by Beth G.
Member since:
May 24, 2007

Longing

May 14, 2009 11:09 PM EDT
views: 135 | comments: 67

How I long for another day

To see your face under the sun's rays

But alas that was not meant to be

Your memory is now all I can see

 

How I long to hear that voice

Hearing it would cause me to rejoice

Your honest feedback never led me astray

Your words are all I could read today

 

How I long for a happier ending

Than much pain and suffering until the ending

No one could replace your good guidance

Engaging debates and laughter now in silence.

 

 

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Comments: 67

Teresa T. May 14, 2009, 11:12pm EDT
Very nice.
Ariel K. May 14, 2009, 11:13pm EDT
Beautiful. Thank you for sharing!
Beth G. May 14, 2009, 11:15pm EDT
Thank you for your kind feedback Teresa and Leona, I appreciate it!
chelsie t. May 14, 2009, 11:17pm EDT
very good. thanks for sharing.
Beth G. May 14, 2009, 11:19pm EDT
Thanks Chelsie, I appreciate your feedback on this!
Jo N. May 14, 2009, 11:21pm EDT
Very nice, thank you for sharing it.
Beth G. May 14, 2009, 11:22pm EDT
Thank you Jo for your feedback, I appreciate it!
Jennifer Lee May 14, 2009, 11:24pm EDT
I get the feeling this is written about your dad and it's a very moving poem. Thank you for posting to our group.
Beth G. May 14, 2009, 11:26pm EDT
lol yeah Jen. It is. I miss him a lot. Guess I felt the need to express this. Thank you for your feedback I appreciate it!
Carol P. May 31, 2009, 1:59pm EDT

Very nice tribute to your Dad. Excellent job Beth, very heartfelt. Hugs to you.
Jennifer Lee May 14, 2009, 11:31pm EDT
Keep writing, girlfriend. It's cathartic and I love to read your poetry! :)) Hugs.
Kerrell g. May 14, 2009, 11:39pm EDT
Great post, Beth!!!!
Beth G. May 14, 2009, 11:41pm EDT
Yes it is! I love to write poetry, and hopefully I will get better at it over time. Thank you for your feedback Jen and Kerrell, I appreciate it and your friendship!
phil w. May 15, 2009, 12:14am EDT
This is good ,Beth.
timi A. May 15, 2009, 1:17am EDT
wow! this is another mouth watering one from you. thanks.
Rhonda M. May 15, 2009, 7:22am EDT
Wonderful...
Beth G. May 15, 2009, 12:53pm EDT
Thank you Phil, Timi and Rhonda for your lovely comments, I do appreciate it!
Gary (aka: William Pinn) J. May 15, 2009, 11:54pm EDT
Thanks, but I'm still around. LOL! Beauteeeful poem!
Praj S. May 16, 2009, 12:10am EDT
very nice poem. You write well..
Beth G. May 16, 2009, 1:18pm EDT
Thank you for your feedback Gary and Praj, I appreciate it!
Melanie B. May 19, 2009, 8:12pm EDT
That was beautiful Beth`
Sheila Deeth May 19, 2009, 8:29pm EDT
Beautiful poem. Makes me think of those I miss.
Beth G. May 19, 2009, 10:50pm EDT
Thank you Sheila and Melanie, I appreciate your kind feedback!
Beth G. May 20, 2009, 4:49pm EDT
Thank you Cindy, I appreciate your feedback on this!
L. H. May 20, 2009, 10:00pm EDT
Nice and thanks for dropping by a photo of mine ::)
Beth G. May 21, 2009, 11:41am EDT

Thank you LH for your nice comment, and you are welcome!
Charity M. May 21, 2009, 9:53pm EDT

((( Lovely...keep being inspired! )))
Beth G. May 21, 2009, 11:42pm EDT

Thank you Charity, I appreciate your saying so!
Fran S. May 23, 2009, 5:46pm EDT

lovely, you definately have a way with words
Lawrence U. May 23, 2009, 11:10pm EDT

This is a wonderful poem from the heart.    Thank you, Beth.
Beth G. May 23, 2009, 11:39pm EDT

Thank you Fran and Lawrence for your lovely feedback, I appreciate it!
William Dotani May 24, 2009, 12:49am EDT

