by Jyoti M.
Member since:
December 17, 2006

My soul wishes to escape

April 19, 2009 02:31 AM EDT
views: 121 | comments: 33

 

Sitting here in my room,

I dream of far away places,

Caught in the humdrum,

My soul wishes to escape,

Away from the subjection,

Away from the probation,

Where the sun shines,

And the skies are cloudless,

Where I could fly,

And have no fear of falling,

Where there is no pain,

And no shadows to follow,

Where I could be just me.

 

As the unending expanse of green meadows,

Beckons me towards the unreal,

I begin to fade away,

The line dividing real and imaginary blurs,

The dream becomes real,

My heart believes what it wants.

As I am drawn to the enigma,

My mind suddenly overcomes

My dream shatters,

I hurtle back into the real,

I see walls closing on to me,

The struggle begins again,

I pace to keep up with life.

 

Only evidence of my momentary rendezvous,

I am numbed by my own pain,

As the tears fell down my cheeks.

 

 

 

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Comments: 33

Sharon B. Apr 19, 2009, 2:41am EDT
thanks for sharing
Kushal Poddar Apr 19, 2009, 2:48am EDT
You have talent. Style of this simplicity easily touches heart. Keep writing.

Future under a moon
Jyoti M. Apr 19, 2009, 2:52am EDT
Thanks Kushal
Vinay Benjamin Apr 19, 2009, 3:02am EDT
An architect and a poet - Jyoti methinks, some wonderous creations are in the offing!! Very real, poignant lines

"My heart believes what it wants" - is a powerul statement and my own personal conviction

Regards,

Vinay
EDWINA (MISSIE) B. Apr 19, 2009, 3:32am EDT
very nice
Jyoti M. Apr 19, 2009, 4:50am EDT
Thanks again Vinay..

Thanks Edwina
L. H. Apr 19, 2009, 6:56am EDT
I liked it too, I guess you could put it that way. It was very descriptive and sounds like someone lost, but entering reality means your not really lost, just searching I guess.

NICE ::)
Robert - just a simple man - B. Apr 19, 2009, 9:04am EDT
Simply Sweet and as more times than not I see that once again I agree with the poet Poddar.

Here is a place you can come to: http://www.gather.com/viewArticle.jsp?articleId=281474977658922 (cut & paste).

Streaker and I would love to have you along for a walk through sun-dappled fields and pristine hardwood forests. And as for your tears; Streaker will steal them away.

Continue your search dear soul for it is not the destination but the journey.

- Robert
MaryBeth W. Apr 19, 2009, 9:38am EDT
A wonderful expression of the need to expand our soul and the seeming impossibility of doing so. I love the repetition you use.
Nancy Biri Apr 19, 2009, 10:41am EDT
Very nice
sally g. Apr 19, 2009, 11:40am EDT
very nice
Jyoti M. Apr 19, 2009, 11:58am EDT
Thanks all :)
lynn a. Apr 19, 2009, 12:07pm EDT
Jyoti, the longing expressed in your poem is palpable and (I think) found in every one of us, but you are the one who could expose it so well. Wrenching emotional pain has been handled in your hands with a clarity and a truthfulness that is so fair. I hope to read more of your poems, and I do hope you have a day that causes you to smile.
Howard b. Apr 19, 2009, 1:21pm EDT
If not for our dreams what would we have ? Very good poem. Sometimes we all feel this way. Thanks for sharing it with us.
Chuck L. Apr 19, 2009, 1:27pm EDT
Architect, poet... all is art, and you do them well.
Sharon P. Apr 19, 2009, 1:30pm EDT
That's lovely Jyoti, hope you feel better soon.
Stacey (Jesus is coming soon! ) U. Apr 19, 2009, 5:05pm EDT
I would often like to escape to the places of my childhood....
Felicia R. Apr 19, 2009, 9:33pm EDT
Thanks for sharing
Jan S. Apr 19, 2009, 9:53pm EDT
This is lovely, deep and emotional.
Lewis (taking over Gather) K. Apr 19, 2009, 10:52pm EDT
Wow, I understand this well. It reflects frustrations I have, when the world rushes by, like a carousel spinning too fast for me to grab. Also, the feeling of knowing what I want, but not how to get there. Great job.
Georgiana S. Apr 20, 2009, 1:04am EDT
You are young and knowing well what you will achieve, very nice.
Jyoti M. Apr 20, 2009, 6:46am EDT
Thanks all for your such positive responses. :) It surely made my day..
Bard Constantine Apr 21, 2009, 8:45pm EDT
You called this an attempt. I call it a success.
Robert - just a simple man - B. Apr 22, 2009, 10:14am EDT
Please visit my post, "THE JOURNEY", I have dedicated it to you.
Robert - just a simple man - B. Apr 22, 2009, 10:58am EDT
Oops, Here's the link, my new friend.

The Journey
Jyoti M. Apr 24, 2009, 12:40pm EDT
Thank you so much
Shelbia C. May 1, 2009, 4:16am EDT
this is wonderful
Vaishnavi K. May 1, 2009, 12:24pm EDT
its a sad poem but beautifull...
Holly K. May 26, 2009, 1:38pm EDT

Excellent poem!
rajendra singh s. May 27, 2009, 2:59am EDT

MIND BLOWING POEM "JYOTI"

THIS TIME, WHEN EVERYONE HOPES FOR CLOUDLESS SKY TO FLY.

BUT,

WHEN  YOU AIM HIGH TO MAKE YOUR OWN SKY, YOU HAVE TO PIN THE FAITH  IN YOUR SELF. YOU HAVE TO STRUGGLE A  LOT, THEN YOU CAN HAVE YOUR PLEASURE'S SKY.

 
rajendra singh s. May 27, 2009, 3:00am EDT

I LIKE YOUR THEME OF POETRY. THAT'S ONE OF MY CHOICE AS I WRITE.
Narasimha Rao Jakkamsetty Jul 13, 2009, 7:04am EDT

As Kushal says you have talent. Looks a bit professional; I suggest you learn the art of writing poetry so that you can get into print and reach more people. You may not need people but I guess people need you. As I got  to the last lines of your poem tears welled into my eyes too! It was so touching.

I 'met' you on Cheryl's site with a surreal story.  The affinity of fellow Indian dragged me to your site.
David P. Dec 10, 2009, 2:09pm EST
Very moving! You have a real talent!

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