by William Dotani
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October 27, 2006

Violins In The Distance

July 29, 2009 04:31 PM EDT
views: 159 | rating: 9.6/10 (25 votes) | comments: 73

Sentimental journey, sunrise, an old love song
Violins arcing atmosphere, torching blue sky
Breaking free, ascending rhapsody, yes to love
A river path, bridges to cross, hold on there's more
Within soft breeze, a chorus resplendent, teaching
Rejecting abeyance, hearts embrace, soulfully

Sandalwood hints, levitation mists, painted song
Scents of merry itinerary, tuning
Forever, lost souvenirs retrace, crested waves
Inception aspects, completion, moving on, turn
Crossroads, illusions, confusion, what to do, breathe
Two step dancing and fancy, sunsets smiles can save

Stepping stones are calling us back, but asking
Is there a holiday or season flowers fade
The violins rehearsing another rescue
Let us have faith, let us have hope, let us sing songs
Some are silly, out there with no maybe, but me
Filling in the blanks of our jigsaw destiny

Sunshine of your eyes finds Stephen Foster’s love song
Norman Rockwell scene, a page in time, stepping strong
You’re my destination from dawning to the dusk
With dreams of fairer weather, filled with love, then cusp
You’re leaning on me and, truth, I’m leaning on you
So glad I can rest my head in your loving arms

Simplicity and weeds win with laughter brewing
Meandering towards whatever time bequeaths
Explore your universe, let colors embolden
I am here or patiently awaiting your smile
Long days unwinding, it won’t always be this way
Too soon my boat will be sailing: Your happiness
Violins in the distance sending love each day
 

 

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Comments: 73

Angela A. Jul 29, 2009, 4:35pm EDT
Sounds like beautiful music to me!
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
lynn a. Jul 29, 2009, 4:40pm EDT
This is awesome, William. You paint a beautiful life when all will not be absolutely beautiful. I like being older and in love. It feels so much better than being younger and crazy in love. You manage to express the peace and comfort that comes with having been with someone for many years and living the joy in the sometimes very small things, almost unthought about daily routines, such as weeding.
William Dotani Aug 1, 2009, 6:53pm EDT
I like the common touch. Yes, you are spot on. Thank you.
Donna C. Jul 29, 2009, 4:42pm EDT
This is just so beautiful, William.
I love violin music, Norman Rockwell, Steven Foster
and two step dancing!!
This is a real love story!!
Thank you!!
William Dotani Jul 30, 2009, 4:12am EDT
Thank you. Your words are kind.
D. K. Jul 29, 2009, 4:49pm EDT
violins...a sound i love to hear. unhappy or happy. always brings peace to my heart. very well written. thank you william. this poem brought peace to my heart.
William Dotani Aug 3, 2009, 2:49pm EDT
This is a cherished compliment. Thank you.
William Dotani Jul 29, 2009, 5:02pm EDT
I haven't been commenting much because this poem consumed me all of last night and much of this afternoon. I do deeply appreciate your comments and will respond as soon as I can.
elizabeth e. Jul 29, 2009, 5:05pm EDT
Oh, William, you are a romantic at heart
Weeding beautiful thoughts of lasting love
And sharing them with your fellow friends.
Though, honesty, Steven Foster nor scenes
From Norman Rockwell turn me on..nor
Violins playing in the background. Give me
Bob Marley or Rusted Root singing "Send
Me on My Way" or Cat Stevens' Hard Headed Woman
As I speed down the highway of my life.
William Dotani Aug 3, 2009, 4:10am EDT
Cat Stevens is one of my favorite songwriter.
Barbara H. Jul 29, 2009, 6:41pm EDT
Oh My! A man who remains quiet just so long and then begins a symphony that rises to a crescendo painted with the color and beauty of memories and sings and dances through the readers heart then retires to rest in a lovely leaning.
The beauty in words you create seems to come forth so easily.
William Dotani Aug 3, 2009, 2:41pm EDT
I deeply appreciate your feelings in your comment.
Violins in the distance- How romantic William. A great poem (again)
William Dotani Aug 4, 2009, 1:24pm EDT
I appreciate your thoughts.
JOHN BECK Jul 29, 2009, 7:26pm EDT
You're speaking to me and my memories, Bill. Had you mentioned Al Capp or Li'l Abner it would have been complete! Your closing is warm and special. I won't call you a sentimental old fool, I'll reserve that title for myself.
William Dotani Aug 1, 2009, 3:00am EDT
Names are different but the feeling is the same across generations.
Marianne M. Jul 29, 2009, 8:26pm EDT
I love this one, Bill, especially your first stanza!
William Dotani Jul 30, 2009, 2:49am EDT
I appreciate your feeling.
Your lady love will swoon at this .... what a romantic you are at heart, my friend. Lovely!
K D. Jul 29, 2009, 9:39pm EDT
A sweet love story!
penni d. Jul 29, 2009, 10:13pm EDT
What a wonderful rhapsody of love to sign off to tonight, William. I bow to you, my friend
William Dotani Jul 30, 2009, 2:50am EDT
Are you learning Japanese social customs of bowing?
Rita B. Jul 30, 2009, 7:06am EDT
Every year our fair sponsors the Old Time Fiddlers played by Mannie Shaw and group. This musical instrument of the viol family was popular here for years. This poem brought to mind when he was still around. They still play every year.
William Dotani Aug 4, 2009, 3:54am EDT
I love good fiddle music. I love Irish Folk and Bluegrass. Sounds like you lost a great performer. That's sad, but it's good the tradition lives on.
Cristina S. Jul 30, 2009, 7:50am EDT
this is a perfect love story/song!
William Dotani Aug 1, 2009, 1:56pm EDT
That's very kind of you.
Kushal Poddar Jul 30, 2009, 9:00am EDT
Your deep self imposed many metaphors of love...
Incredible writing, as always, with so much feeling and for some reason this one line got to me the most...

