Burial
Like lillies her fingers lay in her lap
Cut-quick and refined in their curve,
As she sat like the cup of coffee beside her:
Cold and contained and unstirred.
The tongue in his mouth was a foul piece of meat,
As it rolled, too large to spit out
Or swallow the reason for which he'd arrived:
The daughter that was his report.
He'd mulled over his mind's medicine cabinet:
Practiced pills he'd prepared to deliver;
But the flash on her face from the four flinty words
Steeled the strike of the wrong type of tender.
...
In light intermittent, inside a motel
of rating or visit unworthy,
She'd sagged under shadows of countless men laid
Like the bed, the weight buckling inside her.
No one had known neither name nor the number
Of men she had held, nor a shout
Had been heard on the night she'd comfort the one
When her insides had been made out.
And realizing her room he had rented before,
In a storm when his own was unwelcome;
His stomach recoiled at the passionless hour
Spent with ring and his vows on the table.
...
Overgrown and unmarked, this aged memory
He'd not ever expected exhumed,
Was the bed he had made and within it to lie,
And he knew that she knew that he knew.
One Mother, now chipped; one Badge, duty-broken
Entombed in grim formality;
And the single crow called as it flew from the field
For the child and the murder of three.
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This poem created for "Prompt Puppies" and an exercise where the words "rating" and "burial" needed to be used in a short story.


Comments: 33
Cold and contained and unstirred.
I loved that^^^
Very good Michael.
That is just beatiful. Dark, flowing, evocative and perfectly formed.
You're one hell of a poet. Colour me seriously impressed, mate.
Just as an aside, that last word on stanza 3 - "tender" or "tinder"?
I thought about putting "tender" in quotes; the male character had planned his words to sound "tender;" instead found "tinder." So it's both.
Spent with ring and his vows on the table"
I like this, Michael. I've read it over about four times and I'm still gleaning more with each read. I have not seen this side of the Kitteh - it is very, very talented. :-)
(I think I'll just stop now.)
I gotta tell you-- I had to kick my significant other out of the house early so I could finish this-- and I still didn't get it done when I wanted! :)
This was great! I love your similies throughout. I think you paint wonderful pictures with them. It's a true talent.
I'll just say I know it was good, because I didn't get it. If poetry is much deeper than, "Hickory Dickory Dock", I get lost.
Regards,
Doyle I <~~~~~
It's me, not you. Really it is.
Srsly.
Srsly.
Ina ? Goddess of Shoes?, Mar 9, 2009, 3:30pm EDT
Can we still be friends? ;)
Understood.
I'll have to follow Lainie's lead from now and start referring to "Mr. Kitteh" for the new you... except for around the Kapshuns, that is.
Quite impressive.
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Will WOW, suffice?
Marilyn
Sheryl O., Mar 16, 2009, 3:53pm EDT
By the look of the fur, the Bear's Good Luck is about run out. That static electricity means lightning's about to strike.