I don't consider myself much of a writer. But last night, for some reason, this little story popped into my head and I had to write it down because I knew I would forget it today.
It was 3 a.m. when she was awaken by the sound of her boyfriend stumbling in the door. He was drunk again. She quietly got on her clothes and shoes, because she knew a trip to the hospital would be inevitable. Tonight would be different.
The freezer door slammed. "No freaking ice!" She heard from the kitchen. Dare she go out there, she thought. But she remembered what happened last time. She slowly crept out of her bed, trying not to make the springs pop in the boxspring. They met in the doorway.
Thats all I got *LoL* this just came to me in the middle of the night. What do you think? Please be honest! *Freaking is supposed to be the other word, but I wanted to keep it clean*
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I was on the edge of my seat, Erinn. And you said you can't write...! ;)
Me too.
You are too kind Marilyn =) Thank you.
Erinn, that's about how the story of domestic violence goes. I like it just the way it is.
You are very true....
Very true!
Why did you leave me hanging...I was all into it...very good....
Thank you . . as soon as I think of something I'll make sure to post it =)
Very good...Now you have to tell us what will happen...
As soon as I think of something I will post it, thank you =)
great job..
Thank you =)
I have the same problem-I never know how to end anything! This is a great start, though!
Thank you!
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maybe the rest will come to you tonight!!!! you can be one of those writers that can only be creative at night cuz you have business to take care of during the day.
i never discourage anyone from writing. writing is a great outlet for many reasons. :)
Usually only bad things happen at night, like my anxiety attacks. Maybe my anxiety attack brought it on . . hmm. I usually think of poems late at night too, and I have to get a piece of paper and a pen really quick or else I'll forget it by morning.
Very suspenseful . I like it.
thanks for posting I want to see more!
You need to finish this story. Now get busy or I'll start singing that darn Elmo song. LOL
good start. Just keep it going
yes, what happened next?
Good start. You have the grabber, now you have to provide the vehicle and the denouement.
Sounds like a good beginning.
You have a very good start.