by Georgiana S.
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September 14, 2007

The Contents of Ashes

September 06, 2009 07:41 PM EDT
views: 196 | comments: 30

I breath in deeply, as is my wont

As is the reason to carry on

But look! A shower of ash floats down

It's in the very air surrounding me!

But foriegn matter we should heed

For in that cough of tainted air

Is someones lifes-blood still in there?

For every particle does contain

What burnt up just before this rain

Of flying debris, a once perfect tree

A house that once did hold

A persons treasures, all their gold

Now nothing more than matter changed

To a substance re-arranged.

 

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Comments: 30

Robert - just a simple man - B. Sep 6, 2009, 7:45pm EDT
A very good write my dear, flows rhythmically. And I agree with the content with one exception, I believe, my soul, as is, is eternal as is.

Love & Hugs.
Georgiana S. Sep 6, 2009, 8:54pm EDT
Interesting, your take on this, as I see in George's as well. I was compelled to write this as I have been choking on the ashes and smoke from the wild fires and thought that each breath contains something of what this fire consumed!
Robert - just a simple man - B. Sep 6, 2009, 9:15pm EDT
As a writer, don't you love when someone goes to an entire othe rplace on your words, without corrupting a single syllable.

The wildfires didn't even cross my mind. Well, not here, but I have been remembering you folks in harm's way. God bless.
Georgiana S. Sep 6, 2009, 9:23pm EDT
Yes, with this one I smile at all the comments making my thoughts and words seem more deep than origianlly intended!
George Shaw Sep 6, 2009, 7:47pm EDT
So true, so true. We will all come back as something, and when we have that hint of remembrance it is the bit of memory that did not get washed away in the river from the afterlife.
Georgiana S. Sep 6, 2009, 8:54pm EDT
see above explanation!
John Doyle Sep 6, 2009, 7:55pm EDT
Sad but beautiful
(Jasper,(Disciple for Christ. w. Sep 6, 2009, 8:00pm EDT
This is a great poem, thanks for sharing it.
Richard Lynn Livesay Sep 6, 2009, 8:17pm EDT
Nice poem ...art plus science...and true...we are all from the same building blocks,huh?
I just watched a film on some people tracing genetic DNA of a bunch of people in NY...of all races...it ended up they all came from (200,000 yrs. ago) the same two people...they called the science Adam and Eve...they were from Africa. That would freek out some KKK's and white supremists to see proof that they decended from 2 blacks in Africa!! Ha!
Georgiana S. Sep 6, 2009, 8:55pm EDT
Known that for a while. lucy was her name, no Eve (my middle name! )
But, again, as I wrote this of the mundane ashes of the wildfires, this new perspective is most interesting!
Richard Lynn Livesay Sep 7, 2009, 12:52am EDT
we all go ashes to ashes, dust to dust and although fire is the progenitor of change...out of the ashes flys the Phoenix, reborn.

as far as the physical...spray fire retardant on your roof and grass if flames come your way!!...but don't fear, that will attract what you fear.(UNiversal law)...Lucy was the body found...this was the Genome Project People.
Georgiana S. Sep 7, 2009, 7:12pm EDT
Oh cool. I shall have to check it out!
They have contained the fire near here now!
Erinn K. Sep 6, 2009, 8:36pm EDT
=)

Thank you for posting to * Post whatever your heart desires *
robin v. Sep 6, 2009, 8:42pm EDT
What rains that? a substance re-arranged, rain fall down! quixotic, Byzantium, rococo - phew! splash! , ash in a book. phew! silk fairys bound it. The bucks bound away they had some sense they just left, rain, mmmmmmmmmm. Iam galoshed by this one! nothing to add, must be commercial some one invent the parasol and the umbrella .. parachute its amazing where this things going with meteorology.
Georgiana S. Sep 6, 2009, 8:56pm EDT
again, I ws talking about the rain of ash from the wild fires here and what they actually may contain...what they burnt, becoming part of my respiratory system!
Jennifer Lee Sep 6, 2009, 9:08pm EDT
That is terrible for your lungs and a terrible tragedy for those who have lost their lives or homes. Well written, my dear. A poignant piece.
Jennifer Lee Sep 6, 2009, 9:09pm EDT
I was evacuated a little over a year ago and was lucky to come back to my home still standing.
Georgiana S. Sep 6, 2009, 9:21pm EDT
Scary! Icouldn't do it, I have ten large birds and cages and so much to care for.
thanks Jennifer!
Susan Roberts Sep 6, 2009, 11:07pm EDT
you can sure get a lot of different takes on this, but it is so beautifully done. Thank you for sharing it
Steph-in-NE ..... Sep 7, 2009, 12:53am EDT
great poem,,
you are great with your word and thoughts
Kushal Poddar Sep 7, 2009, 11:58am EDT
I want the troll to go to hell...with a blackboard where he would write forever that he won't rate anyone whose work he does not understand.
The poem is fine.
It is very realistic and I hope you are okay with all these.
night talks
Georgiana S. Sep 7, 2009, 7:13pm EDT
I just noticed the low rating. That is obviously personal!
They did the same when I posted about the death of my husband, they don't read, the hillbillys don't know how!
Angela M. Sep 7, 2009, 12:29pm EDT
Very nicely written

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Angela A. Sep 7, 2009, 6:58pm EDT
Truly profound!
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
Shelbia C. Sep 7, 2009, 7:11pm EDT
This is beautifully written.


Thanks for posting to Writing Reservoir
Richard Lynn Livesay Sep 7, 2009, 7:42pm EDT
Fire under control almost!!! hope you are safe and well!!
Georgiana S. Sep 7, 2009, 8:06pm EDT
thanks Shelbia.

Ah Richard, I have to add 'almost' as though the origination point of the fires has been contained and is out, it still burns farther north!
Fire has her dual nature~you present it here very well~
Georgiana S. Sep 8, 2009, 7:41pm EDT
thankee ma'am!
Thanks for posting to GutterGirls~

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