by Sue T.
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September 27, 2008

A soliloquy ~

December 13, 2008 06:36 AM EST
views: 122 | rating: 10/10 (21 votes) | comments: 42

 

soliloquy

It is not your love that breathes me in and out.

I stand by myself, strong in the shadow of the night.

In the house of hearts.

If your gift is to devour me inside out, take it back.  I can devour myself.

It is not your strength that keeps me bound.

I hand you my weakness, gently in the shadow of the night.

In the house of dreams.

If your gift is to bind me, and damage my wings, take it back.  I can damage myself.

It is not your essence that feeds my soul.

I feed myself, lustfully in the shadow of the night.

In the house of nourishment.

If your gift is to starve me, and keep me in need, take it back. I can starve myself.

So here I stand, with myself, in the shadow of the night

In the light of my life

And I breathe in - head over heels

And I breathe out - heels over head

And I grow inside out

And laugh outside in.

For without your gifts, I am free to be myself.

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Comments: 42

JOHN BECK Dec 13, 2008, 6:42am EST
Wow! Way to shed dependency and make it perfectly clear!
"And I grow inside out
And laugh outside in."
I love it!
You are indeed free to be yourself. Congratulations!
Kushal Poddar Dec 13, 2008, 6:43am EST
"If your gift is to starve me, and keep me in need.." Wonderfully expressed.

The sound of sea
Svetlana Goryacheva Dec 13, 2008, 6:56am EST
Wonderfully expressed... kudos to you, dear Sue! ;-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
elizabeth e. Dec 13, 2008, 8:26am EST
Would that we all could be free of dependency.
Courtney C. Dec 13, 2008, 9:08am EST
That was awesome, thanks for sharing!
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Dec 13, 2008, 9:57am EST
It is a great moment of personal empowerment to know you can make it on your own. There is a huge difference between WANTING and NEEDING a relationship.
Leland Jamieson Dec 13, 2008, 12:00pm EST
It's striking just how binding a gift can be. Well rendered.
Nyota *Star* Dec 13, 2008, 2:38pm EST
A polite way of stating your independence.

Good write!
Elsie Duggan Dec 13, 2008, 5:22pm EST
This is very beautifully written and so true, and I congratulate you in the way you have put it down that you have found yourself, and don't need anyone else to take care of you, Wonderful feeling isn't it?
Sue T. Dec 13, 2008, 7:26pm EST
Thanks John ~ I never realized how many people try to stop other people from being themselves!
Thank you, Poddar and Svetlana, for being so supportive.
Thanks Elizabeth ~ I guess there is an element of dependency in every relationship and that can be healthy. It's when control rears its ugly head that you need to step back!
Sue T. Dec 13, 2008, 7:31pm EST
Thank you Sunshine ~ I think we can be our own worst enemies when it comes to being destructive.
Thank you, Selene. Nice to see you, I know you're very busy with your beautiful new grandbaby!
Courtney, thanks, Leland too.
Sue T. Dec 13, 2008, 7:37pm EST
Hello JustMe ~ Thank you, I think there are many people searching for someone to be in a relationship with, to fill some gap within, that they really need to fill themselves.
Thanks Nyota, and Elsie, yes, what a good feeling!
Marge H. Dec 13, 2008, 8:59pm EST
Simply amazing writing Sue and so profound. It's sad how many people never discover the truth here.
Sue T. Dec 14, 2008, 1:00am EST
Thank you Marianne. Sometimes we can only learn through personal experience.
Marge, you are always so supportive - thank you.
Stacey *Mamasaid* D. Dec 14, 2008, 10:06am EST
Gripping and powerful statement. Great work.
Ladybounty ~. Dec 14, 2008, 11:54am EST
Wow Sue what a poem......so powerful and proactive instead of passive. These gifts sound like nothing I want either! Great job!
Shelbia C. Dec 14, 2008, 2:31pm EST
I really enjoyed reading this. You captured my attention with the very first line.
lynn a. Dec 15, 2008, 12:56pm EST
Wow. This is striking in it's beauty and yet the lesson is so profound. You really said some of the most important truths I've ever read here. This is really great, Sue. So glad I found it.
Samantha G. Dec 15, 2008, 1:00pm EST
I love it! I really like the different houses you illustrate so well with your words. A beautifully written piece.
Teresa T. Dec 16, 2008, 4:12am EST
Very well done!
sheila h. Dec 16, 2008, 4:49am EST
Fantastic ,Sue..
This is an amazing
it builds and builds upon itself..
the determination evident at the start ,never apologetic
empowerment in poetry..
a feast of statement and every portion deliciously presented..
wonderful.
Marge H. Dec 17, 2008, 6:35pm EST
Came back to reread this and catch up on the comments.
Barbary Chaapel Dec 17, 2008, 7:19pm EST
Great feminist statement poem!

" For without your gifts, I am free to be myself." -
Sheila Deeth Dec 17, 2008, 8:51pm EST
Wow. This poem really drew me in. Very beautifully expressed.
Sue T. Dec 17, 2008, 10:23pm EST
I really appreciate all of your comments. Thank you so much.
Syed The Shah Dec 18, 2008, 9:22am EST
Marvelous, intrinsic poetry...
Love it...
Sue T. Dec 18, 2008, 6:44pm EST
Oh, hello, you're back, Syed. Thank you!
Pat Bertram Dec 19, 2008, 12:28am EST
Beautifully written. You're right, who needs gifts like that? Be yourself!
This really is top notch, Sue - the deep understandings are superbly conveyed. Ten stars are too little for this but that's all I am allowed to give.
Sue T. Dec 19, 2008, 4:04am EST
Pat and Magi ~ thank you so much.
William Dotani Dec 19, 2008, 4:21am EST
No way I could say this any better than John Beck and Magi. I love the flow of reading this.
John K. Dec 19, 2008, 8:30pm EST
That's it! Love is too often more about the glamour of being in love than a solid connection between two people. Speaking from experience, I find that it's easy to be caught up in an emotion without understanding what that emotion is. This rips apart that veil in such a verbose way.
Kudos, sue.
William Dotani Dec 20, 2008, 2:41am EST
To Whom It May concern seems a bit formal, so I'll just say to my Gather friends, Happy Holidays. I have had so many chores and things to do that it has been tough to find time to comment. I love to write and I try to set aside at minimum 2 hours a day just to write whatever. My thought is always of you, my audience. You are an inspiration and I try to be entertaining. I read all of your comments. I should respond more. I appreciate good or bad reviews. All I take as a positive. Please oh please give me 10 stars!!! My goodness, I feel like I'm in First grade. I could give a good squat about the stars. Well, it has become just impossible to reciprocate in a timely manner, so I'm just putting this in your comments as a way to say one word. Thanks.

May God bless.
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Dec 20, 2008, 10:38am EST
A beautiful soliloquy about the difference between love and lust.
Teresa T. Jan 11, 2009, 12:01am EST

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exquisite~how beautifully related that one must first thrill on their own self before they can share that joy with another!

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