Dear Sandy,
I saw what them other people said about me. Dang. I always remind everybody of somebody else. I mean, that’s okay when they say I look like movie star or remind them of their favorite cousins or something but sometimes I wish people could see me. You know what I mean? Of course you do. But do you think you can make other people know what I mean?
Don’t get me wrong, I love my kids to death but I’m tired of being somebody’s mother, or somebody’s ex old lady. At least I ain’t Stacy’s little sister any more but that’s only because I stay away from her and her negative friends. Who knows. They might still call me that behind my back but that’s better than what they called me to my face to make me stop going around them in the first place.
Can you make me look good in your story? I don’t mean just look cute, but let people know I ain’t stupid? A lot of people think because I talk fast, care about how I look, and laugh all the time that means I’m an airhead and I don’t care about nothing. You know that’s not true, so can you find some way to write me up and make them see all of me? You know when I talk I just say the first thing that comes to my head. Maybe you can write up some of the things that don’t get there first.
One reason I want that team mom thing is so the other mothers will have to talk to me. I mean, I guess they could just shove their money in my hand and snatch the pictures from me but I don’t think they’re that rude. Some of them might talk to me a little bit and find out I’m not too bad.
I don’t mean to be bossy. Just thought I’d ask if you could help a little. It’s okay if you want to do something different. I’ll understand. Shoot. I change my mind all the time so I can’t expect nobody else not to do it.
Love ya!
Sabrina
p.s. Do I have to do that list thing?
ONE STOP SHOPPING - HERE'S SABRINA'S LIST
- It took me forever to count the magnets on my refrigerator since that’s what I collect. I have thirty-six but most of them ain’t anything special like you buy at the store. Four are calendars that came off the phone books. I didn’t get four books. My neighbor didn’t want the magnets that came on hers so I said I’d take them because the kids are always wanting to hang their coloring up. A bunch more are advertisements from different places, mostly restaurants. The city sent out one big magnet with 9-1-1 on it like anybody forgets that number and some other numbers they think we need to keep in front of our faces in case we don’t want to call 9-1-1 I guess. Who’s going to dial the fire department instead of just calling 9-1-1? Three are little frames the kids gave me for Mother’s Day with their pictures in them. You don’t want to know the rest do you? I hate to type and I would have to take them all down and bring them in here to list them. Take my word for it they aren’t anything exciting likes pictures of the cities and countries I took vacations in.
- I need everything from the grocery right now but mostly milk, cereal, and Sunny
- The Bachelor. I wrote in and asked them to pick one that wants a family next time.
- Hannah Montana. It was awesome but now my girls want everything they see with her name on it.
- What I like most about myself ain’t what other people like most about me. I like being friendly.
- If I could change one thing about me it would be the way I fall in love to easy.
- Ain’t much that scares me except the usual things like snakes and spiders. Sometimes I’m scared we might have a war here but I mostly try not to think about scary things.
- Ice cream.


Comments: 41
Now I understand, Sandy. You are the master. I can see clearly now. I think I'm really going to like Sabrina. Maybe she'd even consider being my friend.
To be honest, I think you have just written my daughter-in-law.
(I'm sure the honest rater who doesn't want to critique in public will let me know about it by private message.)
I understand her even more from her list. Her lack of a filter makes the list revealing about what she wants to happen in her life.
Sandy, this really struck me to the core. It made me feel sad and suddenly protective of Sabrina. Acceptance...and for someone to see her the way she is, without making judgments on how she looks...now there a universal lesson we could all use, huh?
I like her, I want to be her friend, and I want those mean moms to quit being so snotty to her.
The line "Maybe you can write up some of the things that don’t get there first" stood out to me, too. It seems key to developing a character...to have compassion for them...to allow them the dignity of three dimensionality.
I enjoyed reading Sabrina's voice come through in this.
She has more depth than you originally gave her credit for, Sandy. I knew she was more than what she seemed!
Awesome...
Elizabeth, don't you want to bring a character and join us? It's never too late.
I wouldn't mind Sabrina talking a mile a minute at me at the ball park. I'd just nod my head.
I always remind everybody of somebody else.
Are we projecting our own experiences with people she might resemble into her?
Damn -- what a perfectly fabulous piece of writing. I think it captures the insecurity and wistfulness of Sabrina perfectly. That line is as poignant as it is well constructed. Jeezus, Sandy -- you srsly made me sit back and blink hard with that line. It really brought Sabrina home to me, and I am even MORE convinced that she and I would end up being friends.
Your letter is great. It's absolutely some of the best character exposition I've ever seen. You kept dead-on with the character's tone (which I've come to expect from you; you make it look natural,) and you took this woman whose life, to me, appears to be all brass balls and bravado, and didn't make her into a caricature -- which, I suspect, is what a lot of writers would do. You've managed to not paint Sabrina with broad strokes, but instead, kept her pretty subtle. Bravo!
Now, for a question, how much did you, as Sandy, struggle to keep the integrity of the character going by dropping the "o" in this:
If I could change one thing about me it would be the way I fall in love to easy.
;-) And, Holy Moley! I could go on and on about that single, telling line for another three paragraphs! But I won't. I don't know why I'm in the mood to leave dissertations this morning. Especially when Eva has awoken The Ferryman from slumber...
As meticulous as YOU are about spelling, I picked up on the same missing "o" that Joy mentioned, too... I knew you were trying to stay in character as Sabrina when you intentionally left the second "o" out! Nicely done, Sandy.
Tell Sabrina that she doesn't seem stupid at all. Just the opposite.
She is just plain regular [not that way] ....... I like that.
[Snicker]
I really enjoyed finding out more about Sabrina, Sandy. Her wish that the other Mom's would talk to her struck a nerve here.
I also remarked upon the missing "o" when I read that line.
I've come back to absorb all of this now that I'm settled for the night and will have no interruptions. My thanks to all of you for taking a closer look at Sabrina. I hope she made you smile, regardless of the reason.
Joy, I'm sure you know how much I appreciate your dissertation but I'll tell you again. I really, really appreciate your comments. I thought I left an incorrect their/there/they're somewhere, too. I went back and forth with that decision for several reasons that I want to discuss later. I hope you will remind me when we get there.
I do belive you're right Sandy. One can see her heart of gold shine through in the letter. Her "voice" is clear as day. Very, very well written - but of course, you don't need me to tell you that.
Im not usually into kids, since theyre kind of tiring and they dont know much about anything, but I need to get some money if I am to continue my research. I could filch off my rents' bank account through the net for some time--theyre pretty clueless--but if they notice the first thing theyll do is call the cops. And not all cops are clueless. So anyway, you think I could babysit your kids? How much do you pay? You can ask our neighbors as a reference--I babysat their twins once.
--Brian
P.S. The cut on the forehead totally wasn't my fault. They were pushing each other around. I did tell them to stop but they didnt listen. Anyway, its almost completely faded now--and at least now you can tell them apart, you know?
Faith, Hope, and Charity don't push so that ain't a problem.
Ok, this letter to you is so telling. It really gives her substance and I feel like I really like her. I am hoping that she finds the friends she really seems to want so badly. I can't wait to see what trouble she gets into.... I don't know why I think she is going to find trouble, but, I think she might??? Anyway, off to check out my psychic ablilities~~~~~~LOL~~~~
P.S. I have the draft of this list, sorry bout that, I will have to get my butt in gear and post it, since I am only, uh, a FEW months behind!!!!!