by Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom'
Member since:
April 25, 2007

Happiness is cheap~ (Title suggested by Alison ;)

March 30, 2009 02:54 PM EDT (Updated: March 30, 2009 04:54 PM EDT)
views: 112 | rating: 10/10 (19 votes) | comments: 36

You killed him

crushing and smashing into pieces

smelling the pride in your shoes

mind puffing up with pleasure

wicked zest in your eyes

pleasing the unfaithful ego.

you seem to be happy

How cheap happiness is

a simple thing

and within easy reach.

You turned and walked

dissatisfied mind still burning

you came back to see--

 he's alive or dead,

caressing pain?

He was still moving

 longing for  freedom

You killed him

again,

crushing and smashing him into pieces

you seem to be happy

How cheap happiness is

a simple thing

and within easy reach.

 

 

 

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Comments: 36

William Dotani Mar 30, 2009, 3:04pm EDT
Quite a poetic way to smash a bug. My wife often asks me if I'm Buddhist because I capture spiders and set them free outdoors. I do not like killing anything, but I do kill the mosquito.
Desiree T. Mar 30, 2009, 3:06pm EDT
That was cute.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Mar 30, 2009, 3:07pm EDT
The ego is a fragile thing, a shadow of a person's true self.
Svetlana Goryacheva Mar 30, 2009, 3:08pm EDT
Brilliant, my dear! :-)

Love and hugs - S.
very good Bhawana......
thanks.......
Kimber L. Mar 30, 2009, 3:22pm EDT
Well written!
Phyllis R. Mar 30, 2009, 3:50pm EDT
Very well written....I will think of this everytime I see a bug! I'm not into killing bugs but like William I will kill a mosquito....I am so afraid of that bad virus they carry!
Marianne R. Mar 30, 2009, 4:22pm EDT
Nicely done
Alison H. Mar 30, 2009, 4:26pm EDT
Vivid and so true. I don't take this literally, though it works that way, too. Words can hurt, sometimes more than blows. Some people build themselves up by putting others down, but can true self-esteem ever reside on cruelty? I believe the words or actions will come back to haunt the perpetrator. The Golden Rule is universal among all religions: "Do unto others what you would have them do unto you." And the law of karma is: what you do unto others WILL be done unto you!
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Mar 30, 2009, 4:42pm EDT
Hi William,

Your views are apt as your are a buddhist.Thanks for the lovely comment.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Mar 30, 2009, 4:43pm EDT
Thanks everyone.I appreciate your visits and words.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Mar 30, 2009, 4:44pm EDT
Dear Alison,

You catched the bottom line of this poem which I wrote under those feelings.Thanks for the very exceptional explaination.I am overwhelmed.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Mar 30, 2009, 4:56pm EDT
and Thanks, Alison for suggesting me this title. Ego was not working and even I wanted a change;)....I fixed other things, too.

Love
Donald M. Mar 30, 2009, 5:26pm EDT
A person's Ego can do many things. We must not try to hurt others Ego's in order to build up our own. ,,,

Buzzy, This was excellent.
JOHN BECK Mar 30, 2009, 5:45pm EDT
The three repeating lines with the unexpected between make a significant statement about ego, Buzz. Very good poem.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Mar 30, 2009, 6:44pm EDT
That's wonderful comment,Norma.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Mar 30, 2009, 6:45pm EDT
Glad you liked those repetition.Thanks,John
Kathryn E. Mar 30, 2009, 6:49pm EDT
I like the reptition, too, and a very clever and effective way with the prompt.

Featured in the Triple Name Club.
Marianne M. Mar 30, 2009, 7:01pm EDT
Well done, Buzzy!
Kat W. Mar 30, 2009, 7:20pm EDT
Poor bug. Nice one, Buzzy.
Marge H. Mar 30, 2009, 7:27pm EDT
Wow, the poem was great and so are the comments it inspired. Wonderful writing.
Like all good poetry, this really works on a number of levels of interpretation. Ten stars from me.
Larry H. Mar 30, 2009, 8:02pm EDT
THANKS FOR SHARING..
phil w. Mar 30, 2009, 11:03pm EDT
Thank you Buzzy. Message sent.
John F Walter Mar 31, 2009, 6:50am EDT
Very strong, no-holds-barred angry poem, Bhawana. I like to hear that lyrical flash of righteous indignation in your poetic voice from time to time.
Digital Diva S. Mar 31, 2009, 8:42am EDT
It took me a minute to figure this out but when I did - oh my, you are really good.
Angela A. Mar 31, 2009, 3:12pm EDT
You would think so, that happiness can be found so easily.
I love the questions brought forth by this lovely poem.
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
Missy Cline Mar 31, 2009, 6:23pm EDT
awesome!
Lisa Frost Apr 1, 2009, 12:56pm EDT
Great Job!
William Dotani Apr 1, 2009, 4:48pm EDT
I reread this and realized the hidden metaphor is how words can be used to destroy a person. Very sobering.
Sheila Deeth Apr 1, 2009, 6:18pm EDT
And words repeated... Neat job with this one.
Sherrie H. Apr 2, 2009, 2:43pm EDT
I can just envision it. Excellent.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Apr 2, 2009, 4:32pm EDT
Thank you everyone.
kasujja muhamed Apr 5, 2009, 3:52pm EDT
Bhawana.
Many think happiness cant last but l liked the poem,happiness is power and it comes to those who believe that life is circle today you are at A and other day you are B but you need to focus and feel the point to be happy so as to do much in life.Hugs
Michelle W. Apr 30, 2009, 6:33pm EDT
I had to re read to get the bug idea. I was thinking more about how we smash each other and ourselves on a daily basis. It works either way. Wonderful work!

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