by Robert - just a simple man - B.
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April 12, 2007

Pick-Up Sticks (a remembrance of peace)

April 04, 2009 01:47 AM EDT (Updated: June 26, 2009 10:35 AM EDT)
views: 212 | comments: 56

 

PICK-UP STICKS

©Robert Burnham, 2009

 

Growing up an Oldie

Wishing he was a roadie

Rolling up a toadie

On some Jamaican beach

 

Dreaming on a heaven

Relying on a seven

From the time he was eleven

With Vegas out of reach

 

Once listenin to Alice Cooper

David Bowie in the pooper

In a psychedelic stupor

We knew he'd end up dead

 

Not many would mourn him

Only those who torn him

And that One who did scorn him

And maybe one fictitious Fred

 

Hula Hoop and Flutophone

A Banana Boat tan tone

Abbott & Costello kodachromes

Is this all that he'll miss

 

Dinosaurs and Ghost Rider

Grand Canyon looks wider

Once kissed by Wynona Ryder

He's just falling through the mist

 

Many girls left behind

Lost souls still to find

Has he totally lost his mind

Swimming the River Styx

 

Blackness it does devour

All of one's wanton hours

Hell, maybe it's just a shower

Or a game of Pick-up sticks......

 

 

 

 
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Comments: 56

Ron Jenkins Apr 4, 2009, 2:01am EDT
That was really good. I liked it. I am not much into poetry at all, but this is exceptional.

http://www.ireport.com/docs/DOC-235059
Jennine D. Apr 4, 2009, 2:21am EDT
A lot of depth here. Hang in there Robert. You have more to do yet.
Lewis (keeping those fires burning) K. Apr 4, 2009, 2:37am EDT
Nice reflections, Robert. I like the structure of the poem as well. Like Jen said -pretty deep thoughts. Keep writing.
Robert - just a simple man - B. Apr 4, 2009, 2:48am EDT
Just thoughts one woke up to Lewis. Big compliment Ron - Thanks.
Jan S. Apr 4, 2009, 2:57am EDT
This is really great, Robert. I think it could be a song.
stacy k. Apr 4, 2009, 3:13am EDT
Hi Robert, this was truly great. Sorry I haven't communicated much, I have been really sick. Made it to the er last night and the doc said I was a mess. lol. I have not been on gather in days. Finally got some meds though. Talk to ya soon!:)
Heather C. Apr 4, 2009, 3:18am EDT
Well done! Interesting too!
Tim T. Apr 4, 2009, 3:30am EDT
well done - 10 Tim
Shannon H. Apr 4, 2009, 6:41am EDT
I really enjoyed this poem. I liked it because it's light sing-song-y style is in deep contrast with the subject matter.
John Philipp Apr 4, 2009, 6:41am EDT
Robert, this is excellent work !

The message is poignant and thought provoking.

I particularly like the rhyme scheme. Definitely has a song quality.

Thanks.
Kushal Poddar Apr 4, 2009, 7:02am EDT
I loved to see that you are yet to lose it. You shall never lose it.
The sharpness of creations.

Her windows, her rooms
Angela M. Apr 4, 2009, 7:32am EDT
I like it, thank you for sharing it with us...
~ Point Fairies


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Lisa Frost Apr 4, 2009, 7:51am EDT
wonderful wondering!
Teresa T. Apr 4, 2009, 7:59am EDT
Very interesting use of words.
Jennifer Lee Apr 4, 2009, 8:29am EDT
Intriguing and well done. I admire your talent and skill in rhyme. I long to give you a real hug to comfort you. Thank you for posting to our group.
*Carol ~Bronx Southern Belle D. Apr 4, 2009, 8:51am EDT
You're exceptional. Very well done.
computer artist . Apr 4, 2009, 9:00am EDT
interesting and well done. I liked reading it.
Nancy Biri Apr 4, 2009, 9:09am EDT
nice
René Allen Apr 4, 2009, 9:41am EDT
Very different.
Jodi G. Apr 4, 2009, 9:52am EDT
Robert, I usually enjoy your poetry, but I absolutely loved this one.
Tracy Fabre Apr 4, 2009, 10:34am EDT
A trip down many memory lanes there ~ 70s child, let's shake hands on these bits of our past! (I never kissed Winona, however, and am okay with that.)
Robert - just a simple man - B. Apr 4, 2009, 11:08am EDT
Aww Tracy, I think you would have liked it. She's got a very slight overbite.

