Something must have happened, it can't be a question of disobedience, I know them too well… Then why in the prophet's sacred name didn't they show up? Karim didn't expect them to be punctual, but having missed the second meeting means one thing – some unexpected incident took place... or Abu-naeef himself prevented their participation in the combined exercise He has prepared and planed for the day, Karim concluded with much frustration. ‘Well I’m going to solve that riddle right away! Having hailed a cab as soon as he emerged from the underground, he reached the Savoy or Abu-naeef's lair, as they named the hotel among themselves – called suite five eleven to announce his arrival and went straight to the elevator. He never got cold feet whenever he had to meet his chief, like most of the others – whether he was told to or whether he initiated the meeting himself as in this very case.
Hamid opened up and let him in, another bodyguard knocked slightly on one of the bedroom’s doors – and his chief appeared in a black tailored suit and a silver tie.
Karim greeted his chief and praised his good taste and elegant appearance, they shook hands and the four of them sat round a low table facing each other. Karim sat opposite his chief, while Abu-jaber and Hamid sat on either side in unbuttoned jackets, exposing their gun holsters. A few more greetings were exchanged before Karim was asked politely to have some coffee. Abu-jaber did the phone call and waited at the door, for the delivery. After a rather short spell of time, the door opened up again; and along with the room-service waiter pushing his loaded cart two more members arrived. Kassem with a his gray fallen face, and Haled with a triumphant smile spread all over his ugly face.
Room was made for the newcomers, the table laid, and the room-service waiter left them in peace; coffee was poured in tiny cups and they all sipped it peacefully – except the two bodyguards, who kept the party with deadly vigilance. Karim was the only one who kept turning his head to and fro from one face to another, unable to overcome his restlessness – and quite furious with himself just because of it.
‘How is your trainee doing?’ Asked Abu-naeef watching Karim with an inquiring look. Before he could answer his chief, Haled burst out in a loud contemptuous laugh – none of the rest to Karim's astonishment, not even Abu-naeef, who should have been offended scolded Haled.
‘I can't tell yet, not at this early stage.’ Karim stated with some hesitation. ‘I'll need one more week at least to sum up his capabilities, in any case I'll need more time and a crew of two men – to give me a hand, if we want positive results.’ He added as if he'd no idea yet what Samir was like. But he knew already that something was wrong, for Haled's presence and behavior were the best indicators of it. But he didn't mention Haled and Abu-diab's absence this very afternoon… As he had briefed and prepared them for the combined exercise, without his chief’s knowledge or permission…
Haled no doubt must have updated Abu-naeef already behind my back! Karim thought overcoming a fit of rage with much effort.
‘More time and a crew of two men! We aren't running a school down here, or a regular training base!’ Retorted Abu-naeef. Do you mean the man was send to us without any basic training?’ He went on asking, as if the known fact surprised him.
‘That's right!’ He answered feeling as if he were playing a role in an absurd comedy.
‘We have neither the time nor the man power. Would you suggest to send him somewhere else, say Moscow?’ Ventured Abu-naeef, as if he was pushing him towards a well-hidden trap.
‘Well... ouhm...’ Karim managed to mutter.
But Abu-naeef didn't wait for Karim to declare his solution to their problem. ‘And if we do send him to Moscow, for a period of two years time, isn't it? Who would send us a replacement, when we're in such a need for man power? Who would guarantee his return to me when he graduates?’
Nothing serious has been put forth yet. Thought Karim hopefully. Could it be another false alarm, a fuss over nothing?
‘But before reaching any decision on the matter...’ Smiled suddenly Abu-naeef. ‘What do we know about that man? Is he reliable at all? Can we trust him?’ He went on asking, watching Karim through a pair of narrow eyes.
‘You can count on the Russians to find out how reliable he is!’ Answered him Karim shaking off himself every bit of responsibility, tearing open a very wide gap between Samir and himself.
‘And if he's a mole who has penetrated our ranks, would the Russians find such a possibility out – or would he graduate with honours, and climb to the top – faster than any of us, lead us all in the end!’
‘We may ask the Russians to pass our candidate, through a third degree interrogation, as part of his training!’ That's the right answer to shut your trap, you bloody nuisance! He thought satisfied and quite sure he was not at the storm's eye anymore.
‘You scored a point there dear Karim!’ Declared his chief boisterously. ‘We're going to pass that trainee of yours a third degree interrogation ourselves. What do you think of that dear Karim?’
Haled burst out laughing again and the tense atmosphere has suddenly relaxed. The color returned to Kassem's face, and the bodyguards were exchanging smiles – a scapegoat was found and they won't be bored, in a rather short while. They’ll have some serious work to do at last.
Karim's blood pressure soared as he glanced briefly at Haled's ugly features, which reminded him a mocking African mask of some obscure origin.
‘What happened?’ He asked turning to Abu-naeef, in almost a whisper.
‘Haled saw him meet an Israeli agent in broad daylight, a short while before he met you!’
© Haim Kadman 1989 – all rights reserved


Comments: 34
Haim - your talent continues to impress- well written my friend!
Thanks very much Kimber, I'm very glad you liked it.
Great descriptions in here, particularly of them sitting down, their slightest behaviors. It's really incredible writing. The one part that was jarring to me, however, was the use of "men power" vs. "man power." Maybe it's just an American-ism?
Thanks for the correction Christine I'll edit it, and glad you liked it.
Thanks for posting your writing excerpt to the Gather group, Bookin'.
You're welcome Christine.
Fine writing Haim; a segment of high level (surreal?) espionage. The threatening tone leaves me feeling as though the big boys are playing chess again with 'smaller' lives. Wonder how this plays out
The Surreal Circus
It plays out always well for the big boys of course. Thanks so much Adrian for you fine observation and generous comment.
John Le Carre or Graham Green could not have done it any better. A calm understanding of goals, of sides, of humanity reflects here.
this land, this river
Thank you so much Poddar though I don't deem myself as good as they are, but I'd a goal to achieve in that thriller, and your kind words reassure me that I've achieved it.
Of course you have. The neutral passion is the key. I shall remember Karim.
Thanks dear Poddar for your encouraging words.
Very good Haim. You wrote that part 20 years ago. Is that the end or is there more?
Thanks very much Lou, it isn't the end there is much more.
Well-written and frightening in the way that you see into this world so clearly. I would not want to look there! You write their tale in such a fashion that it seems so close and so real. It's chilling.
I can assure you Sandi that life in Iraq, Pakistan and Afganistan is much worse. Such episodes exist in reality, it's better to know and be aware to it. Thank you very much Sandi.
This was great, and can see that you have been writing for many years. Wished I would have had time to write in the 80's.
Thanks so much Terry but you young to me, you've many more years before you, to write and you do write well.
Reading this made my stomach clench and twist. The suspense was rough. It is one thing to read it and quite another to experience situations of this type. I know it happens, but I'd never have the guts for work like this. You tell a good story, Haim. I am so glad to have found your site.
Thanks so much Lynn for your openness. It isn't easy but must be told although it's fictitious, but it's mild compared to such real episodes.
Fascinating and polished. I must read more.
You'll find more, there are plenty excerpt of this thriller among my posts - thanks very much Sheila.
I love this!
Your Friend,
René Allen
Happy Holidays dear Rene'.