Let us have faith, let us have hope, let us sing songs


And I'm so trying...which is probably why it stuck out so very much, but I did love the poem in its' entirety.

Hugs,
Marilyn
William Dotani Aug 1, 2009, 1:52pm EDT
I sort of felt like I was Zero Mostel in Fiddler On The Roof when I wrote this line.
Oh, This is for you.

Here.
William Dotani Aug 1, 2009, 12:25pm EDT
I hear the dude you're talking about has never had a bad hair day.
barb n. Jul 30, 2009, 1:17pm EDT
WOW!! This is the first thing of yours that I clicked on to check out, after following Marilyn around... this is so beautiful

I am really glad I found you thru her post:)
William Dotani Jul 31, 2009, 2:27am EDT
Does Marilyn know you are stalking her???

I try to keep my verse positive. I appreciate your visit.
Ruthi C. Jul 30, 2009, 1:25pm EDT
The violin truly sings!
William Dotani Aug 3, 2009, 1:15pm EDT
Thank you.
Elsie Duggan Jul 30, 2009, 3:08pm EDT
Lovely poem by the romantic poet William, a man who can write about love and life like that is a man after my own heart. Beautiful William, I hope your wife is seeing these.
William Dotani Jul 31, 2009, 2:25am EDT
I'm not romantic. I is a hayseed. Thank you kindly.
Wilma M. Aug 4, 2009, 6:25pm EDT
Oh, William, I think you ARE a romantic. It comes through very clearly in so many of your poems.
Marge H. Jul 30, 2009, 7:48pm EDT
I envy you your ability to express yourself so eloquently and I envy your wife for having a husband who is so romantic and willing to let her know how much he loves her.
William Dotani Jul 31, 2009, 2:23am EDT
It is easier to write than to say. I deeply appreciate your comment.
Debra C. Jul 30, 2009, 8:42pm EDT
I love the haunting, melodic thoughts one can spin on a violin (though I'm partial to doing it on viola). There are such delicious echos available in the right acoustical areas ... prolonging the thoughts -- maturing -- elevating.
William Dotani Jul 31, 2009, 2:22am EDT
Interesting observation. Thank you.
William Dotani Aug 4, 2009, 3:04am EDT
I thought more about your comment and I find it quite an agreeable compliment. I appreciate that.
Marie J. R. Jul 30, 2009, 8:59pm EDT
a beautiful write,,, very vivid ,, keep going William,,, you should publish,,, Bless you,,,
William Dotani Aug 1, 2009, 12:33pm EDT
I want to publish, but I need to find a publisher who will back me.
Ed Da Head Toker Jul 31, 2009, 3:38am EDT
This was a very pleasant read. imaginative
William Dotani Aug 1, 2009, 12:34pm EDT
I thought you were going to say this poem a good sleeping aid. I appreciative your comment.
Debra H. Jul 31, 2009, 8:02am EDT
This brings back wonderful memories William. When my grandfather passed his service was in a garden and in liew of the preacher an old friend of his stepped up, said a few words asking us to reflect on our fondest memories of him and the began to play a violin for about an hour. The music was so sweet and comforting, I have never forgotten it.
William Dotani Aug 1, 2009, 12:35pm EDT
That is a beautiful story. It might be something you wish to share in an article.
Curt L. Aug 1, 2009, 12:10am EDT
Sending a 10 your worthy way!
William Dotani Aug 1, 2009, 12:36pm EDT
That's nice, but I could give a fig about the ratings.
Curt L. Aug 1, 2009, 1:02pm EDT
Cool! I like figs!
Lisa Frost Aug 2, 2009, 9:09pm EDT
Very beautiful Music!
Connie L. Aug 4, 2009, 2:58am EDT
thank you for sharing your writing skills
Svetlana Goryacheva Aug 4, 2009, 1:31pm EDT
Bill, dear, this is a pure wonder! :-) I admired the beauty and harmony of it. How about posting this poem to my group "Music Everywhere"?

