Silent Tomb (revision)

well done!

A very, very powerful write, Cheryl. You so aptly describe the painful changes relationships can go through and the awful feeling of being alone within the relationship. Intimacy requires a lot more than what goes on in bed, as you said.

Soulful with a pinch of sadness, melacholic words describe the scene entwined with your feelings.

very profound

Very touching. Perhaps he could read it and know what you feel? I pray for your relationship to blossom back into what it once was... sometimes the fall and winter have to replenish for the spring.

Very powerful and emotionally evocative. I feel like there's an empty place in my stomach when I read the last eight lines. Touching!

Poignant, sad, and tragically common. Thanks for distilling your pain into a memorable poem.

THANKS FOR SHARING

Very nice work on this poem!

awww well done with your words. i so feel like that so much. You have capture a moment that som many have...well done as always hugs Deanna

It is very touching Cheryl!

I can't say any more than what has been said but this is one excellent piece of writing

The powerful words let the truth pour down on us. I've experienced the feelings, but never even thought of expressing them so well.
Thanks for sharing this.

Very powerful poem about the feelings of emptiness that can arise.

So sad

The tomb image is a good one, Cheryl.

Oh Cheryl ... what a bitter sweet freedom that allows you to share such an intimate story with this world we've all moved into. Really, "Thank you God for such a place as Gather." Who said "There's nothing new under the sun?" Solomon, the wisest man in the world. But he didn't know about the world of internet that was to be brought about by the revelation of God to man.

All of us ... step by step, have felt freer and freer to be transparent before each other. I have tears on my face, as I know many have as they read this sweet, sad tale of a few hours in your life. Because so many of us have gone through it. Love ... covered up by too much ?????. God, how do we get it back?

I remember, not long before my spouse left me; I was at the kitchen sink working as he came in the back door from work. "Hi." "Hey." As he walked past me I could feel the skin across my back almost prickle ... wanting so badly for him to reach out and touch me. But he didn't. So I fixed dinner.

Thanks Cheryl ... it really gives me lots to think about. What can I say to young married couples? "Lord, teach us what to say."
What do we do? It isn't what we planned.

There is so much emotion in this one. It is a powerful piece! Well written !