Discord and Harmony - poetry please 64 - xpressions

The notes of discord hard betray

The wounds that will not go away

The bitter sound, the frozen ground

The stone that has no words to say.

But sweet, remember sunlight still

Can shine, behind that cloud, and fill

The darkest night with lightest day

And reawaken love

I’ll say

The notes of discord carry truth

Lost promises and lies of youth

And broken hearts, and lives that part

With nothing left to heal

But you

Would seem to have forgotten this

That love was ever pain and bliss

Day is not light if night not dark

To welcome lover’s kiss

So play

The panpipes soft, combine the sound

Of pain and joy together found

Let harmony of light surround

This memory, this hope, this tryst.

And say

I love you still

Comments: 30

JOHN BECK Feb 6, 2009, 9:33pm EST

"Day is not light if night not dark..." So Shakespearian! Delightful message, format, lilt.
Bravo!

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Cheryl W. Feb 6, 2009, 9:53pm EST

This is lovely!

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Philip B. Feb 6, 2009, 10:00pm EST

Loved it!

Thanks for sharing!

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Feb 6, 2009, 11:31pm EST

You starting four lines are so tender and relate to your whole concept so nicely...

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Feb 6, 2009, 11:31pm EST

Featured in

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Magi the magical poet is riding the wind again Feb 7, 2009, 4:10am EST

Lyrical ... this could be a song.

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elizabeth e. Feb 7, 2009, 4:53am EST

Could be a conversation between two lovers but then again it could be a conversation one has with oneself. Each looking at love from a different perspective. I am of the mind to think positively of love....though pain comes with it, it's well worth the investment.

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maria (lurking in the shadows of the night) B. Feb 7, 2009, 6:51am EST

Wonderfully written poem Sheila. I also like that line: Day is not light if night not dark.

great work

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Jennifer aka Jenn B. Feb 7, 2009, 8:16am EST

oh, this is beautiful Shelia

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Michelle W. Feb 7, 2009, 9:21am EST

This is a really wonderful work of contrasts, woven together to make unity!

beautiful

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Mike Ellwood Feb 7, 2009, 9:57am EST

Good work, Sheila. Very skilful ~ a delight to read.

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Tracey W. Feb 7, 2009, 10:18am EST

Utterly beautiful, and perfect for Valentine's day. Sheila, you truly have a gift. I love the style you chose for this. It really flows, moving from thought to thought effortlessly. I especially love this part Would seem to have forgotten this/That love was ever pain and bliss/Day is not light if night not dark Well done!

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Marge H. Feb 7, 2009, 11:02am EST

Profound and beautiful. Words we can all relate to.

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Lisa Frost Feb 7, 2009, 12:03pm EST

great job!

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Donald M. Feb 7, 2009, 5:33pm EST

Great Sheila, a fine job.

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Kathy W. Feb 8, 2009, 10:09am EST

Each and every line, in connection with the others, is a joy to read.
I've been reading this out loud a couple of times, and yes--it is indeed a great song.
Absolutely stellar!
Wilka

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David P. Feb 8, 2009, 3:00pm EST

Exquisite start to finish and every line, lovely. Amor, replete with joy and pain, each teaching its own difficult set of lessons. The soaring highs and rock bottom lows wait for each in the attractions that draw our hearts and play songs that which include sweet-blending harmony and strident, grating discord. What a gift!

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Marge H. Feb 8, 2009, 3:12pm EST

I came back to reread this lovely poem and realized I hadn't given you a ten. I'd give you more if I could.

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Renee (Pres of Baby James Foundation) ~. Feb 8, 2009, 6:06pm EST

Lovely

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Alison H. Feb 9, 2009, 12:22am EST

Wonderful sentiments and composition!

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Svetlana Goryacheva Feb 9, 2009, 6:25am EST

Very well done, dear Sheila - you have met the "challenge" in the most charming way possible! ;-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.

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Sujata (funnily 'Suji' ) S. Feb 9, 2009, 10:20am EST

Heartiest Congrats dear !

Sheila you are a perpect poet to dlight and

riot the cause of prompt again best !!!

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William Dotani Feb 10, 2009, 12:51pm EST

The conversational tone in this is so natural and yet it is more like a lilting melody of gentle reminders, of truths, or where the hearts cares and shares in a way to lead to further hopes of harmony. This is excellent enjoyable verse.

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