by William Dotani
Member since:
October 27, 2006

Gates Forever Opened

March 30, 2009 05:45 PM EDT
views: 177 | comments: 43

Raindrops driven by sky
Touch, blend, river's welcome
Kiss water of us all
Time shyly abstaining but,
Out of the thicket,breeze revisiting
With of course variations anew
Buffed rust, eroding sights and sounds
Horizon's know as journey unfolds

Abstracts slide, worked fluctuation
Stray stone, stray wound, so deep the kiss
Needle tip, slight the blemish
Up, down, open, deeper, digging view
Carved wind-blown news, change it seems
On a step, in haste to a place
Follow with trusting umbrella
Symbolic looking glass repairs
Under blue sky, dominoes reset

Angles barely supported, sway gently
A wall, all cracked up, plays comedian
Internal amped up speakers, listening
Bolts of elixir and watermarked sky
Winds whistling Angels singing
A slap and a tickle, growing up fast
Apathy quite torn, continually born
Recall innocence of majesty
Never too late, appreciate dawn

 

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Comments: 43

Svetlana Goryacheva Mar 30, 2009, 5:49pm EDT
Enjoyed it tremendously, dear William... such an impressive, alluring imagery... bravo, my friend! :-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Tanya P. Mar 30, 2009, 6:00pm EDT
Nice write. Never too late, appreciate dawn Yes.
Peter Joseph Swanson Mar 30, 2009, 6:13pm EDT
*standing ovation*
JOHN BECK Mar 30, 2009, 6:19pm EDT
Sounds like our nation, Bill.
Linda T. Mar 30, 2009, 6:39pm EDT
Nice one!
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Mar 30, 2009, 6:44pm EDT
Brilliant thoughts...reflections and reminders.
And time flows on.
William Dotani Mar 30, 2009, 7:10pm EDT
It's been a very rough day. My wife also is not feeling well.
Marge H. Mar 30, 2009, 7:33pm EDT
I need to come back later when I have more time to relish this. Right now, I have too much on my mind to concentrate.
Kimberly Ripley Mar 30, 2009, 11:15pm EDT
"Time shyly abstaining...."

I love this line! Delicate wording. Vivid imagery.
Jennifer Lee Mar 30, 2009, 11:36pm EDT
Your writing is just brilliant and out of the 99 members in our group, the most difficult for me to interpret. All I know is that I love your work and want to feature this gem. The feelings it invoked in me are a longing for Spring, a sense of renewal and hope. At the same time it speaks of the end of life and the remorse that entails. Thank you for posting to our group and I hope you don't mind that I share how I interact with your work.
Jennifer Lee Mar 30, 2009, 11:39pm EDT
PS the imagery is amazing, too! Hugs, Bill!
Elsie Duggan Mar 31, 2009, 3:54am EDT
wonderful William, you are up to your high standards with this one, goodnight, love you, Elsie
John F Walter Mar 31, 2009, 6:43am EDT
Really subtle study of the surfaces of things in a rainstorm. It feels as if you almost get across the spiritual mood of rain here, William. I love this style you´ve developed, it truly is your own and unique in every way.
amanda wallin Mar 31, 2009, 9:46am EDT
masterful! Love the way you turn things upside down and played w words in such a brilliant manner. Fabulous read William
Jennifer aka Jenn B. Mar 31, 2009, 9:54am EDT
Your words delight
Kay M. Mar 31, 2009, 12:20pm EDT
Enchanting thoughts. I like to hear the angels' songs on the wind.
Kushal Poddar Mar 31, 2009, 12:20pm EDT
Every words and each of the lines... amazing.

