
Winston Rafferty:
"He drives a silver Toyota Camry, not a flashy red anything."
This speaks to his personality...
"His shoes, while shiny, are not designer. He doesn't wear glasses, and he doesn't pluck his rather bushy eyebrows. His skin is clean, but his pores have not been subjected to peach pit compotes, dermabrasion or hours under a sunlamp."
...As does this.
A.J. Tinker:
"His shoes, while shiny, are not designer. He doesn't wear glasses, and he doesn't pluck his rather bushy eyebrows. His skin is clean, but his pores have not been subjected to peach pit compotes, dermabrasion or hours under a sunlamp."
Suggests fastidious traits.
"Mr. Tinker walked across the creaking wooden floor, meticulously swept..."
Cleanliness...a character trait.
"He adjusted his bow tie."
Shows age. Also, to some extent...it relates (along with checking his appearance) to fastidiousness.
"He took off his silver glasses and held them up to the light examining them...but they were blemish free..."
Shows concern for cleanliness and self-appearance.
"Ach! Meine kleinen Stiefel! How Vunderfull to hear your voice!"
Shows ethnicity and cultural background.
Cleavis:
"He spat and a thick spray of mahogany snuff shot out the window."
Shows class, socio-economic level...
"His torn jeans and faded t-shirt set him apart from the well-dressed crowd."
Indicates a blue collar person.
"When the sight of the dilapidated shack where he and his family lived came into view..."
Shows economic status.
"As soon as he could, he was going to leave that hovel and head out on the open rails. He'd leave and never once look back."
Shows a man with no social, family or other ties.
Brian Robert Alistair Nesbitt:
"So he did what he did best: he made himself tall and thin, insubstantial in his faded Bob Marley T-shirt, and tuned out the tirade."
Shows age without telling it.
"A small, slight figure moved through the mist onto the concrete overpass, barely perceptible but for the rhythmic stomping of his feet on the wet pavement which echoed through the damp, grey air of the morning. "
An awesome way to show a young person without saying he/she was young.
"His old, thin sneakers were soaked from the wet fields and puddles he had walked through to get there. His damp jeans were almost worn through in spots, crawling up his shins higher and higher by the day, it seemed. "
Shows socio-economic status.


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"So he did what he did best: he made himself tall and thin, insubstantial in his faded Bob Marley T-shirt, and tuned out the tirade."
Shows age without telling it.
Not only that - it's such a great line that draws a clear picture. Can't you just see him making himself tall and thin? Know the expression that goes with it?
Abso-fricken-lutely! :o)
I'm right there with you!
Regards,
Doyle I <~~~~~
I think I used to irritate Sandy because I would publish my poems to "Writing Essentials" all the time. I didn't know any better and now I'm sure it had to be aggravating for her but she was a good sport about it nonetheless and for that I feel a kindred bond to her.
Why do I tell you all this? I don't quite know, maybe it's because I feel you are an intellectual counterpart or probably higher. Also, Lainie and the "circle" you all have are good people whom I have never had a qualm with and respect highly because, well, I admire intellect. Nuff said.
Cheers!
Absolutely...it's part of the exercises this week! :o)
Yes? Thanks... :o)
Ahhhhh Jean. I can honestly say you are the first to give me supertriplekudos. Coincidentally, it was a Jean that was the first to give me cooties too (I was told). Oh...those 2nd graders can be a cruel lot! :o)
What? Where? Where?
Regards,
Doyle I <~~~~~