Tatting: Queen Anne's Lace ~ Triolet

Autumn: Thanks for your encouragement.  I know you love this form, and I enjoyed penning it; however, I felt after completing it that lines 1, 4 & 7 would have been given a tad more "oomph" to the content of the poem had I rearranged their wording. I would like to do a revised version using this idea and place it beneath the original one.

Beauty incarnated in words, sweet Barb! :-)

Love ya dearly - S.

Sveta: Your words are so kind. Thank you so much.

*lyublyu tebya

Barbra:

"Queen Anne tats white, tiny clusters/Of lace without synthetic yarn..."

These lines segue into the idea of [subtly] inferring the anthropomorphizing of the Queen Anne plant to the historical Queen Anne with regard to tatting. I see from the penning of your imagery the "lace" appearance atop the flower, and it brings to mind the marvel of this unique type of beauty that only nature can create. I do like your idea of rearranging lines 1, 4, & 7 because I think it would indeed give it more "oomph" as you say. I've seen these lines rearranged before in triolets, and I think it's a good alternative; especially when a writer is not completely satisfied with the finished work. I'll be anxious to read your revised version, my dear.

Autumn: You are so sweet with your encouragement, for as you know, this form of poetry has been a style that I have not consistently practiced. Even though I enjoy attempting it, I "never" feel comfortable with it. I do not feel I have succeeded here. There is something lacking. I could not seem to express myself in a way whereby I felt I had done the triolet justice. I am going to make myself write more of these, because I do not like the failure of this having such power over me. Thanks again for your sweet encouragement.

The multilevel subject lends itself well to your skillful treatment as a triolet, Barbara.  Very nice!

Oh, John! How you have made my evening! I truly appreciate your commenting, for I have in no way felt successful with this style. Your words mean a lot. Thank you!

Lovely and whimsical! I enjoyed it very much.

Barbra, this is delightful.  I had concern initially because your first two lines were very much enjambed, imo, but you made it work!  Your rhyming words gave me a smile and a nodding chuckle.  

Very clever and deceiving in the best way.  I just didn't expect to find such a smart poem out of something about knitting.  ;-D

I should be in bed!  But I read this once more and love it even more.  It's a fun poem, B.

This is great, well done

C.F., So enjoyed your expounding! As you have found, tatting is the "art" of making handmade lace. I purposely left the door ajar to humanize (anthropomorphize) the Queen Anne's lace plant to hint at the recall of the historical "Queen Anne" by beginning the first line with "Queen Anne tats white, tiny clusters"-- instead of "Queen Anne's lace tats with white, tiny clusters"; however, I shifted into the plant being nature's tatter; hence the second line: "of lace without synthetic yarn. Because of the restrictions of this type of poetry, it sets the stage for different types of assessments that make it more interesting. Thank you for your encouragement. I will have to keep working on this style, and I hope you will give it a try. The repetition of lines can pose a real challenge, but I'm sure you can meet that.

Austin: Really appreciate your comments. Thanks so much for stopping by!

Susan: Thank you for coming back for a second read. I'm honored! I appreciate your encouraging words, for this style really poses a challenge for me. I think you pinpointed the reason for my discouragement. It had to do with the "possible" enjambment with the first two lines. As I silently read it, I could "see" where enjambment could indeed be the culprit; however, when I read it aloud, it had a different ring, and I could "hear" the acceptance and why you felt it worked. Thank you for that insightful critique.

Alison: "Always" a pleasure to see you. Thank you so much for your visit!

Nature knits with ease and bliss

We poets struggle through

I believe you do succeed with this

Flower's nature clear and true

Oh, Jan!  How you have made my day!  So very, very kind of you to stop by and offer your encouragement.  It means so much, for I know what a fine poet you are.

I too, read this more than once and liked it more each time. I will try one of these (repeating under my breath, I think I can, I do, I will try it).

Marilyn

Marilyn:  Thank you for the connection invite!  And thank you for your visit here and for  having read it more than once.  It tickles me that both you and Susan liked it better after having read it more than one time.  That was very kind of both of you to do and so courteous to let me know.  Try one.  I'm sure you'll be able to do it!

You make writing seem so easy Barbra.

"Always", always a pleasure to see you, Carol.  Thank you for your kind words, and thank you so very much for the personal invitation to view the "baby bluebirds".  I was thrilled to see life at its most innocent stage nestled within the confines of the sturdiness of the nest, and knowing the joy they've brought you warms my heart.

Marianne, you are such a doll!  Your encouragement "always" inspires me, my dear.  Thank you for having taken the time to have looked the English words up since your native tongue is German.  I am impressived that you would be so thoughtful as to want to be sure you understood the wording correctly. Thank you!  Triolets are one of my greatest challenges.  I find them excruciatingly difficult to write; however, I want to meet that challenge and overcome the fear of tackling them.  All the support here has certainly paved the way for me to begin conquering that.  Thank you, my dear, for your wonderful visit.  Love, Barbra 

This is so nice! Nature gives us (poets) so much to work with :)

Hi Susan!  You're so right!  It does indeed!  I've been loving your triolets.  You seem to get the first line well underway so that when it's repeated it brings real character to your content.  I'm especially watching yours so that I can get a better grasp on the technique.  Thanks, friend!