Thanks everyone for coming along, appreciate your time in commenting. John, from my humor mentor, wow. Thanks.
Robert - just a simple man - B. Apr 4, 2009, 11:15am EDT
Jen, my friend, This 'dude' could use that hug.
Renee S. Apr 4, 2009, 11:38am EDT
Very well done.
Teresa A. Apr 4, 2009, 11:40am EDT
Very interesting work!
Alisa Kerwood Apr 4, 2009, 11:53am EDT
thats how my thoughts come out some times I loved it
Rory M. Apr 4, 2009, 12:01pm EDT
As Shannon observed, it is the contrast between style and content that makes this piece exceptional.

It seems cheeky and somewhat irreverent, but then it amounts to a touching tribute to a lost soul.

It takes a fair bit of facility and a good dollop of talent to pull of something like this. I think you have depths even yet unplumbed.
Lee Y. Apr 4, 2009, 1:10pm EDT
I like it.

But even more, though I haven't a poetic bone or typing-finger in my body, can't "do" poetry myself, and may be reading it wrong ... this speaks to me not only of your 'muse', your proficiency, and your depths (good, bad, sad, joyful, despondent as well as responsive); I see hope here. Hope. It's a good thing.


Jen says you have more to do yet.
I agree.
Liz H. Apr 4, 2009, 1:14pm EDT
I can almost hear the music, too. Nice, Robert!
Sharon R. Apr 4, 2009, 1:41pm EDT
Beautiful Robert! Would be a very good song.
I always love your poetry, but this one is especially good - maybe because it brought back a lot of memories - a child of the 60s here!
Sharon P. Apr 4, 2009, 2:23pm EDT
As a child of the 50's, annd young adult in the 60's, I can really relate to that one.
Good poem, Robert.
Angela A. Apr 4, 2009, 3:06pm EDT
Great poem dear friend!
When I get the chance, I will email you.
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
Rachel W. Apr 4, 2009, 3:38pm EDT
Wonderful
Lona Herling Apr 4, 2009, 5:06pm EDT
I really like this one. Very good.
Bard Constantine Apr 4, 2009, 8:02pm EDT
Whimsical whistling disguises damp thoughts from the well of your mind. Expertly written.
Randi Burnham-Brown Apr 4, 2009, 8:42pm EDT
I like the form. Brings a lot of old things back. Good job bro!
Kay M. Apr 4, 2009, 8:55pm EDT
Very interesting.
Georgiana S. Apr 4, 2009, 9:13pm EDT
berating hippies?!
Christine G. Apr 4, 2009, 10:25pm EDT
Thanks for sharing.
EDWINA (MISSIE) B. Apr 4, 2009, 10:46pm EDT
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Missy Cline Apr 5, 2009, 4:05pm EDT
way cool! whats a toady???
Karen L. Apr 5, 2009, 7:32pm EDT
Fabulous, you are now featured in Remembering the 70's?
Thanks for posting!
Shelbia C. Apr 5, 2009, 9:44pm EDT
This is such a cool poem
Susan B. Apr 6, 2009, 10:01am EDT
Bravo! Well done :)
Robert - just a simple man - B. Apr 6, 2009, 3:46pm EDT
Thanks Karen, Thanks Christina. Thanks all.
(The Other) Dale C. Apr 7, 2009, 1:50am EDT
Your mind was a workin'. The poem seems to gain speed, the further I go. Great job.
Erica Hidvegi Apr 7, 2009, 11:01pm EDT
I remember those and memories of having nothing better to do than watching them fall to where . . . thank you for sharing !
Charity M. Apr 8, 2009, 3:42pm EDT
((( Some..real talent here! )))
barb n. May 23, 2009, 4:24pm EDT

that was great!!!! I,too,think it could be a song...... plus, brought back a  lot of memories!!!!
Geri F. Jun 17, 2009, 1:08pm EDT

Great poem! Lots of nostalgia there.
Dawn (kitty on the wall) Jul 11, 2009, 4:13pm EDT

i love the photo. can't say i've did any of those things but would love to
Robert - just a simple man - B. Jul 11, 2009, 4:35pm EDT

I kind of had to imagine the Jamaican beach for a beach in Maine but the rest pretty much runs true.  Thanks Dawn for coming along.
Gwen K Jul 15, 2009, 10:38am EDT

Very nice, lots of imagery & fame! 10
jodysong G. Jul 18, 2009, 10:48am EDT
Thankyou for complimenting my post; as for this,*All Dat', an' a piece a chicken! A jump back into a lighter time warp!

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