by William Dotani
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October 27, 2006

Quietly Flowing

July 17, 2009 04:10 PM EDT (Updated: July 17, 2009 04:18 PM EDT)
views: 167 | rating: 10/10 (22 votes) | comments: 59

No sound needed, feel the warmth of heart's love
Trans calculated gentle lipstick smile
Tasting like a mustard seed from Heaven
Strong as a bough, but then and hereafter
Each day, every moment and my last breath
A prayer of happiness, of warmth touching

The still blowing, mists lounging in night sky
Wonderment, and in it all love is all
Dawning hustle bustle, cups of coffee
Daily parcels sent from a heart loving
Signals and change essentials, must okay
Yes, the inviting horizon beckons

Sound of silence, transposes yesterday
Rhapsody in blue moments unfolding
Resting tranquility, satisfaction
You are my sunshine, cherish devotion

Read quietly and I'm sneaking glances
Eyed tenderly, commencement smiling
Wading amiable, teasing laughter
Super gluing moments on scrap board dreams 
Savor common moments, tend heart happy
You have painted rainbows, in my life

 

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Comments: 59

D. K. Jul 17, 2009, 4:12pm EDT
"you have painted rainbows, in my life." i love that line. that's someone to fall in love with, someone who does that
William Dotani Aug 8, 2009, 2:11am EDT
I don't believe that's the line I used on my wife. I do appreciate your comment.
Peter Joseph Swanson Jul 17, 2009, 4:44pm EDT
That was wonderful !!!
Melissa Underhill Jul 17, 2009, 5:03pm EDT
"Trans calculated gentle lipstick smile" I really like that line! This poem was beautiful. Thanks for sharing it. :D
William Dotani Aug 8, 2009, 2:14am EDT
For some reason I did not see your comment before, which of course makes me think you typed in invisible font.

I very much appreciate your comment.
William Dotani Jul 17, 2009, 5:11pm EDT
Kitty, Peter and sweet Melissa, thank you.
Trish A. Jul 17, 2009, 5:13pm EDT
Another fine poem that is filled with strong visual images and ends with a fabulous line. Once again I thank you for sharing your wordsmiting.
William Dotani Jul 17, 2009, 5:14pm EDT
I love to share with you. Thank you.
William Dotani Jul 17, 2009, 5:13pm EDT
Upon rereading, I see I need another edit to smooth things out.
Bridget ♥ Jul 17, 2009, 5:13pm EDT
You have a way with words!
William Dotani Jul 17, 2009, 5:15pm EDT
That's because I use 26 letters.
Lee P. Jul 18, 2009, 1:11pm EDT
Yikes, what happen to the other one?
M C. Jul 17, 2009, 5:31pm EDT
Sweet poetry. Thank you.
Tanya P. Jul 17, 2009, 5:48pm EDT
So many great love lines in this one.
Deloris Wright Jul 17, 2009, 6:50pm EDT
Great poem William. I hope this one is for your wife. L O L
A beautiful poem William. I love the last line also. You are definitely the wordsmith of Gather. Great writing
You old romantic, you! How lovely!
JOHN BECK Jul 17, 2009, 8:12pm EDT
"Familiarity breeds contempt" but true love accepts and thrives on familiarity. This is a poem not just of romance--it recounts enduring true love. Great one, Bill.
William Dotani Aug 8, 2009, 10:36pm EDT
Spot on, John.
Donna C. Jul 17, 2009, 9:25pm EDT
I love this poem, William.
I too think it is from true love that
you wrote and I believe it is for your wife, too.
Thank you for sharing such lovely feelings.
Cheryl W. Jul 17, 2009, 10:12pm EDT
Ah...William. What a beautiful love poem.
Kay M. Jul 17, 2009, 10:38pm EDT
William this one has put a lump in my throat. This is incredibly tender and loving.
Barbara H. Jul 17, 2009, 10:39pm EDT
Comfortable love between souls still excited by life together. Such a love should be tasted by everybody. Through your lovely poem you've given a glimpse and created the feeling. Thank you!
penni d. Jul 18, 2009, 12:18am EDT
This is So romantic and loving, William.....Will Wife serve you breakfast in bed,lol?
lynn a. Jul 18, 2009, 2:28am EDT
What a love poem! The tenderness and love exudes. If this doesn't get you breakfast in bed, I just don't know what could.
Shirley ♡ ☮ M. Jul 18, 2009, 2:29am EDT
Romantic poem...I like it.
Lawrence U. Jul 18, 2009, 6:32am EDT
What a wonderful piece, William! You capture the moment with your words of wisdom. I love this great line of yours: "You have painted rainbows in my life".

