by William Dotani
Member since:
October 27, 2006

Try Balancing

January 13, 2009 04:37 PM EST
views: 118 | rating: 10/10 (23 votes) | comments: 37

I'm trying to do two things
I'm trying to do three things
Growing to nine, Oh, what the heck
Multi-tasking, whistle while you work
I guess primal screaming, a bit terse
Find the even keel, try balancing

You've been over this and that
You've been over and been back
Mundane tale, imagine a whale
Knowing the sea is not impedimenta
Sort a gotcha there, like Cassandra
Can't quite put your finger in the pie

Social pass code, handy escape clause
Behind Venetian blinds, select pause
Take a load off, letting socks tend tired feet
Moments alone, home, meditation
Let the bells ring not aggravation
Just relax, let you mind find blue sky

I and you, family and relations
Mixed ensemble, somewhat like our nation
Postman leaves letters, another bill for thrills
Culturally misplaced, lifelines, dreams, fantasy
We see it here, there, waving goodbye history
Entertaining the moment, sensing the change
 

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Comments: 37

Bridget ♥ Jan 13, 2009, 4:38pm EST
Wonderful poem!
Sandy C. Jan 13, 2009, 4:48pm EST
That is very good.
Marge H. Jan 13, 2009, 5:21pm EST
It looks like you found a great way to relieve the stress. You multi-task very well. :)
lynn a. Jan 13, 2009, 5:29pm EST
And now I want to know how much dust is behind the venetian blinds. I've been going from point to point in the house and have finished nothing. Hope you have been more successful. And then you added in politics and world events and assimilation. Cool poem. I don't know what you call this style, but I like it a lot.
Lin B. Jan 13, 2009, 6:03pm EST
Excellent word crafting.
Janet Somewhere Up On The Mount Jan 13, 2009, 6:05pm EST
Thanks William. I enjoyed this.
Excelling has a lot going for it when compared to multi-tasking ... a jack of all trades and master of none.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Jan 13, 2009, 6:37pm EST
You sketched the most inner images.Soft, subtle and what mind is looking for.
M & M. Jan 13, 2009, 7:04pm EST
Thank you for your funny comment welcoming me back. You have a great sense of humor. You are right, I was out spying, hehheheheheh. I love black leather too.
Thanks for this poem too, very good. I enjoyed it.
Nancy L. Jan 13, 2009, 7:22pm EST
We all have to multi-task to some degree but learn when it's time to stop and take a break, otherwise we all go "TILT"!
Wade A. Jan 13, 2009, 7:33pm EST
Sounds like the day-to-day life of an editor. Ha ha! No, there's far more here than that. You are living...living.
You express emotive of life akin to strategically meandering the concourse of an airline terminal during express hour. Fast, furious, and so alive.
Enjoyable as always!
Marianne M. Jan 13, 2009, 8:05pm EST
Great subject here, Bill ... we all attempt multi-tasking every day, some with more success than others ...
Angela A. Jan 13, 2009, 8:05pm EST
Wonderful.
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
Donna S. Jan 13, 2009, 8:07pm EST
Great! sounds like my day to day life.
Debra C. Jan 13, 2009, 9:09pm EST
Multi-tasking. What's MmUuLlTtIi_-TtAaSsKkIiNnGg??
Lisa Frost Jan 13, 2009, 9:39pm EST
I multi my multitasking usually. I think it is because I am ADD and it helps to bounce around stuff..LOL

Good write!
Wilma M. Jan 13, 2009, 9:47pm EST
I multi task at work. At home, I prefer the single task approach.

In the last line of the 3rd stanza, is it supposed to be "let YOUR mind find blue sky"?
Wilma M. Jan 13, 2009, 9:48pm EST
This must be what you were talking about today when you said you had chores dropping on your head.

And since you asked, I do NOT find it comfortable under my desk! Too many other things under there!
Kushal Poddar Jan 13, 2009, 10:21pm EST
Another day in life.
But you shall survive
to write.
More meditation?

Evening is crossing
Deloris Wright Jan 13, 2009, 10:45pm EST
Hi William I enjoyed this poem. I think woman can multi task better then men. We do it every day if you have children and a Husbond to take care of.
JOHN BECK Jan 13, 2009, 11:11pm EST
How many balls can you keep in the air?
Liz [site-raven] Jan 13, 2009, 11:53pm EST
This is just terrific ... and damned funny too! Hey...William, Happy New Year!
F. Jeanette c. Jan 14, 2009, 1:44am EST
nice

10 4 u
Svetlana Goryacheva Jan 14, 2009, 10:51am EST
O-h-h, William, dear... to some degree I can relate. What a splendid poem! ;-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Marge H. Jan 14, 2009, 11:36am EST
You've been busy already this morning! Thank you so much. Sending you huge hugs and my gratitude.
Michelle W. Jan 14, 2009, 1:04pm EST
Interesting collage!

Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !
Donald M. Jan 14, 2009, 2:02pm EST
To much multitasking is why I dont play catch up on talking to my friends and viewing their articles.
Terry Collett Jan 14, 2009, 3:27pm EST
You have said it so well. Lines like these are right there:

We see it here, there, waving goodbye history
Entertaining the moment, sensing the change
Lin B. Jan 14, 2009, 3:44pm EST
Excellent word crafting.
Crystal Scordias Jan 14, 2009, 4:39pm EST
I like your style. You mix and match but don't quite spell it out, and that's good.

As for your computer that's going to kick the bucket - try HP.com; they have a computer under $300 that will knock your pants off.
sheila h. Jan 14, 2009, 5:59pm EST
whistle while Rome burns..or the casserole in the oven..
vewry funny..

it made me recall my long past days of multi tasking..:
driving my standard transmission firebird while smoking a cigarette,drinking coffee,eating a donut and putting on my mascara..
now a days it would be calling on the cell,driving the automatic and chewing gum..whie sippinga vitamin fortified water..
oh how boring !
lol
great poem,William..you capture the most mundane in a jar ,add the words and presto! Magic!
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Jan 14, 2009, 7:19pm EST
William, your poem feels exactly the way my mind feels when I am doing too many things at once!

Also, I think your last stanza beautifully describes the state of our current high-speed, melting-pot culture.
Rose H. Jan 16, 2009, 4:35pm EST
Just great - entertaining the moment - sensing the change.

Fun and entertaining, but it sends one's brain off in all directions. Tickling those grey cells.
Fran S. Jan 17, 2009, 5:38pm EST
great prose from you!!
Tracy Fabre Jan 19, 2009, 6:53pm EST
primal screaming is a bit terse, yes, but oh what a joy sometimes ~
Molly O. Jan 23, 2009, 1:31am EST
nice!
Dawn K. Jun 28, 2009, 5:19am EDT

i believe in entertaining the moments. one day at a time is how i live. lovely poem

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