You are quite engaging in your conversational directness to the reader. You describe each wonderfulmoment as no more. Your final line etches deep the sadness.
Beth G. May 24, 2009, 1:24pm EDT

Thank you William! I wrote this about my late father, that passed away two years ago. There is just a gap there that no one can ever fill again, at least not in the same way.
William Dotani Jun 6, 2009, 1:55pm EDT

My dad passed away in 1991. I loved and admired him. Although time has passed, I still miss him. I hope you & family are well.
Beth G. Jun 8, 2009, 3:00pm EDT

I am so sorry for your loss William. I guess life must go on in spite of the missed family member huh? My family and I are ok, though Dad's presence is sorely missed. I hope you and your family are doing well too!
Donald M. May 28, 2009, 12:52pm EDT

Beth this was a great article, so loving and yet the feeling of sadness being there too. I am thankful you shared with us that it was for your Father. Mine was my best friend.
Beth G. May 28, 2009, 7:47pm EDT

It is amazing what a great friend a good father can be.  Thank you for commenting Donald, I appreciate it!
penni d. May 28, 2009, 7:49pm EDT

 awwww...this is such a nice tribute to your dad. I'm sure you miss him much....
Beth G. May 28, 2009, 7:52pm EDT

Thank you Penni for saying so. I miss him terribly every day.
penni d. May 28, 2009, 8:11pm EDT

 Mine has been gone from this plane since '79....I go for a walk once in awhile and feel just like he is walking with me...feels so peaceful....
Beth G. May 28, 2009, 10:12pm EDT

I know what you mean Penni. It's amazing how we still feel so strongly connected to our fathers long after they are gone.  I guess we will always have that with us throughout our lives. :-)
The Red Headed Witch of Gather G. May 28, 2009, 11:38pm EDT

lovely Beth
♥¤ J K¤ ♥ May 29, 2009, 1:42am EDT

Very touching.
Beth G. May 29, 2009, 10:10am EDT

Thank you Red and JK, I appreciate your kind feedback on this poem!
Terry M. Jun 22, 2009, 1:59pm EDT

I can relate to the last verse.
Kevin F Jun 23, 2009, 12:04am EDT

heartfelt without being maudlin...i like it
Beth G. Jun 23, 2009, 2:25pm EDT

Thank you Terry and Kevin, I greatly appreciate your kind feedback!
Mary M. Jun 27, 2009, 6:45pm EDT

That is beautiful, Beth!
Beth G. Jun 29, 2009, 12:24pm EDT

Thank you Mary, I appreciate your lovely feedback!
Sheila Deeth Jul 1, 2009, 10:23pm EDT

I came back to reread.
Beth G. Jul 2, 2009, 1:01am EDT

Thank you Sheila, I am very glad you did!
Lady of Lake Merritt =P Jul 21, 2009, 3:24am EDT
that was beautiful, tugged at my heart. I lost my father in 2000 and I still feel the emptiness. I wish he could've met my boys.
Beth G. Jul 21, 2009, 1:31pm EDT
Hi Lady, I appreciate your kind feedback on this. I am so sorry for your loss, as the heartache gets a bit easier, but never really goes away over time. Today would have been his 65th birthday.
Connie L. Aug 3, 2009, 12:58am EDT
very beautiful
Karen A. Sep 5, 2009, 9:54pm EDT
very nice
Beth G. Sep 5, 2009, 9:58pm EDT
Thank you Karen, I really appreciate your saying so!
Sandi S. Sep 6, 2009, 7:27pm EDT
A sad reflection on loss.

Thank you for sharing, Beth.
Beth G. Sep 7, 2009, 10:34pm EDT
Thank you Sandi, I appreciate your commenting on my poem!
Paula L. Sep 6, 2009, 10:56pm EDT
Beth - I can feel the pain of loss in your writing. You express yourself so well.
Beth G. Sep 7, 2009, 10:19pm EDT
Thank you Paula, I greatly appreciate your kind words on my poem!
Linda M. Dec 7, 2009, 1:41am EST
Your last line is the epitome of a relationship ended-building up "Engaging debates and laughter", and the boom, the end "in silence"
Beth G. Dec 7, 2009, 4:07pm EST
yeah its amazing how painful relationships end that way. Thank you for commenting Linda, I appreciate it!

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