Well done!!
Marge H. Jul 18, 2009, 1:13pm EDT
How heart warming and beautiful! I hope your lovely wife enjoyed it as much as I did.
William Dotani Jul 19, 2009, 12:41pm EDT
My wife does not care much for poetry because she finds English metaphor confusing.
lynn a. Jul 23, 2009, 1:28pm EDT
Write it in Japanese. I bet she would like that, and it would make it special for her.
William Dotani Aug 8, 2009, 2:20am EDT
Lynn, You know not the difficulty in many different ways this would take. The Japanese are extremely formal about such things, including choice of over 20,000 characters for penning a thought.
Lee P. Jul 18, 2009, 1:14pm EDT
This one made me think of my babies when they were babies, no greater love.... Then one day they turned into people, the love didn't go away it just adjusted to life. LOL

Beautiful as always.
Curt L. Jul 18, 2009, 2:57pm EDT
Thank you for this lovely poem, William!
It touches me deeply and was just what I
needed to read today!
Debra C. Jul 18, 2009, 9:59pm EDT
Me too, William. It has given me a lot to think about ... I'm writing a eulogy today.
William Dotani Jul 19, 2009, 3:07am EDT
Adding a personal or known story about this person that puts them in a good light is a nice touch in a eulogy.
Angela A. Jul 18, 2009, 3:01pm EDT
You remember this song?,
"You are my sunshine"
You are my sunshine,
my only sunshine.
You make me happy when skies are gray...

Te he!

Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
William Dotani Jul 19, 2009, 2:32am EDT
A great Stephen Foster song. I need to play his songs on guitar. I'm quite fond of his songs: A great song writer.
Elsie Duggan Jul 19, 2009, 3:20am EDT
Simply beautiful William, whenever you write of your love for your wife,your words shine all over the place and no wonder there are rainbows, been away for a few days to my grandson's wedding but back tonight to say goodnight William, I love you, Elsie
William Dotani Jul 19, 2009, 3:38am EDT
Goodnight and don't let the dandelions bite.
Ed Da Head Toker Jul 19, 2009, 8:18am EDT
I have read this 3 times, and now I am wondering, how many wives do you have???
This has been your best since we became friends.
William Dotani Aug 8, 2009, 2:22am EDT
One wife. I've been married 27 years. We get along quite well. I appreciate your opinion.
Ed Da Head Toker Aug 8, 2009, 3:42am EDT
with stuff like this, she must be very happy with you.
Spectacular tale of love, all-enduring. Perfectly crafted as only you can do.

Marilyn
William Dotani Aug 8, 2009, 2:23am EDT
I think Lawrence is better at the love poem than me.
t b. Jul 19, 2009, 6:38pm EDT
I wish a man loved me in this way.
Excellent write William!
Marie J. R. Jul 20, 2009, 2:48pm EDT
this is the coolest one yet,,, I like it,,,it's so telling,,, God Bless you ,,,
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lynn a. Jul 23, 2009, 1:29pm EDT
This poem puts a warmth in my heart. I think reading it today was even sweeter than when I read it the first time.
William Dotani Aug 8, 2009, 2:27am EDT
Wow! That's a cool comment.
Shelbia C. Jul 23, 2009, 6:16pm EDT
This was very beautiful
William Dotani Jul 25, 2009, 2:28am EDT
I appreciate that.
Sheila Deeth Jul 28, 2009, 11:43pm EDT
What a beautiful romantic poem, with smiles of love and shared memories across a kitchen table. I love it.
William Dotani Aug 8, 2009, 2:29am EDT
Almost like a Currier and Ives poster. Thank you Sheila.
Wilma M. Aug 7, 2009, 6:11pm EDT
Oh, that last line is magical. I absolutely love it.

You should put out a line of greeting cards.
William Dotani Aug 8, 2009, 2:32am EDT
I appreciate half of your comment. The thought of going into any kind of bizness is not what I want. I like talking to people and do not like selling things.
Wilma M. Aug 11, 2009, 9:06am EDT
Oh, I didn't really think you would do that (selling cards.) The last line was so romantic, it brought to mind some of the nicer cards that I see in the store.
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Aug 8, 2009, 10:54am EDT
What a beautifully quirky love poem. I can feel the narrator's glow.
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Aug 8, 2009, 10:56am EDT
This is also a nice ode to women in general. I'd like to think that we flow quietly around your turbulence.
William Dotani Aug 8, 2009, 10:38pm EDT
Tis true.
Nancy O. Aug 13, 2009, 1:46am EDT
thank you for posting with Get The Scoop

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