by Susan B.
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February 13, 2007

Drabble of the Day ~ She Saw Stars

June 11, 2009 09:41 AM EDT
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She Saw Stars

 

Betsy sewed the flag by firelight, a rush order for the revolution "Just some quick red and white stripes please" Benjamin had implored. Suddenly there was a flash and a shirtless, sculpted man in rough blue trousers appeared.

 

Before Betsy could react, the young man knelt at her feet "You are the most beautiful woman I've ever met!" he gasped and taking her face in his hands kissed her like she'd never been kissed. He disappeared in another flash. The sparkles in her eyes inspired Betsy to add a dark blue field with circling stars to the new nation's flag.

 

© 2009 Susan K Barton

 

A Drabble is flash fiction that is exactly 100 words long. This story is in response to  Genre Shorties Prompt Week 2 by Kay M. If you liked this story, you might like to read some of my other stories which you can find by clicking on this link.

 

 

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Comments: 22

JOHN BECK Jun 11, 2009, 7:42pm EDT

Delightful twist, Susan!
Sheila Deeth Jun 12, 2009, 1:09am EDT

Oh, very nice Susan!
Elsie Duggan Jun 12, 2009, 2:11am EDT

Just love it Susan, great take on the prompt
penni d. Jun 12, 2009, 6:58am EDT

 I would like to see a ''shirtless, sculpted" man flash in front of me,lol...:)
Ian B (in Toronto) Jun 12, 2009, 1:10pm EDT

You ain't the only one...!
Tracy Fabre Jun 12, 2009, 9:16am EDT

I'll never look at the flag the same way again!
Kay M. Jun 12, 2009, 11:40am EDT

Love it!  Very clever take !
Kay M. Jun 12, 2009, 11:41am EDT

Love that title too :-)
Ian B (in Toronto) Jun 12, 2009, 1:10pm EDT

So THAT's how it happened...!
Susan B. Jun 12, 2009, 1:17pm EDT

Thanks folks! It is soooo hard to do a whole story WITH a genre WITH  constraints :)
lynn a. Nov 10, 2009, 11:11am EST
And so this is how it happened.! Well, this was quite enjoyable. No doubt I'll look at the stars differently from now on.
Susan B. Nov 10, 2009, 1:43pm EST
I certainly hope so. sew? Anyway. I think the story needed to have a time travel aspect to it.
Marilyn M. Nov 11, 2009, 4:27am EST
Everyone needs a little magic in their lives! Great story!
Susan B. Nov 11, 2009, 11:54am EST
Amen! Especially when it involves a gorgeous mam dropping into your life
Sandre M. Nov 11, 2009, 8:21pm EST
Good one!
Susan B. Nov 11, 2009, 8:54pm EST
Why thank you!
Angela A. Nov 12, 2009, 2:33pm EST
Oh wow, this is sooo cool!!
Susan B. Nov 12, 2009, 6:18pm EST
Yay! I'm so glad you enjoyed it :)
amy s. Nov 18, 2009, 3:58pm EST
I think is really cool. I am so glad that you used a famous women in your writing
Susan B. Nov 18, 2009, 5:02pm EST
Thanks Amy :)
amy s. Nov 18, 2009, 3:58pm EST
Just popping in to say "hello" and "have a great day"
Susan B. Nov 18, 2009, 5:02pm EST
You too! Happy Hump Day!

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