by ELLEN B.
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May 29, 2007

The Visit_100 word Stories-Week 40 Challenge.

December 09, 2008 05:04 PM EST
views: 47 | comments: 23

Carmella stared at the old photograph. Her father Luigi was in it as he lived. By the oven, holding a loaf of his famous French bread.  She could almost feel the heat from the stone oven he carried from camp to camp. She stood in the snowstorm by his hidden grave, placed here because as a Gypsy "Don" he was wanted, even in death.

She loved him so. She his favorite. As she turned to leave, the smell of fresh bread baking drifted to her nose, brought by the wind. OR was it?

Love was in the air.

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Comments: 23

Lisa Frost Dec 9, 2008, 5:06pm EST
wonderful grab, and interesting ending. Great Job!!!
ELLEN B. Dec 9, 2008, 5:12pm EST
Thanks Lisa, really had to throw this one out there, not a lot of time as usual. Much to tell you, later, maybe by a surprise:) Ellen B
Michael Harvey Dec 9, 2008, 5:16pm EST
Searing and descriptive. I can savory the smell of the French bread in the air
Bill's Spirit Dec 9, 2008, 5:24pm EST
Love your nuances!

French Bread and stone ovens. Marvelous !!
Kushal Poddar Dec 10, 2008, 5:47am EST
Absolutely beautiful!

Diary of a phoenix rising
Haim Kadman Dec 10, 2008, 2:10pm EST
Wow Ellen what a great piece Bizet would have done a dazzling opera out of it, it he was alive.
Donald M. Dec 10, 2008, 3:15pm EST
Sorry I had to remove my comment. Ellen that was a very good article.
I called you the wrong name. {blondes get confused sometimes. LOL]
ELLEN B. Dec 10, 2008, 3:50pm EST
That is ok Donald, I am a blonde also, and I have more than my share of moments:)) Glad you liked it. Ellen B
sheila h. Dec 10, 2008, 7:44pm EST
My this prompt brought out the paranormal!
nice job....:)
Wade A. Dec 11, 2008, 6:19am EST
Whoo! Intriguing and ethereal. There's a lot of depth here. I smell the bread also.
Nice work!
Rose H. Dec 11, 2008, 9:17am EST
I like it, intriguing on so many levels. I want to know more.
Kenna C. Dec 11, 2008, 10:27am EST
I love the ending ~ this is such a great snapshot! Smell is so attached to our memories, isn't it?
Heather ~of the Whippets~ M. Dec 11, 2008, 11:16am EST
Interesting drabble.
Pat M. Dec 11, 2008, 1:25pm EST
Well done Ellen.
Sue T. Dec 11, 2008, 5:05pm EST
That was very nice to read. It's amazing what memories a particular smell can trigger at times. Well done.
Pat Bertram Dec 11, 2008, 7:20pm EST
Nice imagery, especially the use of scent.
Kay M. Dec 11, 2008, 9:36pm EST
Great story Ellen. Smells trigger memories and memories trigger smell. There are times when I look at my father's photos that I could swear that I smell Old Spice,
Susan Budig Dec 12, 2008, 11:25am EST
I like this one, Ellen. You taught me a new term: Gypsy Don. This seems autobiographical or at the least, personal. Or was it pure fabrication?
Marge H. Dec 12, 2008, 5:09pm EST
A delight for the senses. Wonderful drabble.
Jan S. Dec 13, 2008, 12:32am EST
Wonderful story, very well written!
Mary (diet dr pepper junkie) T. Dec 13, 2008, 1:20am EST
that was sweet...
Gretchen Lee Bourquin Dec 13, 2008, 5:43am EST
Great job, Ellen
Beth - Doing God's work Daily J. Dec 28, 2008, 9:32pm EST
Great job.

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