They say you should always take snacks on trips through time. But don’t share with the locals or you’ll contaminate the journey back. I took an apple.
Of course, the fruit on Eden’s trees was absolute temptation. The scents were out of this world; hints of strawberry, apricot wine, summer distilled into winter’s brilliant pearls.
She walked, hips swaying, with perfect lips poised for the perfect kiss, and he was perfect male. But the fruit fell from my hands as I stared. Two apples on the ground. One snake coiled round. If they choose wrong I’ll be trapped here forever.
© Sheila Deeth, June 2009
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Comments: 27
This is a Great one,You always keep us wanting more!
That was really cool !!!
Excellent! :-)
Blessings and best wishes - S.
Very creative and clever, Sheila.
What a great story. Which one to choose. Better to do without.
Very, very cool - and a huge amount of content for 100 words. Nice work!
But you were not trapped. Thank goodness. Marge and Sarah said it well.
AIEEE!!! Awesome and scarey as to what MIGHT have happened, sheila...bravo!!
Great tale. Very well done Sheila!
hahahahaha...I like! I'm always humbled by how much you say in so few words.
Switch to bananas! LOL
Very clever and interesting story. I love the twist at the end. :)
Excellent.
wonderful tale Sheila, you are a master at these.
And we know how long forever can be. Nice story.
This was wonderful. I envy your skill for for brevity and economy of words. You are a very talented writer.
You have me laughing. As if one apple wasn't enough to worry about, you add another.
A very interesting take on the time travel challenge. So tell me, did you pick the right apple?
Well done as always Sheila. I love this line "summer distilled into winter’s brilliant pearls"
Wow -- that was WAY COOL.
And to think the snake got the blame all this time... ;-)
....and if Eve had not taken that apple...then persuaded Adam to eat...where would we all be ?? Great article Sheila..*smiles*
Hugs, Barbie
I wish to thank you for commenting on my series, Outside the Reservation !!
Hugs, Barbie
I loved it! Great writing, Sheila!
Alovely way to tell a lovely tale
Wonderful! Well done, Sheila!
Had to come back and catch up on the comments on this inventive approach. Great writing.