by William Dotani
Member since:
October 27, 2006

Persnickety Personality Suggestion

December 11, 2008 05:07 PM UTC
views: 0 | comments: 39

Simple pimple, rather little but bright
Any other day okay, why oh why
Gala night spectacular, ballroom dance
Boy or girl dreaming splendid chance
Emotions, quite porous, tonight touch hands

Before any symphony feeds the scene
Here's Sue's story, rather little but bright
Gala day, oh no! of such fright
Polite Sue of course used no expletive
Simple pimple, drastic measures, porous daylight

Lamentations, store bought sackcloth, mirrored
Beyond farthest pale of Sue's soul
Dainty she, pimple certainly agreed
One might say it faint, but not to Suzy
Lotions, blended concoctions, creamy solutions

Peachy complexion, beau arrives, Sue smiles
Pink corsage, careful hands attach
Perfection seemed in store, for Sue, but vexed
Polite young man, what's that on your face?, grins
Persnickety personality, black eye Sue gives him

Sue's morale boosted, but she danced alone
Moral of ages, timely tomes
Philosophy generously wrinkled
Simple pimple etiquette, colored rose
Shines like Rudolph's nose
Of course it's a distraction
Sue packed a punch, simple pimple, not so gentle

 

Comments: 39

Heather M. Dec 11, 2008, 5:10pm UTC
:-)
Svetlana Goryacheva Dec 11, 2008, 5:12pm UTC
C'est charmant, mon cher ami... fitting for an operetta a-la Offenbach! :-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Lisa Frost Bailey Dec 11, 2008, 5:13pm UTC
LOL
Peter Joseph Swanson Dec 11, 2008, 5:15pm UTC
funny
William Dotani Dec 11, 2008, 5:22pm UTC
Marge gave me this idea with her comment. I wrote this between 9 and 11 this morning.
Leah Christensen Dec 11, 2008, 5:55pm UTC
A 10 for you.
Donna S. Dec 11, 2008, 6:34pm UTC
thats great
What a wonderful take on the dreaded pimple. Well Done William
Marge H. Dec 11, 2008, 7:09pm UTC
Ah yes, I remember those days well when pimples could be the determining factor to a successful date.
Marge H. Dec 11, 2008, 7:10pm UTC
I just love that word persnickety too. LOL
Debra C. Dec 11, 2008, 7:10pm UTC
Funny that so small a zit packs such a large punch ... or is it Sue;)
Tracy Fabre Dec 11, 2008, 7:44pm UTC
oh, LOL, William! Delightful.
Kimberly Ripley Dec 11, 2008, 8:23pm UTC
Wow....you've personified a zit! Your talent just grows and grows!!! (I loved it!!)
JOHN BECK Dec 11, 2008, 8:34pm UTC
Sad but true, Bill.
Clever verse!
Elsie Duggan Dec 11, 2008, 9:17pm UTC
I love it William, they do, those persnickety pimples seem to pop up at the least appropriate of times. You have told the story with such great zest and humor here, glad I'm too old to get them anymore.
Nancy L. Dec 11, 2008, 9:44pm UTC
It's the stress of anticipation that brings on the breakouts. I'll bet Sue has a wicked hook!
Donna C. Dec 11, 2008, 9:48pm UTC
Oh so true!!
Those persnickety pimples do pop
up at the least opportune times.
danny rocks Dec 11, 2008, 10:24pm UTC
Hi, It was a nice article and very interesting...........!
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William Dotani Dec 12, 2008, 12:03am UTC
I haven't been around much, but hopefully I'll have more time soon.
Paula Love Dec 12, 2008, 2:07am UTC
oh funny, I HATE when one of those dreadful things pops out. Its always at the most inopportune moment!
It takes you, Bill, to create a gut wrenching poem about pimples ... you ought to sell this verse to the pharmaceutical companies. LOL
Kay M Dec 12, 2008, 11:23am UTC
LOL. That guy was really asking for it.
Michelle W. Dec 12, 2008, 2:19pm UTC
Oh, too cute!!!

Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !
Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Dec 12, 2008, 3:46pm UTC
way cool, William...saw another shade of you.
Kathryn Flynn Dec 12, 2008, 5:04pm UTC
William, you are Sooo creative.....
Toni V. Dec 12, 2008, 7:05pm UTC
LOL. Great one William.
M M. Dec 13, 2008, 5:21pm UTC
You sure write good William. Thank you.
Marie J. R. Dec 13, 2008, 5:36pm UTC

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not funny poor thing,,, but, cool write,,, different,,, never heard of a pimple poem,,,
t b. Dec 13, 2008, 11:12pm UTC
Because she was stressed, that's why.
Most of life, we do to ourselves.
Sad but true.
Dena Straughn Dec 14, 2008, 2:47am UTC
Once again, I am laughing. I get a kick out of your silly truths.
Kelly M. Dec 14, 2008, 10:58am UTC
Thanks for posting to one for me one for you!
Curt L. Dec 14, 2008, 2:50pm UTC
Zit zah fun one, Mizter B! :-)
Deloris Wright Dec 15, 2008, 9:05pm UTC
great poem
I feel so sorry for her :( Poor little thing, trying so desperately to find a solution. Poor thing. And all her decorations, her dress, her pretty hair do, her makeup job ... nothing ... could take that ratty little thing out of the lime light :):)
Hmmmm, wonder if anyone has ever sprayed them with bug spray ... maybe they would run right off the face.
Donald M. Dec 16, 2008, 10:22pm UTC
We were raised with the wash your hands commands. Keep your hands off your face and you will not have blemishes. I can only remember one girl with pimples in my high school.
Wilma M. Jan 17, 2009, 12:09am UTC
That's hilarious! Those difficult teenage years when a pimple meant the end of the world!

Poor Sue.

I use the word persnickety a lot in conversation. I guess that's because it might describe me!
Wilma M. Jan 17, 2009, 12:09am UTC
Sheila's companion poem is worthy of a post in itself!

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