by Marilyn is looking for whatever there is. N.
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August 11, 2006

Loving - Rictameter

May 02, 2009 10:26 AM EDT (Updated: July 04, 2009 06:07 AM EDT)
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Loving -  Rictameter

Loving,
throughout the spring,
when life is fresh, leaves green.

Continue into summers haze,
sparkling shower of stars, bright lazy days.
Come with me, see foliage fade,

Protect from winters bite,
cycles of us,
Loving.

mn - 2009

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Comments: 19

For those of you who'd like to try a ricameter, but don't know how - it's easy.

A ricameter is a nine-lined, unrhymed form, with syllable counts as follows: 2, 4, 6, 8, 10, 8, 6, 4, 2 - in which each desinates the next line, with the first and last being the same word or words.

Marilyn
Svetlana Goryacheva May 2, 2009, 10:30am EDT
Brilliant! :-) And thank you for the explanation of the form... worthy of trying.

Hugs and blessings - S.
Thank you, Svetlana, I have no doubt that you'd excell at it :)
William Dotani May 2, 2009, 10:45am EDT
'Come with me, see foliage fade' - What a beautiful expressive line. This is a beautiful poem.
Mary M. May 2, 2009, 11:21am EDT
Very nice poetry.
Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. May 2, 2009, 11:43am EDT
I like it, but I have enough trouble free form.
Thanks, and lol (with) Ron. I thought this was easier because it's counting syllables. You actually write!
Beautifully woven~ =)
fancy c. May 2, 2009, 8:58pm EDT
very nice
Larry H. May 3, 2009, 12:14am EDT
thanks for sharing
Lee P. May 3, 2009, 12:38pm EDT
There is so much that I do not know and want to know and you are filling up some of those unkown spots for me. Life filled my journey with other things and now that I have time to explore I'm finding that there is a whole 'nother world for me to discover.

This was lovely.
Lee P. May 3, 2009, 1:32pm EDT
Thank you so much for posting the URL link for me. You are also kind as well as talented.
Jim Ross May 3, 2009, 6:07pm EDT
Good job, Marilyn!
Kay M. May 3, 2009, 7:47pm EDT
This is a lovely rictameter Marilyn
Sheila Deeth May 6, 2009, 1:09am EDT
Very nice, and thanks for the explanation.
Sandra L. May 7, 2009, 11:30pm EDT
Thank you for sharing your poetry with us.

Thank you. I haven't been sharing much, as I haven't had time to even be online a lot lately and when I have been, I've been trying to read and comment more than write. I've had to return yet "another" computer and have it back today, plus that LIFE thing keeps me busy. I bet you all know what I mean.

Thank you all for visiting and commenting.

Marilyn
Jennifer Lee Jul 4, 2009, 9:50am EDT

Beautiful Rictameter. It flows so well and the imagery is amazing. I love your poem and wish I could write in this format. Thank you for posting to our group.

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