by William Dotani
Member since:
October 27, 2006

Mission

January 05, 2009 01:08 PM EST
views: 94 | rating: 10/10 (22 votes) | comments: 43

Shall I go on a mission, take a stroll on a hunt
Whatever I might fancy, rub a dub in the mud
Color pretty cover, just the facts, must and was
Roller coaster's ready, rush of dust, day of cause
Sweet day, rainbow scented, sunlight's embrace
Seconds, moments, hours, got the part, acting age

Mission, allow in, understatement, chase the wind
Twisting, turning reed, seeks relief, from dead end
Main street avenue painting, sound imagines you and me
Pure and natural, overall organic practical, eyes that read
A lovely word says dawning, it's early morning, in tea cup
As beautiful as dreaming, sun paints the sky, as clouds fuss

Aye, aye missive mission, dreams running, kite filled sky
Virtual minds holding hands, a Beatle's song, key too high
Just move over a bit, pages of ink, rough edges and brink
Take a seat, watch and smile as curvature of road blinks
Every age has difficulties, a scorecard, plus or minus
Neutrality in center space, hopes, wishfull daily kindness

 

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Comments: 43

Bridget ♥ Jan 5, 2009, 1:13pm EST
Very nicely written
Kimberly Ripley Jan 5, 2009, 1:25pm EST
Delightful. Light and hopeful. Left me with a wonderful feeling!
Toni V. Jan 5, 2009, 1:38pm EST
Great job, William.
Peter Joseph Swanson Jan 5, 2009, 2:02pm EST
You strung me along on a WILL party, there !!!
Nancy L. Jan 5, 2009, 2:32pm EST
I like your mission, can I come along?
Marge H. Jan 5, 2009, 2:38pm EST
I've read this three times. I'm not sure if I understand this but to me it feels like you are taking us, your virtual friends on a trip through y0ur life. Lovely imagery.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Jan 5, 2009, 2:48pm EST
You inspire hearts with your words.A great poem, William.
William Dotani Jan 5, 2009, 3:13pm EST
Marge, Spot on, but there's a bit more.
William Dotani Jan 5, 2009, 3:17pm EST
To read and understand this well, you need to find the rhythm, then think in layers with each layer fitting back into the previous layer; sort of an inversion. The tone is very positive.
Lin B. Jan 5, 2009, 3:59pm EST
This is wonderful and it touched me.
Connie H. Jan 5, 2009, 4:11pm EST
Excellent, I loved it!
Donna S. Jan 5, 2009, 5:13pm EST
most excellent
I enjoyed this airy ride, Bill. It's a bit like sailing up and away in a hot air balloon...at least, that's the feeling this poem invokes.
Cheryl W. Jan 5, 2009, 6:22pm EST
I love this, William. Delightful!
Elsie Duggan Jan 5, 2009, 6:28pm EST
Mission accomplished William, in more ways than one.
JOHN BECK Jan 5, 2009, 7:17pm EST
As you become increasingly enigmatic, Bill, you continue to weave the fullness of your life into intriguing poetry. Thanks for sharing the creations of your busy mind.
Jennifer aka Jenn B. Jan 5, 2009, 7:25pm EST
Having a mission in life and letting us in on it....cool
William M. Jan 5, 2009, 8:15pm EST
Very good.
Deloris Wright Jan 5, 2009, 8:51pm EST
I think that living your life is your mission and we get to come along as you remember things like the Beattles song
lynn a. Jan 5, 2009, 9:41pm EST
I like it. I like the flow. I like the collage of pictures and the feelings of cold, wind, etc. I just plain like it all.
lynn a. Jan 5, 2009, 9:43pm EST
mahshie mahshie kom e o kom e o e say. Children's song. Do you know what I am trying to remember? Did you ever hear it? I do know it was very common in the 40's. We sang this growing up. Now I can't remember it. I feel like I lost an important part of me. I spelled it the best I remember singing it 50 years ago.
Wilma M. Jan 5, 2009, 9:44pm EST
Thanks for letting us come along on your roller coaster ride.

