Hole In My Pocket

A 10 for you.

Perfect.

Let me add another Amen.

Some people just seem to have a way of rubbing others the wrong way. I like your idea of unwinding by watching children play. Thank goodness for the happy moments in life or we'd go crazy.

Hole in my pocket I was expecting some funny stuffs falling out from it...but you are a mastermind and knows well to say all.I specially liked this


Peace has no perch to ponder, fierce winds defeating....

Almost like some threads on Gather, Bill.

I think this is my favorite, so far.

And I'll add my Amen, as well. May your vision for our children come true!

Wonderful message

Excellent word crafting..Thank you for sharing it with us.:>}

What a master of words and meanings can do with such a simple turn of phrase!! This is wonderful and poetry at it's best! Thank you!

I will add another amen. I see so much rage when I am out. Lots of angry drivers on the road. Not long ago my husband and I were at a store and my husband accidentally bumped someone's cart with his own. He immediately said "Excuse me" and you can imagine how surprised we were when she cursed him. We just walked away. I try to let all of the little things go by and save my rage for the big issues.

awesome!

I'll have to come back and reread it. It felt, to me, like you are telling the story of two different people.....or two aspects of the life of one (someone who had family, who now is homeless or out of luck and looked down on by society). So, I'll need to come back with a refreshed mind and read this again.

This one is a little hard for me to understand. But it is a good rant. Thanks

Tanya, This is about everyone from individual to social group.

I have some things to do.

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I'm confused, William. You seem to be decrying the rage you meet everywhere. Yet the last line of your first verse is adversarial.

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Amen my dear William, Amen for sure,,, truth for the soul,,,

Peace.

I'm sorry I don't have a big comment.
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting

I have written several different responses to this, and I have deleted each before submitting. There is something wrong in this society... not just the rage, but some lack of connection to humanity that can be seen in so many instances.

John Beck has it right.

Great

I think this is a wonderful poem.

wonderful William, I needed to read this right now, I need to calm down. thank you

Well done, Bill ... There's too much rage in too many people ... and it's frightening ...

I'm perfectly happy with your simple ending, and I LOOOOOOOOVE the first verse.

Kinetic. Visual. Personal. Amen.

The poetry is wonderful and the message is even better.

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What a way with words you have, William.

Actually quite moving and I'm so glad you expressed hope at the end. My fav:

Any answer fell from hole in my pocket
Explanation for this rant without rage
So here the soapbox greets the snowflakes
Enjoying watching the children at play
Hoping their world will have the key
To open into warm smiley arms of peace

Let it be so:)

Wilhelmine, I'm using a literary device used in short story. The first stanza is saying anyone, even those of good heart, can be drawn into feeling negative. So, I start with the premise that all have the need to understand their feelings and in so doing try to see past the bad to the good in the world and within the self, so there will be thought with desire to practice the idea of good.

Well said! There's a bounty of humanity, or lack thereof, in your words William and many other flavors too.

Great one, again! I am often confused by the unwarranted anger in others, and oh my, even from time to time in myself! Children and their joy do help!

Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !

In one part it sounds like an individual, then gets confusing and sounds within the household you abide. That the only peace comes from watching the innocent children play.

Wonderful!

Amen, indeed!

very nice, Amen was a good ending!

I like the ironic deadpan humor of this screed of muted outrage for the world we live in now, the world we´re leaving behind for future generations. The use of direct address to the powers that be is very effective here.

I love this! You have tugged on so many emotions. Here is how I saw these verses. There is a journey, a roller coaster of feeling of being insignificant to angry men, to making them want to see you as good and worthy, to wondering how you could make it a better and peaceful world even if you have to take some blame, then there is this flash of angry indifference to feel the need of let's say creative retribution, and then there's this gentle slide into a longing for peace "without" because you know the peace within, and realizing those with the goodness, hope, and peace need to help get it out to an angry world.

It's so easy to be a mirror and not to follow the image of God. It's so easy to forget the second commandment.

Simple pleasures, family moments, gentle souls, all these are cherished in the lines of your poem, so there is no real rant, just a tug at the heartstrings to keep reaching out to angry people one lovely, peaceful gesture at time.

The whole in the pocket keeps it light, keeps it from sounding angry. It also lets us know, if you had the answer it has slipped through your hands without the wisdom to apply it . . . and in doing so, you let us feel the human condition with you, where in the end, we do what we can day by day, and in the end it is in God's hand. Amen.

Well done.

Beautiful

Well written and I really enjoyed all the comments.