Wednesday's Writing Essentials prompt -
Using any form you like, write and publish a post including:
* a foreign word or phrase
* a time period in the distant past or future
* five stones
* the word "wink"
The Healer
The Healer came from beyond time, wearing her babushka and clutching her stones.The stones were what had gotten her here, after all, and were supposed to work quite as well getting her back, back to where home was a different sphere, where the horse or if you were lucky, even a donkey, carried your wares, and though it was home, she had a job to do here.
Feeling sweet sorrow, though she'd foreseen this in the record keeper crystal she now clutched in her hand, she hoped to at least save a few from what was destined to happen. An amethyst for strength, a piece of red jasper to keep her safe during her travels, a chunk of pink quartz to help calm her, she felt almost ready for anything. The calcite crystal sphere that she carried in her large pocket, would hopefully help her focus on what had to be done, which was to find a way to save these futuristic folks from themselves, which would also forever alter her past, as she knew it.
Meandering down a side street, though dark, didn't seem unusual, as it was usually dark where she came from. The attack was unexpected and the theft, distressing, terribly so. Seemingly intent on getting her belongings, the small group beat her, took her crystals and looking disgusted, as she floated in and out of reality, tossed them away, dismissing her and her only way to get home; her only way to offer help to a disintegrating world, away. What to do now?
That's when her Guide appeared, and gathering up her stones from wherever, gave her a wink, saying, "There's nothing you can do here. Give it up, it's time to go home."
mn - 2009


Comments: 15
Well done! It leaves me wanting more.
Aww, thanks, Kevin. Awfully nice of you.
very good Marilyn
Thanks, donna - much appreciated.
very good I love it
awesome post dear
Thanks, fancy and Carol, I'll be over to visit you all when I get the chance ;)
great post, Maryilyn, thanks for sharing this
I don't read much fantasy/sci-fi, but I can tell this is the sort that is pleasant and delicious to read. So many visual images brought to the page.
There's a number of spots, Marilyn, that need tweaks, but nothing major. It might help to stretch out the scenes.
Thanks, Connie and Susan,
I'll try tweaking and stretching :) Would that mean making it a lot longer? Ha, revision time!
Awwwww, I wouldn't tweak anything. I loved it. I wish it were a nice long novel.
Marilyn, This is poetic and layered. The darkness and light... plays dramatically with words.
I could feel a lurking mystery and the young woman for some reason reminded me of a Victorian Age waif.
This hints at a very interesting story. I was intrigued by the idea of going into the future (and somehow changing the past). The idea that the stones were her way home was also interesting. What happened to her was sad and I rejoiced when her guide saved her.
I think this would make an excellent longer piece with more explanation.
There are some issues with word order -- maybe try reading it out loud? But it's a very interesting piece and I think worth working on.
Just begining to read for a second time.