lost ego
debra g. Mar 31, 2009, 2:44pm EDT
William,I'm sorry you do nor feel well today.I hope you and your wife feel better later today.I so enjoy your work of words.I have started spring cleaning this past week and I'm so far behind on gather I have lissed a lot of your post.Never fear I will get to them.
Angela A. Mar 31, 2009, 3:07pm EDT
Nope, it's never too late to appreciate the dawn!
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
Wonderful imagery, Bill. I hope you and your wife are feeling better and will return to 100% soon. By the way, I need to know where you picked up your copy of the book you mentioned on my post :) I wonder if they have "Understanding Men for Dummies".
M & M. Mar 31, 2009, 6:12pm EDT
awesome
Elsie Duggan Apr 1, 2009, 1:51am EDT
I hope your wife and you are feeling better by now, not a good thing to feel ill, and you have had enough, take care of yourself, I love you , goodnight William
Elsie Duggan Apr 1, 2009, 3:43am EDT
goodnight again, just looked at the time, sleeping in again tomorrow I guess, love, Elsie, Hope your mom is doing really well
Sujata (funnily 'Suji' ) S. Apr 1, 2009, 7:45am EDT
You are spiritually growing to be so potent observer of the silent nature with it 's wonderful form !!!
Sujata (funnily 'Suji' ) S. Apr 1, 2009, 7:46am EDT
Thanks for visiting my page to enlighten me on my read !!!
Curt L. Apr 1, 2009, 12:29pm EDT
Brilliant!
Such wonderful imagery!
Thank you so much, William!
sheila h. Apr 1, 2009, 3:02pm EDT
This is life
'This is death
the forever flow
repeated endlessly
mercifully
all that came before and all that will be
to sky to earth to us
the dominoes reset
and we begin again the endless flow of life and death
each time the pattern the same but different
every soul making its individual mark on this earth on this sky
on life on death
we begin again and the angels sing with every slap, tickle and growing up fast
and the angels weep
with every light dimmed before the true understanding
the true purpose
we live we die and so it is true with all between the earth and sky.
sheila h. Apr 1, 2009, 3:04pm EDT
your poem is riveting ..
your verse planted the seed and that tumbled out..
John Harris Beck Apr 1, 2009, 5:01pm EDT
Umm, yes. "Never too late, appreciate dawn."
Sheila Deeth Apr 1, 2009, 7:22pm EDT
Lovely. The last line really resonates. And I guess, indeed, I should appreciate those rainy dawns when the son is asleep and the sun hid in rain and I'm whispering, louder each time, hey kiddo, time to get up.
Alison H. Apr 1, 2009, 7:35pm EDT
Hi William, I need to read this a few more times and stand on my head for awhile to appreciate it.

BTW, I responded to your comment on the Poetry Quote for T.S. Eliot.
Excellent!! love the last line "Never too late appreciate dawn" Each day is precious as life is too short as it is. Well done William
Marianne M. Apr 1, 2009, 11:23pm EDT
Your poems always delight and entertain me, William!
Lisa Frost Apr 2, 2009, 9:59pm EDT
simply wonderful!
necee t. Apr 3, 2009, 1:21am EDT
excellent work, as always... Bless you and yours...
The last line (though the rest is wonderous), really made me think as so many times, I don't appreciate the dawn as I should. I'll work to change that.

Hope both you and your wife are feeling better.

Marilyn
Elsie Duggan Apr 3, 2009, 4:10am EDT
Goodnight William, had better go to bed, dawn is not far from now, what did you say to me in Japaneese? (spelling) , love you, Elsie
Marge H. Apr 3, 2009, 7:39pm EDT
Just dropping by to say hi, reread your beautiful poem, and enjoy the comments.
Marge H. Apr 3, 2009, 7:40pm EDT
I hope everyone in your family is feeling well today.
Debra H. Apr 4, 2009, 2:53am EDT
William, you are such a delight and challenge to the imagination
captivating~words bounce off each other into prismatic musings over meanings
Michelle W. Apr 10, 2009, 5:41pm EDT
I love to read and reread your works, I get something more and different each time. So full of imagery, metaphore ... I was particularly grabbed by Winds whistling Angels singing

I love that thought!

Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !

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