDT

I've always been intense, I guess lol.

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Karen A. Oct 24, 2009, 10:29am EDT

deep thoughts during those tumultuous years

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 12:45pm EDT

Oh, you aren't kidding! You know how those years go.

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Barbara H. Oct 24, 2009, 10:31am EDT

Wow a deep thinking thirteen year old. Lost innocence?

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 12:44pm EDT

Absolutely, you got it! I was very deeply emotional, still am, and always will be, but it started to come out on paper when I was about ten. I had a teacher who encouraged me to write. She just had a feeling I would be good at it. I was so imaginative as a child. Thanks for reading, Barb!

Barbara H. Oct 24, 2009, 3:47pm EDT

I am so glad you had a teacher that encouraged you. My encourager was my seventh grade English teacher. We were suppose to write a piece a day and hand it in at the end of the day. I wrote poem after poem. One day the teacher stood up and said there was an exceptional poem she wanted to share. Read it and I thought gee thats good. It was mine Ha!Ha! I had forgotten to put my name on it.

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 4:07pm EDT

Lol! That's usually how it happens. Somebody lights the fuse and we begin to create. I was encouraged by a great number of English teachers and the such. They always pushed me harder and expected more out of me, but I'm glad for it.

Barbara H. Oct 24, 2009, 6:43pm EDT

Well when they push for your potential you know the teacher is in it for the right reasons. That is a good teacher. Glad for you. Keep writing.

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 10:05pm EDT

Thanks, Barb, I absolutely intend to. Its my favorite outlet for lots of frustrations and feelings. Getting it out and down on paper is a great healer for me.

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Cindy A. Oct 24, 2009, 10:43am EDT

wow such talent at such a young age! well done!

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 12:43pm EDT

Thank you.

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Kathryn E. Oct 24, 2009, 12:16pm EDT

Excellent - you seem much older! Very talented~

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 12:43pm EDT

Thank you. I'm 31 now, but I think I'm an old soul. I was very mature at 13. My son is 12 and he is nowhere near where I was then, but I'm grateful for that. I want him to be a kid as long as he can be ;)

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Christina K. Oct 24, 2009, 12:51pm EDT

I agree, seems like it was written by someone much older than 13!

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 1:11pm EDT

My brain was old since the day I was born haha!

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K K. Oct 24, 2009, 4:28pm EDT

Shame... I can only give you one 10..

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 5:44pm EDT

Awww, well thank you lol!

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Deloris Wright Oct 24, 2009, 5:10pm EDT

Very nice job Amy, thank you

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 5:44pm EDT

Thank you for reading :)!

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Tony Coffee Oct 24, 2009, 5:22pm EDT

Not bad for a 13 year old. Some of the stuff I have seen teenagers write about, especially in poems, makes zero sense these days. I actually was able to understand these, good job :).

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 5:45pm EDT

Thank you, pretty universal for that time in most of our lives, huh?

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Shaunee C. Oct 24, 2009, 7:33pm EDT

Very good for a 13 year old.

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 9:56pm EDT

Thank you! Thanks for reading! :)

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Mark N. Oct 24, 2009, 9:06pm EDT

Wow, intense, I guess so, that's putting it mildly, lol

amy r. Oct 24, 2009, 9:56pm EDT

Lol, that's me!

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Risa G. Oct 24, 2009, 11:30pm EDT

great use of rhyming.

amy r. Oct 25, 2009, 8:28am EDT

Thank you. I think that is probably the first device we learn when beginning to write poetry.

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Ed Da Head Toker Oct 25, 2009, 11:25am EDT

a nice read.

amy r. Oct 25, 2009, 2:00pm EDT

Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it.

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Angel sent from God Secret Sisters Oct 25, 2009, 6:34pm EDT

Amy
Wow those are very powerful poems for a 13 yr old

amy r. Oct 25, 2009, 7:29pm EDT

I'm very bipolar, wait, I mean emotional lol! I always have been that way and as soon as I figured out how to put it on paper, it was on!!!

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Elizabeth R. Oct 26, 2009, 3:05am EDT

Very intense for 13. You have always been such a talented lady. Thank you so much for sharing.

amy r. Oct 26, 2009, 11:41am EDT

Thank you, Elizabeth and I will continue to share :)

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Matthew A. Dec 7, 2009, 9:40am EST

Raw teenage angst! Loving it!!!

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