http://musicalbox.gather.com/

Blessings and best wishes - S.
William Dotani Aug 8, 2009, 3:23am EDT
I'm not in your group. I'll join, so please send an invite.

I'm glad you enjoyed my verse.
Wilma M. Aug 4, 2009, 6:27pm EDT
I love the title, too. It's so evocative. (Isn't that a good word?)
William Dotani Aug 6, 2009, 3:02pm EDT
Yes, and I imagine you use this word often. Say, you are pounding a nail into a board for reasons only you would know and you accidentally hit your thumb with the hamer. Because you're so polite, when not on a plastic craft in lake or stream, instead of saying a 4 letter word you'd never say in church, you say, 'I have an evocative word I'm thinking about.' Don't be surprised if people want to play 2o Questions when you say this and there are unconfirmed reports from the Oregon Octupi Association that this is often.
Wilma M. Aug 6, 2009, 11:59pm EDT
Well, I rarely ever handle hammers as they are a violent breed of tools, prone to reach out and injure the innocent person who picks them up.

I sometimes think of evocative words when I'm driving behind intelligence challenged drivers.
Wilma M. Aug 7, 2009, 12:00am EDT
Is Sheila the president of the Oregon Octupi Association?
William Dotani Aug 7, 2009, 12:28am EDT
I'm glad you have discovered this. She wants to make radical changes to regular fish and chips. Eight to be ate I believe is on her business card.
Wilma M. Aug 7, 2009, 2:08pm EDT
What do you get eight of? Eight fish or eight chips? I hope it's not eight octupi!

Speaking of starfish, I saw hundreds of them at low tide this morning. Does Sheila sell them too?
William Dotani Aug 8, 2009, 1:02pm EDT
Does Sheila sell starfish by the seashore? Must investigate.
Wilma M. Aug 8, 2009, 4:39pm EDT
I haven't seen any booths down here but she could be around somewhere. I've noticed on some of the literature that now they are calling starfish "sea stars." I have no idea when THAT changed. Is that a politically correct term? Maybe the fish boycotted the other name. I think I will just stick with "starfish."
William Dotani Aug 8, 2009, 5:57pm EDT
Sea stars sounds British to me!!!!!
Sheila Deeth Aug 6, 2009, 11:07pm EDT
Oregon Octupi Association?

It is a lovely title. Violins and stepping stones. Mine danced to a different step in a different land, but the violins still play.
William Dotani Aug 7, 2009, 12:31am EDT
You were overheard to have said, 'Eight to be ate.' There's proof in those words, if you want there to be.
Shelbia C. Aug 9, 2009, 1:38am EDT
I thought this was beautiful and romantic. I also felt as though I had fallen into one of the old movies I love so much. It was the overall vibe I got.
William Dotani Aug 9, 2009, 2:01am EDT
I find your old movies reference delightful. Thank you.
Nancy O. Aug 13, 2009, 1:34am EDT
thank you so very much for posting with Get The Scoop

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