Corkscrew Angels (triolet)

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Kathryn E. Aug 5, 2009, 11:17pm EDT

Oh this swirls with magic, it does, it does, it does.........

I must know more about you. I must, I must, I must. To understand how you were made and built to write like this............

Lynn, whose writing motto is Tabula rasa - Caveat lector Aug 9, 2009, 3:25pm EDT

Ditto! lol

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Kathryn E. Aug 5, 2009, 11:17pm EDT

Featured in the Triple Name Club.

Atticus *. Aug 6, 2009, 8:45am EDT

Thank you Kathryn. What a beautiful comment (I am deeply flattered). Thank you so much for the feature!

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Kushal Poddar Aug 5, 2009, 11:20pm EDT

The form befits the poetry. It has a surround effect. I can be drawn into the vortex of this poem...

New dawn

Atticus *. Aug 6, 2009, 8:46am EDT

Thank you so much, poet friend Kushal

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JOHN BECK Aug 5, 2009, 11:42pm EDT

So original. So skillfully crafted. Excellent.

Atticus *. Aug 6, 2009, 8:46am EDT

Thank you John. I appreciate that very much.

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Jennifer Lee Aug 6, 2009, 1:15am EDT

Enraptured~Atticus, I am a nature lover and plan to spend an entire week under trees while camping beginning Monday. Your poem reminded me how it feels to be surrounded by the woods and it is very moving. I've never known any better feeling than a direct connection to Mama Earth when hugging a tree (or sitting under one). I agree with the others who came before me. Thank you for posting to our group and sharing your love of nature.

Atticus *. Aug 6, 2009, 8:49am EDT

Cool, We're off to the woods too! On our way to Asheville North Carolina (or thereabouts) tomorrow for a week of biking the Blueridge Pkwy and swimming in mountain streams. Thanks for the lovely comment.

elizabeth e. Aug 6, 2009, 5:31pm EDT

Don't forget to bring the wine.

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Mustafa Demiri Aug 6, 2009, 5:49am EDT

Banzai!... To the master of this work.

Atticus *. Aug 6, 2009, 8:54am EDT

Thank you so much, Mustafa-san.

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Nancy Silveria Aug 6, 2009, 7:49am EDT

Fascinating. This triolet seems to dance.

Atticus *. Aug 6, 2009, 8:55am EDT

Thank you Nancy

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Purrrrrrrrrrr~Genki dashite~Nantoka naru-yo! S. Aug 6, 2009, 12:42pm EDT

enthralling~what creative rhythmic delight~

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Purrrrrrrrrrr~Genki dashite~Nantoka naru-yo! S. Aug 6, 2009, 12:42pm EDT

Thank you for posting to GutterGirls~FEATURED

Atticus *. Aug 6, 2009, 10:16pm EDT

Thank you for the feature Purrrrrrrrrrr! ~And your lovely comment.

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James Ciriaco Aug 6, 2009, 1:04pm EDT

As an observer and admirer of these "corkscrew angels," I can say that you've done remarkable things with this triolet. The circling back of the form elegantly reflects the movement of the seeds in their descent, as well as the roundabout connections of thought. I think this is the second time you've squeezed blood from the stone of this unforgiving form.

Atticus *. Aug 6, 2009, 10:24pm EDT

They are fascinating are they not? Thank you James.

James Ciriaco Aug 7, 2009, 4:43pm EDT

As a brief aside, I think it's neat that while you never actually write "wind," your positioning of "mind" gets that idea in for us.

Atticus *. Aug 7, 2009, 5:02pm EDT

Its funny you should say that James. That was a little marble in my mouth as I wrote and read this poem to myself. :-) I love writing - It is so surprising. Sometimes subtly, sometimes shockingly, but always surprising.

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Umar, Abu Nurain Aug 6, 2009, 4:25pm EDT

To have the resonance of the words reflect the structure of the poem evidences a genius that bridges form and meaning as if it were easy. It is so natural een within this testingly difficult form.

Atticus. This is complexingly wonderful and clear.

Atticus *. Aug 6, 2009, 10:25pm EDT

Thank you so much Umar. You are kind.

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JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Aug 6, 2009, 8:49pm EDT

Great form and you worked it perfectly!

Atticus *. Aug 6, 2009, 10:27pm EDT

Thank you so much, Little Red. :-)

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Ann M. (Site Scryer) Aug 7, 2009, 8:31am EDT

I'm afraid my inner biologist is messing with my reading of this poem. All I can think of is taking core sample from trees using a corkscrew-like device. One uses the resulting cylindrical section of wood to count the rings and ascertain the tree's age.

(It read much better if I think of seeds, though!)

Atticus *. Aug 7, 2009, 4:39pm EDT

Hey Ann, thanks for the comment. Yes, think of seeds.

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Stacy Smith Aug 8, 2009, 9:47am EDT

What a creative poem, Atticus. I truly enjoyed this piece.
I am organizing a tree poetry contest. If you'd like more details, let me know and I'll email you once the contest starts.

Stacy Smith
srsmith25atyahoodotcom
(Replace "at" and "dot" with their symbols.)

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Atticus *. Aug 8, 2009, 2:09pm EDT

Thanks Stacy, I'll check it out.

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Lynn, whose writing motto is Tabula rasa - Caveat lector Aug 9, 2009, 3:33pm EDT

Haven't seen a cottonwood in over half a lifetime, now. Have changed my opinion of trees since going from small town girl, to coutry girl, and, eventually landing in a major US city. I used to see one tree from my window, if I looked out at just the right angle. It is a Ginko in a meridian strip between two one way streets. Nonetheless, it was "my tree." Now my neighbor planted a sapling in front of his house blocking the view of "my tree." I'm not as "citified" as I thought I was. Thought I adjusted to my new view of trees, and then I read this!

I miss treeSSSSS! Thanks for the reminder. (And, dang, I know how triolet works, but this has none of the "notice the form" attached to it. So, cool - making me want to "ditto" Kathryn twice.)

Atticus *. Aug 11, 2009, 4:50pm EDT

Thank you so much Lynn. I'm sorry you are suffering from tree deprivation. Hope you get some bark time soon. Thanks for the wonderful comment on my poem. Me, I'm sitting here in rural North Carolina surrounded by trees and mountains, so I understand completely, sort of in reverse, how the lack of trees would weigh upon one. When I lived in New York I had to go to central park often.

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Svetlana Goryacheva Aug 17, 2009, 1:38pm EDT

A lovely triolet! :-) Enjoyed it tremendously!

Blessings and best wishes - S.

Atticus *. Aug 18, 2009, 9:17pm EDT

Thank you so much Svetlana

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Granny Janny H. Sep 1, 2009, 6:41pm EDT

Thanks to Ann who just commented on my photo of a milkweed "angel" and linked this poem on the comment, I was able to avoid missing this poetic gem. If you would like to publish it or republish it with my image you are welcome to do so. I could send it to you in regular email if you like.

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