I liked the image of a kite filled sky as it reminded me of one of my favorite beaches in Oregon where there are usually many kites flying. And that reminded me of lovely summer days without any snow.
Wilma M. Jan 5, 2009, 9:45pm EST
lynn, I think we need to hear the tune. I don't THINK it's familiar to me.

When you comment first appeared, I wondered what on earth you were talking about!
Sheila J. Jan 5, 2009, 10:16pm EST
I love the word play in your poem. Thanks for sharing!
Angela A. Jan 5, 2009, 10:46pm EST
This is a rather intriguing piece. I'm not quite sure what it means.
But, thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
Lisa Frost Jan 6, 2009, 3:04am EST
The depth requires more then one reading, but it pulls you back to examine a little closer. Wonderful.
Pepsie J. Jan 6, 2009, 6:31am EST
NIce William
This is a song ,isn't it?
I could hear a nice folksy melody...
elizabeth e. Jan 6, 2009, 7:49am EST
Life certainly is a roller coaster ride, William. At times, we seem to be racing up the hill, anticipating the next bend and the downward thrill, wind blowing in our hair. 'Course there are some dangers lurking...especially during the youth of our ride....but if we keep a positive attitude and see life for what it is....not take it too seriously....then in the end, we will be content.
William Dotani Jan 6, 2009, 9:12am EST
The mission is whatever you want to be in daydreams or in all you see, touch and feel around you. That's the theme of my poem.
Almost makes me feel like a teacher saying this because their were all types of learning and personality disorder objectives I had to write out each semester. I had no choice but to be sincere while wearing a necktie.
Virginia M. Jan 6, 2009, 9:34am EST
I've read this already, and came back to enjoy it again. On first reading, it can seem frivolous, but a closer look uncovers tidbits of deeper meaning. I especially like,
"Take a seat, watch and smile as curvature of road blinks
Every age has difficulties, a scorecard, plus or minus
Neutrality in center space..."
This is a good one, William! I love the pace.
William Dotani Jan 6, 2009, 9:42am EST
Virginia, Life is full of frivolous and sincere moments that can be equally enjoyable and I imagine you know that as do we all. I thought about this a few seconds and just accepted such as life. Anger subtracts and is negative in some way always.
Oh no! I'm in the deep end of the pool, but I'm a good swimmer.
Rose H. Jan 6, 2009, 10:25am EST
Loved the lightness of this poem and in particular the wishful, daily kindness:)
Barbara B. Jan 6, 2009, 10:32am EST
I loved going on this wonderful Mission with you William !!
Heather ~of the Whippets~ M. Jan 6, 2009, 3:43pm EST
Fantastic trip.
Marianne M. Jan 6, 2009, 9:03pm EST
Positive, upbeat poetic journey, Bill ...
debra g. Jan 7, 2009, 1:54am EST
Wonderful work.
Sheila Deeth Jan 7, 2009, 1:54pm EST
From mission to daily kindness, and what greater mission could there be. Lovely.
Wade A. Jan 7, 2009, 2:50pm EST
This has a nice playful quality to it. I can almost envision a young child on a summers day conjuring up games to play. Lovely work William.
Dena Straughn Jan 8, 2009, 1:38am EST
We only have moments, I think, where we press the cruel and taunting lies (or more disturbing the truths) to the edges of our minds and then bask in the warmth of bright love or even the hope of it and in doing so, paint the next scene to better our dreams, giving us that vision to forge ahead and to become beautiful in God's time.
Kushal Poddar Jan 8, 2009, 7:43am EST
Mission, allow in, understatement, chase the wind
Twisting, turning reed, seeks relief, from dead end
Main street avenue painting, sound imagines you and me
Pure and natural, overall organic practical, eyes that read
A lovely word says dawning, it's early morning, in tea cup
As beautiful as dreaming, sun paints the sky,


Breathless and beautiful.
Tracy Fabre Jan 9, 2009, 12:32am EST
I love the light mood of this poem ~
Michelle W. Jan 9, 2009, 11:37am EST
delightful!

Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !

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