Neurotoxicity

Love never even enters in

when the harsh words begin to fly.

It's all "You said/I said"

and we've both violated the rules.

My intentions are never to harm

but your perceptions assume too much,

explanations don't get through.

Words get muddled,

meanings twist in the wind.

My heart feels squeezed.

I stutter and stumble,

trip over what I want you to hear,

but fall unsatisfied,

my message being sent

but lost in translation.

My brain turns soft,

feels toxic.

When we met, you asked me to dance,

but I politely turned you down.

You flashed that killer smile and said,

"I'm sorry. I only meant to say

you look fat in those pants."

That should have been warning enough,

but I took you as a challenge,

and now you've poisoned my brain

so that I no longer know

what is wrong or right

or even what I really meant to say.

Comments: 27

Monica H. Jan 10, 2009, 1:00pm EST

So much emotion here. Awesome expression of feelings. You can put it into words so much better than I.

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Elaine S. Jan 10, 2009, 1:05pm EST

Very strong emotions

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Sheli out of her jammies and enjoying the Sun *. Jan 10, 2009, 1:10pm EST

Very strongly written-I enjoyed it!

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Nora Davenport Jan 10, 2009, 1:14pm EST

Wow.......such intensity of emotions.......very, very powerful........and very well written!

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Stacey *Mamasaid* D. Jan 10, 2009, 1:15pm EST

Powerful words, I enjoyed your work

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.* Sandi * Jan 10, 2009, 1:41pm EST

yes very nice

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Mary Ann S. Jan 10, 2009, 1:42pm EST

I love this poem. The beginning rememded me of fights I had with my mother.

Then the line,"When we met you asked me to dance." That could have been a line between my parents who met at a dance and had a storm relationship.

Beautiful poem. I got lots out of this.

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jan 10, 2009, 1:56pm EST

Very well thought out, so your brain isn't mush, just tired of the fights.

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Jennifer Lee Jan 10, 2009, 1:59pm EST

Intense and moving. I found it easy to relate to on many levels. Well written as always Sheila.

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for posting to our group. Cheers, Julia

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Sunaura *. Jan 10, 2009, 2:10pm EST

A lot of us are suffering from toxic brain syndrome - words are powerful

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Cheryl W. Jan 12, 2009, 4:02pm EST

A powerful and lovely poem.

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Krissy spreading my wings hoping to soar W. Jan 13, 2009, 2:09am EST

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Julie (there will always be a rainbow) G. Jan 13, 2009, 10:05am EST

Oh, wow! This is powerful, and any woman who has ever lived in an abusive relationship would have to be able to relate.

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Paul D Lefebvre Jan 13, 2009, 4:23pm EST

Excellent! Neuro and toxic; you got it perfectly. Thanks.

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M & M. Jan 13, 2009, 6:55pm EST

You are so talented, to bring forth such power and emotion with words.

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Donna S. Jan 13, 2009, 6:56pm EST

thank you for sharing.

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Alkistis Wechsler Jan 14, 2009, 5:02am EST

It is horrible when you want to give love and take care and then you loose your patience in front of mental weekness and then you get back those glittering eyes that are there only for the waitress ...

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Sarah (I want points) Jan 16, 2009, 2:23pm EST

Wow. Great title for the poem. This definitely speaks of emotional abuse to me.

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Haim Kadman Jan 17, 2009, 1:15pm EST

A good one, thanks.

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William Dotani Jan 18, 2009, 2:17pm EST

The revolving door of revenge does not get sweeter, it only hurts deeper.

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Sandi S. Jan 29, 2009, 5:06pm EST

The title drew me in!

Good work. And I have to agree with William Dotani's comment above!

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Angela A. Jan 29, 2009, 6:38pm EST

I love the line, "I'm sorry. I only meant to say

you look fat in those pants."

Quite brilliant!

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necee t. Jan 30, 2009, 2:48pm EST

wow, this is very emotional... Blessings to you and yours...

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Elise w. Mar 3, 2009, 12:10pm EST

ENCORE!!!

If this poem is about you.....I've felt your grief.

Very good word flow. :-)

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Purrrrrrrrrrr~Genki dashite~Nantoka naru-yo! S. Mar 27, 2009, 10:59am EDT

You're breaking my heart with this one, because this is what I've lived for the past three years. Communication breakdown.
Define this, define that, but I don't live for definitions, I live for substance of action.
Let's plan this, let's plan that, but I don't, I live now and here and love here and now.
He is the point I never wanted to understand.
I am the point he missed =(

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